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Rochellaine replied to the topic Writers' Corner #15 in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 5 months ago
@seekjustice Haha! 🙂 Yes, definitely we need to be praying. And no, the world will never learn.
I’ll be departing for about fifteen minutes or so. See you in a bit!
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Rochellaine replied to the topic Writers' Corner #15 in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 5 months ago
@seekjustice @catwing Oh, I hope I didn’t just freak you guys out. 🙁 Sorry! I just heard the news and wondered if you had.
I don’t know if your families talk about big world events like this or not, so maybe I shouldn’t have said anything…
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Rochellaine replied to the topic Writers' Corner #15 in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 5 months ago
@seekjustice @catwing Well, we (the U.S.) just bombed Syria. We’ve been talking with Russia for several days trying to decide whether we want to start WWIII. We don’t know yet what Russia will do in return, since they’re supporting Syria. I think we bombed places, not people, but I don’t know exactly, since it just happened. Our relations wit…[Read more]
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Rochellaine replied to the topic Writers' Corner #15 in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 5 months ago
@seekjustice Hey! I’m finally back. 🙂
How’s it going?
By the way, have you been hearing the world news?
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Ariel Ashira replied to the topic Needs Answers in the forum Novel Critique Requests 8 years, 5 months ago
@livgiordano That would be great! My email is imexinart@gmail.com and make sure to let me know who you are in the subject line.
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filewriter@base13x replied to the topic Needs Answers in the forum Novel Critique Requests 8 years, 5 months ago
@ariel-ashira. I loved her poem too! Thanks for answering those questions. I have noticed that I need a lot more description in my writing. Agh I really need to work on that. It is good to have a second opinion. Thank you!
Yes, @livgiordano does really good poetry. She did an awesome poem for a story we are coauthoring. It was more like a story,…[Read more]
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Ariel Ashira replied to the topic Needs Answers in the forum Novel Critique Requests 8 years, 5 months ago
😀 I was going to send you a friend request. You beat me to it! @livgiordano
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Rochellaine replied to the topic Writers' Corner #15 in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 5 months ago
@seekjustice I’d love to word war with you, but unfortunately, I’m having to rewrite that section of my western, so it’d basically be cheating to war with you right now, since I’m half copying off of my old writing! 😛
I think I’m almost done with that, though, so maybe we can war later tonight. (Or later this afternoon I guess…)
Aaand,…[Read more]
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Ariel Ashira replied to the topic Needs Answers in the forum Novel Critique Requests 8 years, 5 months ago
@livgiordano Yes, please post more!! It really has helped me. I memorized it. I think of it all the time. And good job getting @filewriterbase13x to join. She’s been awesome! Did you read The Light Triumphs? Its the first I have submitted to KP, but you might enjoy it.
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Ariel Ashira replied to the topic Needs Answers in the forum Novel Critique Requests 8 years, 5 months ago
@livgiordano Oh my goodness! WOW! Let me tell you that is one of my FAVORITE poems on planet earth!!! I love it! And it came at a time in my life when I really needed that. (It was before I joined KP.) Yeah, it was so awesome I wrote it it my diary. And I wanna hang it on the wall. Its so beautiful!!!
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Ariel Ashira replied to the topic Needs Answers in the forum Novel Critique Requests 8 years, 5 months ago
@livgiordano Are you the one who wrote the poem “Broken”!!!!????
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Ariel Ashira replied to the topic Needs Answers in the forum Novel Critique Requests 8 years, 5 months ago
@filewriterbase13x Okay, sure.
I think you were pretty detailed. You could describe the room and the people’s faces a little more.
I have a good idea of the guy. His face is not clear in my mind though.
The emotion was good. It wouldn’t be bad if there was more though. A few words describing it a little more would help.
I would def…[Read more]
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filewriter@base13x replied to the topic Needs Answers in the forum Novel Critique Requests 8 years, 5 months ago
Oh, @ariel-ashira, sorry I didn’t answer your question. It is in the future. I imagine it in the late 2000s or maybe even later, but I don’t really have a set date.
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filewriter@base13x replied to the topic Needs Answers in the forum Novel Critique Requests 8 years, 5 months ago
@ariel-ashira, thanks! I don’t want to be a pest, but can you answer any of my questions?
Hmm, what do you think @livgiordano ? Do we know each other? Just kidding, yes we do. Quite well actually. At least I think so. Liv is one of my best friends in the world. She’s pretty awesome. *high fives*
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Ariel Ashira replied to the topic Needs Answers in the forum Novel Critique Requests 8 years, 5 months ago
@filewriterbase13x I like it! Its really good! I think its well balanced with the things you mentioned. What era is it? Modern?
Do you and livgiordano know eachother?
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filewriter@base13x replied to the topic Needs Answers in the forum Novel Critique Requests 8 years, 5 months ago
@livgiordano. Aw, that’s nice of you to say. Yeah, I would have tagged you too, but you have already read this part and know like the whole plot already. 😁
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filewriter@base13x replied to the topic Needs Answers in the forum Novel Critique Requests 8 years, 5 months ago
Oh, and I guess I put the mock cover on there too. I didn’t mean to do that. Oh well, you guys will probably like that anyways.
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filewriter@base13x started the topic Needs Answers in the forum Novel Critique Requests 8 years, 5 months ago
Ok, guys. I really wanted to try this, and I think (hope) I will learn a lot of stuff from this. I hope you guys will help me by honestly critiquing this. What is here is my prologue and almost all of chapter 1. My writing is basically the same all the way through style wise, at least.
What I mostly want to know is:
1) Do I give enough…[Read more]
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Rochellaine replied to the topic Writers' Corner #15 in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 5 months ago
@skredder Okay, I’ve got to go now. I don’t know if you’re still here, but if you are, happy writing! I got a lot done, so I’m very happy.
Goodbye!
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Rochellaine replied to the topic Writers' Corner #15 in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 5 months ago
@ingridrd Whoops! I missed you. 🙁 Have fun! I have a question that you can answer sometime whenever you get the chance: Is this a particular version of Cinderella you’re doing? Or did someone you know write the script specifically for this performance?
@skredder Yes, I know. 😉 I really can’t complain, because I did the same thing to some…[Read more]
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