Loopy

@ellette-giselle

Yep lol.

Yeah, that makes sense. I couldn’t remember if it was an area he went through often or not.

Gotcha. Yeah, I get that. I was wondering if she might become a love interest for Julian, but if not, it’s probably better not to involve her too much.

@hybridlore

No problem. I guessed I’d get your attention with the second scene rather then the first. 😂

Well, I mentioned that Julian didn’t ever go down there, so his reputation got around through gossip rather then his own words.

She will become a part of the church, but she and Julian will not really have any scenes together. 1, it’s not…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

To be honest, I kind of guessed she was going to be a prostitute, so Julian’s reaction seemed a little much (especially to seeing her bare shoulder or whatever lol.) But then I reminded myself that it was different back then, so it made sense.

I would like to see her become a bigger part of the story, unless that doesn’t wor…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Yep that’s true.

YES!! Thank you! It is!

@hybridlore

If you can pause a moment in your sorrow over Leon, what did you think of the scene with Julian and Rosalind?

not my video btw

have a day gecko y’all

@hybridlore lol

@ellette-giselle well it’s cause Leon’s being whipped and will probably die.

But I mean like we should be used to that by now. Julian helping Rosalind is novel and thus should get attention.

@keilah-h

I’ve tried. I think she enjoys tormenting us 😂

@hybridlore

Yeah. A friend told me to split it or else he’ll wait to read it when he’s in solitary confinement. 😂

@keilah-h

Yeah! I’m glad you mentioned Julian. Most of the focus seems to be on Leon. I wonder why………… 🤔🤣

Do you think I’m really gonna tell you that?

@ellette-giselle wow! What a section. Between Julian’s encounter and Leon’s torture, this was a lot.

Is Leon gonna die or will his life be spared? (even if only for a little while longer)

one thing I’ll suggest, is that I feel like you don’t really introduce the family to us in the first few chapters. At first I wasn’t even sure if Blake was their sibling or not XDXD

They do have a HUGE family, so setting a solid foundation and making all the siblings and the parents unique and established in our minds would be a big thing you…[Read more]

@esther-c

Sorry it took me so long to get to this!!!
I like it a lot!!!! <3 keep it up!!!!

@ellette-giselle
Ohhhh, okay. Wow, that is a longgg book. XD

@stephie that first one lol

literally me

I have dozens of stories but only like three are properly finished….

@hybridlore

I don’t know. You see, because I split Leon and Julian’s story, this book got to 1200+ book pages, so I’m going to cut it in half, but it’s still one full book on the Word Document. I think we only have about 100 Word Doc pages left before the place I planned to split the book, but I could be mistaken.

@ellette-giselle

Oh, okay. Out of how many pages total?

And are these Word/Docs pages, or like actual book pages?

@hybridlore

Hmm, I’m not sure.

I think we have close to 100 pages left.

@ellette-giselle

Augghhhhh.

Wow, this book felt way shorter than the second one. Is that the case, or was it just me?

@hybridlore

Please tell me you’re not really going to kill him off.

*goes back and rereads section*

He felt himself shaking and he tried to twist away from the source of the blows but couldn’t. As darkness closed in, the pain began to lesson until all he could feel was fire burning through him.

The overseer struck again and again and aga…[Read more]