Linus Smallprint

@linus-smallprint

yeah, I can close off the week gap. I might say “a day or two” or something like that. Would this be better.

I think you meant to say someone else’s voice.

Ah, yes, I do. thanks.

Poor Joseph. I would be a little curious to know what it was like for him when he lost his own father. Does he ever see his face in the n…

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@linus-smallprint

That’s fair. I feel the same way about ‘you do you’.

don’t even get me started.

With Alan down, he would probably try to step in and would not be willing in the least be to let Rour go. So Rour isn’t in a winning position yet. Do you have any ideas for this?

Hmm……

Let’s see.

Well, would Stripe care to protect Alan? I didn’…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Alright, I will.

@keilah-h @hybridlore

Shorter section, but I want to make sure Joseph is making sense and his character is developing well before I post more.

A week passed.

For Joseph, it was a time of raw pain. He had always been shy and quiet, but now he seemed even more so. He seemed older than his years, and…

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@linus-smallprint

I mean, didn’t you used to think, when you were a little kid, that your dad was equal to super man, and your mom was flawless? (I sure did)

Now that we’re older, we can understand that they are just human, but when we are young, mom and dad can do anything and they’ve never once done something wrong in their lives.

The adults…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

It benefits you, the reader.

We know Aaron was not the perfect man Joseph thought he was.

We now know Sabina is not the strong, fearless young woman that Joseph thinks she is.

We can see the flaws in Joseph’s thinking, and understand them, but they are flaws.

Plus, I can’t go kill the poor thing’s Fiance without giving…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint ok, yeah that sounds about right!

I didn’t think of that, but you’re probably right. I kind of like whimsical, just as long as it doesn’t get cheesy.

Yeah me too!

@linus-smallprint

Hello! Hello!

Wonderful! First feedback! (I’ve over here being excited about crazy things like this)

Think this is a good opening. It sets a darker stage than the previous book, but you warned us.

Yes, I am going for a darker stage.

Also, how the characters act makes sense. Joseph is traumatized and Sabina is trying to be…

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@linus-smallprint

Okay, okay, I also had it on while reading, and I was…… underwhelmed…….. To put it gently.

It just feels like the difference between a wind up music box and watching the Danish National Symphony. There just wasn’t any heart and character behind it! The music didn’t feel alive to me.

Well, there’s my honest opinion.

@linus-smallprint

No comment on the soundtrack…? 😏

I couldn’t think of anything un-scathing to say.

@grcr

Yes, if the others are wanting to draw something this time. You can tag them and ask.

Or I can….

@mineralizedwritings  @rae  @linus-smallprint   @keilah-h @loopylin  @highscribeofaetherium

Are any of y’all in interested in extending the deadline, or are you just not going to be doing this character at all?

@linus-smallprint That was beautiful!! One question though, how far is this in the book? Are we nearing the end, or does Alan still have some character development to do (maybe sharing this great news with his friends….?)

also the soundtrack was amazing, I had it on in the background while I was reading. It really does fit!

@linus-smallprint

Finally. I’ve been really looking forward to this chapter. It was good timing too. This was the point in Alan’s life when he was ready. The line “He didn’t need to become that hero, for The Saviour had been that hero for him.” is truly quotable.

Just one small thing.

You start the sentence:

After a little more hesitation. D…

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@linus-smallprint

Cool! Nice to meet you. My dad works in software : )

Yeah, it’s weird how we’re all Americans lol. My sisters writing forum has a lot of Europeans.

I like the sound of the narrow path trilogy! I love crows, my other penname is actually Corvuss. I get that feeling, my book was heavily influenced by the city of ember and I…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

Oh.

Well……..

It’s not much of a challenge without other contestants………

@mineralizedwritings  @rae  @linus-smallprint   @keilah-h @loopylin

Any of y’all planning on doing this one?

@whalekeeper

This is great!! I love this!

I’ll tag a few more people in case they’re interested.

@koshka @power @keilah-h @linus-smallprint @hybridlore @mineralizedwritings @elishavet-pidyon

(Look up there at Whaley’s post)

@linus-smallprint

November 1st would be fine. Just don’t be surprised if it sometimes takes me a couple of days to read the sections you post. I might just drop them into a document on my phone so I can read them while taking the LRT to school.

No prob. Take the time you need.

@linus-smallprint

Warning: you may want to prepare for a lore dump when The Cost Draft 2 is done.) I’m just realizing this question is not very easy to answer from the other side.

Oh dear. lol.  I shall be prepared.

wonderful! These are the questions answered (I think?) but it’s nice to have them written out and to also know that my reader is…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

So that’s Darrian’s backstory. I don’t recall anything about this in the story.

Yeah, it was in there, about a paragraph, same time you got Noah’s backstory.

Ahhhh, never thought about pulling in the nobleman “Separation” He was thrown out when he was sixteen. So….. four years ago.

I’m really liking this. This is perfe…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

This isn’t really a meme, but I thought it was such a cool observation! Your sis might like this.