Linus Smallprint

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Okay y’all! Here I go.

Min

So one thing would be Friedrich is not left-handed, but I never specified that so that’s on me. His hair isn’t quite a wavy as I pictured, but otherwise he’s pretty spot on. I like the boots, though not quite the style I was thinking of either. Your shadin…[Read more]

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That’s because I forgot about that one.

HAHA! that makes sense. I was trying to figure out what you changed. lol.

Just for fun, if either of you has soundtrack suggestions for my book, let me know.

ooo, will do!!

@linus-smallprint ok! I don’t have a lot of fantasy soundtrack suggestions, most of my go-tos sound more modern, but if I come to a point in the story that I think a song I listened to fits with, I’ll post it!

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Ooo, I like the Charles song!!

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WAY BETTER!

Ok, the magic thing is a little fuzzy still. I read it over several times and I think I have a good idea to where you could fix the whole thing very simply but make it so the reader understands using magic to stop from shattering wasn’t right.

“As time went by, we grew to love the power we had and started to allow o…

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@linus-smallprint OOH I LOVE THAT SONG.

It’s got Spanish roots and I love that because that’s where my family came from (well, my parents are Puerto Rican and I was born in America, but still)

when we actually went to Spain earlier this year there were a couple guys playing that genre of song in an alleyway and it was so cool.

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Honestly, that was the obligation I felt writing this, so no wonder you picked that up from reading it.

lol. It felt like it.

I think your dad has some really good advice. I would go with that.

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Hmm. I didn’t want to dwell too long on it, since both the reader and Alan want to hear Charles’s story more. But I wanted to include this as well, because, like I said, a fantasy book telling you not to read fantasy books would just be weird. Perhaps I have room to fit in more here? I could also try coming back to this lat…

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 Anyway, I think he needs some pointy ears and a ridiculous amount of equipment on his back, eh?

😠

No.

Nope.

Not happening.

lol

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Thanks y’all!

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Yes and No. I haven’t been able to find my style yet, but that drawing is part of the process of finding it. I’ve been doing different styles lately, both honing my observations to paper skills and looking at many styles. I think mine will end up being similar to that one in the end though, since I’ve started to really enjoy t…[Read more]

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It’s very good, but the whole reading fantasy seemed like you started to go into it and then pulled back and skirt5ed the whole problem. I feel like if it’s going to be there at all it needs more. At the moment it feels kinda like “Why?” If you have nothing more to say on the matter, I would consider cutting it.

Also, the fact…[Read more]

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I don’t think that will be too much of a problem. Aaron has stepped into a sort of parent roll with the children. (All of the young adults have.)

but seems you are heading in the direction of Aaron and Sabina getting married and being parents to Joseph.

So it seems.

@linus-smallprint Yeah, I thought of having it maybe be something humans did to themselves, but I decided that since there’s no real magic in this universe, that would have to be through such means as, say, genetic experimentation (they combined human DNA with that of animals to better survive the planets. But that didn’t make sense to me either,…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint ooh that was good!

one question: Did Jesus come to die in this universe as well, Aslan style? Or did He only die for humankind’s sin in Earth, and somehow it spread to all descendants of Adam no matter what universe?

@linus-smallprint Kinda.

So in my current WIP, which is a fanfic but I might set some original stories in the same universe, instead of the Earth as one planet, it’s a whole galaxy, and each planet roughly corresponds to a country in our world. The different species I told you about in the other forum–Drachenheul, Argonites, Changelings,…[Read more]

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Aaron might see him as a little brother, but to Joseph Aaron stepped into the place of father when Joseph’s own father died on the walls. I think it might have been more of a big brother little brother relationship if Aaron hadn’t of been right there to fill that gap when Joseph lost his father.

Noah and Darrien have more of a…[Read more]

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Noah’s trickery, which he learned when gambling, has now become a way to entertain children. I like it!

YES! That’s what I was thinking!

Ah, the little boy who knows everything and has a ‘simple’ solution to every problem. I know this character. Remind me, how old is Joseph? 10 or 11, right?

haha! I LOVE Joseph. He is so funny…[Read more]

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Awesome. Haha, I do NOT work well with deadlines. (In case you didn’t notice, I always submit my stuff crazy early. lol)