Linus Smallprint

@grcr

Yeah….

I’m glad I changed it.

@spinner4him

Here’s the link to my WIP.

https://editor.reedsy.com/s/p8SdhuQ

If you have any critiques, please reply to this thread and tag me! Thanks for being interested in this! 🙂

@thearcaneaxiom

Do you think I’ve fixed most of the problems we’ve discussed? Anything I need to work on in the “new” chapters?

@acancello @mineralizedwritings  @grcr @esther-c @trailblazer

Okay guys, so since Hugo and Ottoline are kind of a thing, I realized that they have a pretty big age gap. Hugo’s 16, and Ottoline’s only 13! I’m not a fan of age gaps like this during teen romance, so I’m moving Ottoline’s age up to 14/15 so it’s not as weird.

Ottoline

“Well, I…[Read more]

@spinner4him

Okay! Great! I’ll tag you in the thread.

@acancello

HE KISSED HER!!! OH MY GOSH!!!!!! 😍 😂 🤣

THAT IS SOOOOO SWEET!!!!!

@rae

Yes, he’s in a ball whenever he joins. When he joins, the ball will have already begun, so he’ll probably have to get changed and get a mask from the basement (unless he always wears a suit and tie, flats and a mask on regular occasions)

@trailblazer

That’s funny! haha

@grcr

Okay!

@grcr

I’m pretty sure that the house only said that they had to participate in the party itself (I just looked back and read it), not that everybody had to dance. So this might work.

Everybody has to wear a mask and dress up, I’m assuming.

Except now we have to decide which boys are going to sit in the corner and which ones are going to dance.

@thearcaneaxiom @kyronthearcanin

Here’s where my problem lies: I need to show small details (a well outside the city, the slums, different districts, etc.) but drawing each individual building and block and street is IMPOSSIBLE since it’s a huge city! So what do you guys think I should do?

Should I omit these details altogether or is there a way…[Read more]

@grcr @trailblazer

I think we should have a small group of “annoying” guys that eat food and do “stupid” and funny stuff in the corner, lol. Then we still have some guys sharing the girls, but it’s not like a 10 to 2 ratio, and there’s still dancing.

What do you think?

@rae

So basically this is a hidden cabin in the woods,  and these characters all show up and nobody knows who owns it. The door locks by itself  so they’re forced to stay with each other. Hugo and Ottoline (two characters) share their past and fall in love (lol) and then the house forces them to do a series of activities. One of which is a m…[Read more]

@grcr @acancello @trailblazer @mineralizedwritings @keilah-h @rae @sarafini @anyone else

Yeah….I wasn’t sure if you danced at a masquerade ball…but that makes sense.

I mean, at some parties the boys just sit and talk about stupid stuff and eat food and make dumb jokes and do the macarena….so not everybody would have to have a girl to dance…[Read more]

Let the drama begin.

Hehe.

@grcr

Oh dear, he’s pale! Must be scared.

Lane moved a few steps closer. GOODNESS! He’s really pale! 

Haha! That’s funny.

@sarafini @smiley @trailblazer

Jules

I can’t believe he did that, I just can’t! I bury my face in my pillow and hold back my hot tears of anger. I hate him. He stole everything from me! First he moves away, now he ditches me just because we don’t believe the same things? 

I let the pillow muffle my sobs. And Elizabeth. How could she? She kne…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Those look great!!