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Stop it, guys. You’ll scare her off.

Anyway, *waves* hello and welcome, Hannah W!
If you need help figuring out the comment coding or anything, I’ll be happy to help. 🙂

Ah, there we go.

Eh. Too small.

Let’s see if this works…

Let’s see if this works…

I am on Pinterest @BelegTeleri! The only thing is, during the school year, I’m only allowed on during the weekends, so if I don’t get back to you right away, please understand. I’m always looking for new people to follow who love Jesus and who love writing! (Maybe with some Lord of the Rings fandom thrown in there as well) 🙂

You could make the stuff password protected and only send out the password to subscribers on WordPress. I can do that, and I only have a free account. As far as other sites go, I believe Blogger is free.

YAY! *confetti and balloons* *general party noise*
You guys are definitely awesome! Everything we ever need in a writing site. 🙂 Advice, stories, podcasts, t-shirts…. the list goes on.

@Hope Yay! So glad I could help. 🙂

Awesome! Someone actually went and read them! 😉 Glad you liked them, Jada. 🙂
Hmm… I’ve heard a lot of people say the geography and all was hard to follow. Maybe I had it a bit easier because mom read them out loud to our whole family, so we were able to kind of get the whole image together in our minds better.
Oded is so sweet and funny. I…[Read more]

Maybe bury the father before the fight? That way it shows the cost first, then the resolution. Think HTTYD 2. Then it ends on a bittersweet note, but you get the bitter before the sweet.
With the mystery man… I don’t think I have enough details to properly recommend a good resolution to that. As far as putting it in place, maybe have everything…[Read more]

I agree with Emma along the lines of contemporary fiction.

But I do not write contemporary fiction. In one of my books, the characters have to have a word name because of their government/society/thing. But very specific word names, like Frost, Ace, Dawn, Flame, and West. No Grace, Faith, Joy, no animal names, and nothing that would seem like…[Read more]

But Henty did a good job with his side characters. Peterkin and that sailor from Martin Rattler (Can’t remember the name) were great. Martin Rattler is actually a lot like Tintin. Tintin is a really extreme role-model perfect character. But if a little kid goes “Oh, I want to be like Tintin!” It’s more a question of where to start. I mean, he’s…[Read more]

I read through that sentence a few more times. There are actually a few ways to read that I guess, and I accented the wrong words. What I was thinking was that you had hit a midway point between
“Some of the inkwells broke, spreading puddles of greasy ink on the black granite and the scattered parchments.”
and
“Some of the inkwells broke and…[Read more]

Just a couple corrections the other guys missed:

Some of the inkwells broke, and spreading puddles of greasy ink stained the black granite and the scattered parchments.

Read that again. You probably deleted that and rewrote it, but forgot to take out the previous wording. I do that all the time. 😛 Just decide on one to keep.

…catching up…

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I honestly can’t think of any perfectly perfect characters. But there are the morally perfect ones. Sometimes they just aren’t the main character, though and you’re seeing the story through the eyes of another character.The morally perfect characters usually have some other fault or not everyone likes them.
Like Horatio Horblower is awesome, but…[Read more]

I wish I got as many books as my brother for holidays! I always ask for them, but don’t get them as often as I would like. Although, I did get a few this last Christmas. They were supposed to be for all three of us kids, but I ended up being the only one who read them. 🙂
We (I :)) received a collection of SEVEN Robert Louis Stevenson books (my…[Read more]

I started reading the Redwall series (again, my younger brother gets them for his birthday and Christmas). I got through the first few chapters of “Redwall”, but I lost interest and never picked them up again. On the other hand, my younger brother LOVES them. He’s read some 3, 4, maybe even 5 times over. I must stress the fact that he does NOT…[Read more]

First of all, this reminds me a LOT of my first writings. You’ve got a great base layer sort of thing going here, but it’s sort of bare-bones. It needs some additions. One thing I’m noticing in your writing is a general avoidance of the word “said”. It took me forever to figure out that that word was not the mark of an uncreative writer. If you…[Read more]