Lydia S.

@ellette-giselle

Sorry this one is long. I just had too much fun.

Leo

A grin rugged at his lips. He turned to encompass the entire hall with it’s gold name plates and carved enamel in a wave of his hand. “Welcome to Destina Elite Lounge Rooms, also known as the administration offices. Here’s where the head of the school departments come to work…[Read more]

@keilah-h yea basically! @freed_and_redeemed thank you! ALSO HIII!

@freed_and_redeemed

*Visible anguish*

You just…leave us…with that?!?

Cruelty of an author. Misuse of cliffhangers. Undeniable suspense.

Ahhhhhhhh…

…

Great job! I don’t like any of these guys. Except Riker of course. And Leon, wherever he is right now…

And though I’ve felt sorry for Franz,  he abused a child.

So yeah. Anxiously…[Read more]

I also liked the way Leon realizes he’s dying, and that he doesn’t have much time left to work here. The urgency that comes over his actions was real to me.

And then the whole “you’re crazy but I still kinda admire your attitude” thing was funny, but unfortunately real.

@ellette-giselle

Okay. XD

1. It directly applied to today. Ian was hopeless. Utterly hopeless. And there really wasn’t anything better than Heaven itself to offer him. Most people today are already living in hell. They need to know heaven is real.
2. We saw that suicide attempt coming, even though you didn’t spell that out. And then you thwarted a…

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@ellette-giselle

Where did you come from?!?! 😂

*Wiggles fingers mysteriously* Narnia…

I wonder what is hooking everyone so much about this section?! Why do y’all like it so much?

I guess it felt well balanced to me, better than some of the others. You did more show than tell; your characters were interacting with each other and their own st…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

It’s Rolf! XD I was expecting someone from Vandalia or somewhere like that, not Rolf.

And yeah. I actually read the chapters in my email to avoid spoiling, although it does mean I often forget to comment.

But oooooo, I liked this chapter. Definitely ready for the next one.

(And I still don’t think this book is darker than the…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Leo

The elevator rattled on its assent, nearly drowning out the kid’s quiet words. Leo leaned back against the smooth metal wall an, enjoying the rythmic click of well built machinery even if it was a bit rough. His thumbs hooked into his belt.

“Ah, me too, kid. A title’d probably make it that much harder to be inconspicuous.”…[Read more]

@koshka Thank you! Yes, while I’m probably going to aim a bit in the middle of YA and Middle grade, I’m just not sure how comfortable I am at least in this drafting stage with certain issues and of course this is a CLEAN work/series, so while I will deal with heavy issues, making it more YA, and writing style as well (I hope lol!) I don’t want to…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Well done! I appreciate how you wrote that in a way that a younger audience wouldn’t understand his implications, yet you didn’t shy away from the point. And oh, Ara.

She should have told him. But that’s not an easy thing to say.

And November. Dear, loving November.

I hope this Uncle beats the snot from that kid in one way or…[Read more]

and if it feels like im just bullying November I am SORRY its just cuz im writing the first scenes/first book and basically this book has a lot of rough scenes for November…this was his life…sad to say…It gets better gang! He has some good scenes with Ara!

and yea, I know its rough….no critiques plz XD

@elishavet-pidyon @keilah-h @whalekeeper @loopylin @freed_and_redeemed @anyone else lol

SOOO I just finished writing most of a scene (it’s not finished yet) but I wanted to share it cuz…ya

SOME TRIGGER WARNINGS!

There is some unwanted flirting, nothing too intense, but the guy is not nice and makes Ara very uncomfortable.

And…more November…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon yea it’s a long journey…for all of them, but his and Corvina’s is definitely the longest.

@keilah-h so basically, they’re all “destined” by God for this journey they’re going on. When they get to Luna’s story, Luna has been raised by an entire different race, because her ppl was wiped out leaving only her. But she was raised…[Read more]

@whalekeeper oooh! I like this question because…it actually depends on WHERE I ended up XD

Basically my world is just that- a WORLD

Kinda like earth, it has a VAST majority if different kingdoms, countries, lands, etc, so like…I may survive great in one place but elsewhere? NOPE XD

So like Cirque? PSH I guess it depends on who is ruling it…[Read more]

But November is my loving baby. He holds so much love in his heart and he just wants the same love. (in fact when my babies receive their “crystals” representing their God-given gifting, November’s actually IS love.)

@elishavet-pidyon bruh SOOOB thank you for your words because that is the exact emotion I am trying to portray. and while it’s heartbreaking that is exactly what is happening…

My books do deal with some deep heavy themes…they do have their lighthearted moments though don’t worry! But…the world is a dark place, and my goal has always been…[Read more]

@keilah-h I’m so glad he’s coming across that way!! @loopylin thank you! I love Anie’s accent too

@ellette-giselle

XD

Leo

He paused with his hand on the elevator button and looked back at Rory.

“Be a bit hard to thrash fear out with more fear, don’t you think?” He watched the kid’s eyes narrow a bit in thought, then continued half to himself. “No, they wanted you to be more afraid of them than anything else, not make you unafraid. Only…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I was thinking up the elevator to the top floor and a empty office (possibly with a frustrated teacher who was trying to prepare their next lesson and got dropped on the head)?

Leo

“Knighted?” His eyebrows furrowed together. “It’s an archaic practice of dedicating elite soldiers called knights. A thousand years ago boys would…[Read more]