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Things are about to get bad.
Ooooh
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
@whalekeeper
Thank you! Maybe I should have tucked Alan’s elbow under the gate.
@keilah-h
Thanks for the tip on arm length!Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
A man had Rolf in a tight grip, the point of a knife to his back. “Don’t move,” he growled at Leon.
Oh…!
Leon started in surprise. The robbers were being robbed!
There’s always a bigger fish.
Out of the frying pan and into the fire.
He motioned to two of his men, and they dragged Leon to his feet. “I will kill you both,” the slave trader snarled. He glared at them and fingered the blade of his knife. He made a slashing motion at Rolf, who flinched slightly but stayed silent, watching the man.
I thought his reaction would be to make them his own slaves or something, but maybe that will occur to him later.
I’m kind of hoping that it will take a lot of time for Leon and Rolf to escape. So, in a weird way, I was glad to see the newcomers didn’t end up being friends, but enemies with a personal grudge against the heroes. I know there have been other dangers and we’ve heard about some awful things the Empire does, but this made the threat struggle more real for this book. Getting through it quickly might take away from this again.
It will also be interesting to see the impact of this on Julian if his friends just disappear.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
Okay. You kind of confirmed my suspicions (room for improvement 👍), but I’m glad Alan’s arms look fine to you. Thank you!
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle @theducktator
I threw together a 9-point outline for Martha as well, since she will be a major point of view character in this book as well. It’s not quite complete, such as I’m not really sure what to do for her amplified pressure. But here is what I have so far:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pPdo2ZDjWhg9zeia1TtqsI0ZoLBqmTD8XNjJfoxkG4c/edit?usp=sharing
It’s after Alan’s in this.
Once I am more confident with this, I think I will start throwing together the final outline.
What are your thoughts? How well does this fit with Alan’s arc (does it add to or take away)?
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
Actually, you know what would be funny? If one of the guys’ minds went in the same direction as mine and said something like ‘Yes, mom’ to Julian. And then, he would be stuck with that nickname for the rest of the story.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
If he was joking would it work?
I think so. Make Aelic respond with another joke as well. Even if it just making a funny expression and saying “Ah”
Sure thing! I’ll wait until they’re published. 😉
Sounds good!
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
In Canada, do you have the same guaranteed rights as in the US’s Constitution? I’m assuming it’s very similar. Freedom of assembly, freedom of speech, freedom of religion, etc.?
Yes, we do have the same rights, but that doesn’t stop teachers from grading things based on what you write about instead of the actual quality of writing. I’ve heard stories of people getting a really good grade for a poorly written essay (if I recall correctly, this person only turned in a few sentences and just stated what she thought without looking for any evidence), just because this person agreed with the teacher on the topic. Another student who wrote a really well-written essay that disagreed with the teacher got a bad mark. After that, he lost the motivation to spend the time writing a well-structured essay.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
Sorry I am late to reply.
Thank you for offering to help. However, would you mind waiting until I start posting chapters? I have a few people helping me with this already and I am hoping some people who are reading the draft I will be posting on here will not know what is happening in the story yet. Hopefully, it won’t be too long before I start posting chapters. Thank you!
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
A drawing of toothless I did for a friend. I tried out a bit of watercolour here.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
I’m going to ask for some critique on this drawing regarding the proportions. I often draw characters separately, so am wondering how they fit together. I fear I may have made the horse too small. Also, what do you think of the character’s arm length?
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
Your figures look good. I usually do a harder outline around my characters to help distinguish them from the background. This was a tip I recall my Dad giving me a long while ago. The closer the object is to the front, the darker the outline should be. I also make sure my lines connect. If you’re asking about shading as well, I like to add a touch of shade to the other side of the object as well, so that the light is caught between two areas of darkness. Although I do know that some objects, especially ones with hair, can also catch a bright patch of light right at the edge. But these things may just be my style as well.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
In my mind he says it in a joking way. Is that the impression you get? And if so, does it still sound like a mother?
No, I didn’t get that impression much. Maybe if you had mentioned him smiling, I imagined him with a serious/lecturing frown on his face as he said this.
Actually, this makes me think more of my grandma or sisters, but it just seems like a motherly thing to do if done is seriousness.
Hey, this is your book. You’ve put a tone into this, and like I said, I’ve been getting the go-ahead from several people. This is totally up to you, and if you have any hesitation we’ll skip it.Or we can even wait until they’re published. I’m at the point where I have enough references to get off the ground, so I don’t need it anymore. So if you want to wait or not do it at all, it’s not going to hurt my chances.
Sorry. Sometimes, I shy away from commitment and speak with uncertainty (that’s one of the ways my character, Eric, is like me). Maybe waiting until they are published would be a good idea, but yes, I will let you use them as a reference.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
Awkward bathroom conversations. Fun…
A monitor is watching. Creepy. I do know that feeling of, I could answer what I really think, but I know I will get bad marks. Although, the stakes are higher for Everette and Sara. Why does this class keep on reminding me of my Grade 11 English 20?
I see some family tension on the horizon in the Bauer family, but Alec doesn’t seem fully convinced at the moment that dealing with the religious groups is the right thing to do.
Good chapters again!
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.