Linus Smallprint

@linus-smallprint

I read up until Chapter the Fifth!!!

You are an amazing writer, it’s really good, I feel like I’m reading a published book!!!!

I’ll read Chapter the Sixth as soon as I can get to it.

No, I don’t think Alan seems inconsistent from what I’ve read so far!

@ellette-giselle

I try to overlook mistakes and I’ve gotten a lot better, believe it or not! But I still can’t stand looking at my draft and seeing so much cringy writing!
Even when I build something out of wood…I still want the wood to look perfect lol

I’m just a perfectionist I guess *shrugs*

Great!!!!!!

@rae

Sef

“That’s so cool,” she said. “Can you-can you do me?” she wanted to know.

Like I get that you have it all planned out…I have mine planned out too, exactly what I want to happen, but I still can’t write it that fast, I’m too much of a perfectionist and want everything to be exactly how I want XD

lol. That is exactly why I write fast! I get the story down and THEN go back and fix it. I would get way too bogged down…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

This is really good! I still don’t understand how you can write so fast…

Like I get that you have it all planned out…I have mine planned out too, exactly what I want to happen, but I still can’t write it that fast, I’m too much of a perfectionist and want everything to be exactly how I want XD

The only critique was that…[Read more]

@esther-c

Is @calyhuge gonna crash our scene? Or am I supposed to RP?

I’m lost sorry lol

@rae

I’m sorry, I’ve just been super lazy with my RP’ing lately XD XD

here you go! <3

Sef

“She’s pretty,” Sef smiled. “How can you get her picture in your eyes?” she asked, feeling dumb for asking, but the curiosity  wouldn’t recede.

@ellette-giselle

Thanks girl <3

@savannah_grace2009

I’m just trying to be super careful that I’m still honoring God with my writing. And I’m also paranoid about my writing XD

I’d say so far you’ve hit the nail on the head.

@ellette-giselle

Thanks!

I’m just trying to be super careful that I’m still honoring God with my writing. And I’m also paranoid about my writing XD

@savannah_grace2009

But question– do you think it’s too dark?

Nope, not at all. I think I did worse in Against All Odds. (The one I’ve been posting snippets of in the Chat Chat) It’s good. I say keep it for sure! I mean, they did it in Wingfeather and no one complained about those books being too dark. Annnnd they did it in Green Ember, taking all…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Haha you’re good!

But question–  do you think it’s too dark?

Huh I don’t know if you tagged me or not, I’ll look at it sometime today!!! 👍👍

@savannah_grace2009

Oh man, this is gonna get rough. Not much to say yet. Sorry!!! I’m more of a plot critic then format critic. I’m still waiting to see how this all plays out.

Thanks for reading this because it keeps me from slacking off when people are expecting new chapters XD

SAME!!! And btw, did I tag you on Let There Be Light’s…[Read more]

@rae

And you can rip apart my writing too XD XD

@rae

In my opinion, just don’t think of him as a “hero” when he sacrifices himself. You can still keep him the same, just don’t think of him the same way.

Idk if this is making sense…

I tried lol

@theshadow

You’re good!!!! Haha thanks for wanting to read it!!!

@everyone

Thanks for reading this because it keeps me from slacking off when people are expecting new chapters XD

@theshadow

Thanks!! I’ll add that to my notes. Although, Turin isn’t really one for questions. Or talking. At all.

@theshadow

No problem!! Thank you for all the help you have given!

@grcr

Ok then. You asked for it!!

Jonathan’s eyes widened in terror and his face went white. He had expected imprisonment and perhaps more interrogations. His mind had already been working through all the escape tactics he knew of. Now, he stopped short. Death? The thought had never crossed his mind. It was in that moment that Jonathan…

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Chapter 13

Decay

“Sssef! I’m not paying you to ssstand there doing nothing,” the Pythonos’s voice carried, snapping her back to attention.

“Yes sir,” she lowered her head, her cheeks flushing with embarrassment as her fellow workers all looked up from their work.

Shaking her head to clear her thoughts, she turned back to the pile of trash. I…[Read more]