Linus Smallprint

@linus-smallprint

I had no idea what that picture was from. i just saw the meme the other day and thought of it. It was perfect.

Sounds like you are speaking form experience here

Let’s just say, a long time ago, the last fight I had with my brother ended when mom duct taped our wrists together.

For the whole day.

We had to do school t…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Ooo, that chapter was very well written. I was feeling very tense, even though I knew what was going to happen. lol.

Yeah, Tyn is in a good position. Have her do it. This will be so, so bad for Eric. Plus, Tyn is in a bad mood, so she may even scold him.

I have never met a guy that didn’t absolutely hate it when a girl scolded him.

@linus-smallprint

Yup, it’s Eric. (How did you know?)

um…. because it was obvious since Martha got captured that he was a liability, and by the chapter you just wrote I knew he was going to get caught or alert the soldiers or something. (I may overstudy literary patterns.)

Sooo, maybe I’m blind, but I’m not seeing the problem……….. w…[Read more]

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It occurs to me that Sabina and Julian are similar. Both have a brother who became a Christian, and they both thought he had gone crazy, which made them resistant to hearing the gospel and angry at whoever shared it with their brother. So I’m wondering if Sabina is going to recall how she acted and how this may impact her i…

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@linus-smallprint LOL.

@ellette-giselle

Really?! I didn’t know you wrote dystopian! What’s it about?

@linus-smallprint

Oh my goodness.

That is so bad.

I love it!!

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Joseph curled up in his bed. He could hear the murmur of voices downstairs and knew that Noah and Darrien were holding one of their secret meetings with a few young men in the church. Sabina was in the other room, tucking in Asher and Eric. He could hear her gentle voice…

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@linus-smallprint

It’s Eric, I’m guessing.

Hmmm, can you get him captured without Alan knowing about it? That seems like the easiest way out.

Other then that, you could get him rescued easily if….. idk….. Stripe comes and knocks the guy out while Alan distracts him. Or something of that sort. Eric would still feel really stupid and useless…[Read more]

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It wasn’t long before Asher, Eric, and Alicia were also awake. The five sat silently in the bedroom, listening breathlessly for any sound from downstairs. At last, Alicia spoke. “Do you think I should go down there and check?”

Sabina shook her head. “Noah said to stay.”

“But i…

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@linus-smallprint

I’m the eldest. Remember that whole eldest child sympathy party I started with Martha?

Ah yes. I remember now.

Let me help you get back on track with your American spelling:

You are horrid.

That doesn’t help.

It’s reading. I’m reading you write that word wrong, and now I’m spelling it wrong.

Why am I heavily s…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint you’re welcome!!

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Is it just me, or does anyone else think he’s lost his mind?

@linus-smallprint While I did agree that Ellette’s concept of Joseph sensing evil in the temple was realistic, I can get behind you too when you say you don’t want to write about demons and such.

Personally, I think it all depends on the story. Your story has no need of it anyway, so it wouldn’t be wise to include it.

@linus-smallprint

Lovely, lovely.

Thank you so much!

I am editing up the next section an should post it soon.

That makes sense about Adrian. So wait, are you older or younger then your brother? (I guess you would actually have background on the relationship from both prospectives. Either from being the youngest, like Joseph, or the older…[Read more]

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(Though I guess Darrien might be panicked.)

Yeah, he’s panicked. He has no idea who Julian is, so the only reason that seems reasonable for a soldier to be here is to arrest those who were hiding him.

Again, another lie that feels wrong to me, and not just because I believe it is wrong for Christians to lie. I think it is…

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(By the way, I should let you know that I’m not bothering to read the feedback others are giving you, so if anything has come up that you want more thought on, please let me know.)

Will do. It’s mostly the newest section from this morning that I’m anxious about, because the dynamics are delicate. as you will see. And I’m i…[Read more]

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Okay, that’s a lot of exclamation marks. You know five exclamation marks is a sure sign of madness, right? But you couldn’t settle for five, you went for six. (But who am I kidding, we’re all authors. Madness is sure to come with that.)

How dare you question my wise and perfect choice of exclamation marks! I have perfect contr…[Read more]

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Wooph! Got a lot to catch up on! Let’s see how far I get before I have class…

Yeah. Sorry about that. I kinda went on an editing streak and hybridlore was encouraging it. lol.

In the part where he is watching Arron in the fountain, he puts an end to it, and I was saying he was harsh based of of that. But I forgot tha…

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NEXT SECTION!!

Joseph sat at the table staring at nothing.

In the corner, Sabina was holding a sobbing Eric, and Asher was sitting beside Noah, his face pressed against him. Alicia was at the other end of the table, her hands over her face.

Darrien had a hand on Joseph’s shoulder…

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Here is Joseph!

(Adrian was posted at the bottom of page 8 for anyone that missed that.)