Loopy

That looks great!

One thing on the talons–you said you’re not a fan of how they turned out. Just make them longer. I’ll show you a picture when I’m done with some online tutoring.

Also make the lines on his face a little less obvious. He is still fairly young. (Maybe I should’ve gone for a picture where his face is less snarly lol) He…[Read more]

@grcr awesome thanks!

Now that I’m going back to the beginning…

This is really hard XD

because I know you’re trying to go for the “chaos” vibes of a big family as they get ready for church and the party. You set up Hallie, Easton, and the parents pretty well, especially for the fast-paced scene, but the other siblings kind of disappear throughout the book.

Maybe…[Read more]

@esther-c

To be honest, I’m not really sure.

I might have to reread it a little more and let you know XD

also, do you mind if I post it other places/send it to my friends once you’re finished? I will make sure to credit you somehow and make it obvious that it’s not my art. But if you’re not comfortable with that, that’s totally okay.

@grcr thanks!

Wait, you commented with your email already? Slay

@savannah_grace2009

😆 <3<3 Ideas are my bread and butter, sister. (Well, the writing part? Eehhhhhh not so much but who can blame me am I right?)

I will be on here for the next couple hours while I plot a little thingy on the family computer. This is my time to do that while the house goes dark. My email will be on my profile during that time,…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Ok thank you!!

I was thinking there needed to be more family interaction too. I’m glad you caught that. Is there a certain spot on the book that you think those types of scenes would fit best? (If not, that’s fine)

Ok yes!! I will for sure do that! It will be fun for me to take time to flesh out the characters individually…[Read more]

There are three toes instead of four here, but this is a decent approximation of him:

i gotta find a better clothes/tail and talons one, be right back

do I have more screenshots of him on my gallery than I should? probably.

the “he’s really good at killing” angle lol

All right, I got images:

not his usual clothes but here’s some face detail

@loopylin thank you!! glad you enjoyed it.

@grcr Why not then:

Name: Mick Lawrence Mundy

Age: 30, but he is a little more rugged than most cause he’s an outdoors kinda guy.

Personality: Very much a tough guy and a loner, most of the time at least. (His bio page on the site for the game I pulled him from says this: “In his former life as a tracker of dangerous game in the u…[Read more]

@rae

Why do I feel like Sniper would like cheesecake? XD. I don’t know, I can just picture him denying that he enjoys it.

AHAHAHA This is canon now.

it’s just be like this:

Scout, looking at the food on the table: I could’ve sworn I set out more slices of cheesecake.

Huntress: Since it wasn’t me, I’d blame Sniper.

Sniper: W…

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@esther-c

I would just like to see it set up a little more at the very beginning chapters.

I know you’re going for chaos on the Sunday morning before church, but like I mentioned before, since Easton and Hallie’s family is a big one, I think you need to focus more on their family and the dynamics. I’d love to see Hallie’s closeness with her mom…[Read more]

@grcr @savannah_grace2009

Thank you girls so much for reading through my book and supporting me!! 💕💕 I so so so appreciate you! ❤️

Your comments have given me a lot more confidence in the plot and characters, which I definitely needed going into a third draft.

Are there any scenes you’d like to see added? Or characters you’d like to see mor…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!! you’re the best and I always love exchanging ideas with you <3