@linus-smallprint
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
That’s all I have on that……..
Okay, thank you. That is helpful.
NICE! I will pester you if I do not wake up to the next chapter tomorrow.
Excellent!
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic Art Challenge! in the forum Art 1 year, 9 months ago
Sorry, forgot the tag
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic Art Challenge! in the forum Art 1 year, 9 months ago
Google Photos link to my drawing. If you like it, make sure to save it, because I am going to take this link down after you are done judging. (https://photos.app.goo.gl/6yjohfkDfwKhGxAw6)
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 year, 9 months ago
I like how Sabina asks to be baptized without lots of people asking. I know the idea of being baptized in front of everyone scares some new believers, especially teens. I also like to see the variety of personalities in different characters as they become Christians.
Prediction: Something dangerous is just around the corner.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
Phew! That’s a lot about horses. I think I will grab everything you said about them and save it in a document for future reference. In case you could not tell, Martha likes horses and would definitely know all of this, so in order to have her talk about it, I will need to know it. Thank you for typing this all out! Is this the…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
Well, I actually kinda got hesitant about sharing it because I might have lost confidence in it being any good at all…….. I felt like the whole point of the story was being lost because of the other places that I was falling short. Do you think that’s true?
I have more to submit if you want me to.
I think you should keep on shari…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
(You too, as long as he and I are both satisfied by the end. lol.)
Heh heh. I’ll try.
Oooo, I love the drawings! They do look a little wingfeatherish. They’re quite good.
Thank you!
Fairly well. What I’m getting is that the dear instict makes them run….. but why would it not do that to archers. I would think being an archer would…
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
Also, this may give you the option to join this album. I tried to turn that off. Please ignore that and do not add any images.
I will add illustrations of all the non-human races I have created as well.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @loopylin @stephie @theshadow @savannah_grace2009 (I know you are taking a break from Kingdome Pen, Sara, so I will just tag you this final time until you return)
Since Wyoh or whatever we are calling the creature that is currently devouring images is on the loose, I will share images of my characters through other…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
Thank you for the detailed feedback! I has good grammers, eh?
spinach? Oh man, I am laughing so hard! I mean, what a way to start a story after that prologue! You have defiantly got me hooked, just because I can’t imagine where you are going with spinach! Haha! You obviously have a good sense of humor!
Ok, I’ll keep rea… -
Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
Hmmm, so the girl is a soldier? I personally don’t like women in battle. It’s ugly. I have plenty more thoughts on that….. but i won’t make you listen to them. lol. This is more of a personal complaint/thought, not an edit.
Seems I have hit a controversial topic here. This is something that my brother has given me grie…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
Let’s try this again. Had lots of glitching last time.
Great! Thank you! Yeah, like I mentioned before I’ve been reading through it! I’ve been taking notes, though I didn’t see the questions for readers. Are you interested in the notes I have so far?
Yes please, I would love to see your notes!
As to the questions I had earli…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
Did I break this page? Anything beyond page 2 keeps on refreshing itself before it can load. Remind me not to make anymore custom HTML and CSS buttons. I wounder if another post will fix this.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 year, 9 months ago
Also, what do you think about a child being the only one to believe and step forward in that whole crowd?
This is interesting. This could result in others thinking that Aaron’s beliefs are childish. (I am trying to imagine Turin’s reaction to this, but he could also be dismissed for being a young man.)
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic Art Challenge! in the forum Art 1 year, 9 months ago
Wyoh is back? Both Highscribe and GRCR’s images are returning 404s when I try to investigate, so yes, there is an error with images being uploaded from the site. Hmm. I will find a way to get my artwork to you through a link once it is one. I may just upload it to Google Drive.
I wounder if the problem is that there is simply too much…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 9 months ago
Here is my forum for TNPT. Please look back through it the questions I have for my readers. You mentioned you have some predictions. (“haha! I rock and guessing scenes! lolololol”) If you do, I would not mind hearing those as well, but #no-spoilers.
Just so you know, I am trying to post at least one chapter a week. I find…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 year, 9 months ago
Okay, got to the latest section. So the gospel finally got through to Sabina. Not very surprised, but happy to see it. I’m smiling right now.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 year, 9 months ago
I don’t know what that would be! If they were girls it would be easy! I just don’t know how guys “connect” and whenever I try to write it my brothers look like they’re going to throw up. They say I make them too girly in their getting to know each other, so I just kinda steer clear. Any ideas? – Ellette
The girls in…
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 year, 9 months ago
Sorry for the late response. I was away on a day trip to the mountains on Saturday and I usually try to avoid going on my laptop on Sundays (also, it was my sister’s birthday, so wanted to celebrate that with her and the rest of my family)
I was literally just snooping around on your profile and discovered you had a story! I w…
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 year, 9 months ago
By the way, would you mind if I recruited you to read/give feedback on my project? It is a fantasy story set in a world that is similar in some ways to the Wingfeather world. If you don’t want to or don’t have the time, that is all right.
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