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@Daeus Hmm, maybe…let’s say 3:00 until 3:30? Does that work for you?

@gretald, @dbhgodreigns, and @hannah-krynicki

His main objective in writing this story seems to be to convince others of whatever points he’s trying to get across in his writing.

I agree that Orwell has some points to get across to the reader. We’ll find out what those points are pretty soon. 🙂

@Daeus I have homework to do right now, so I can’t. Will you still be writing this afternoon? I could maybe write then. 🙂

@spradlin Those are some great thoughts to chew on. 😉 I think that Orwell is telling the story for his readers, mostly. His main objective in writing this story seems to be to convince others of whatever points he’s trying to get across in his writing. It’s a little to early in the story to tell exactly what points he’s trying to prove. @Daeus…[Read more]

@gretald and @hannah-krynicki
I agree that the pigs seem power-hungry and may become dictators to the other animals.

@jadamae Good point. I definitely agree with you about that. 🙂

Interesting thoughts, everyone!
As far as writing goes, I noticed that there was a lot of telling in the beginning, too, but as you said @daeus, I don’t think that it was necessarily a bad technique. As a reader, I was engaged the entire time. And that’s really all that matters, right? 😉
The characters are great. Each animal has a strikingly…[Read more]

@Hope Honestly, I like it. I don’t think it’s cheesy at all. Great idea, combining the word legionnaires and the word legend. 😉 I’d definitely go with it.

I like it, @hope! Honestly, it sounds pretty cool. 🙂

@Daeus
I noticed the ‘telling’ too. It was a little hard for me to get used to at first but, I agree that it did work well.
I loved the different personalities of the animals. The pigs are the confident, highly regarded animals. The horses are strong, but not necessarily the brightest. (I think Molly especially is an interesting character.) The…[Read more]

@his-instrument
There is one word to describe this. Amazing.
Okay, two words. Amazing and ingenious.
WOW! This is so good! I agree with those who said they loved Cerdic’s voice. It’s perfectly hilarious. 🙂
I only noticed a few grammar mistakes, but the awesomeness of the story made up for that! 😉
Amazing, awesome, fabulous job! (Now four words.…[Read more]

Great job @bluejay! Unfortunately, I didn’t get anywhere near that amount. 😛 But I’m trying to write a song for my WIP, so it’s a little harder. And no problem! It’s always fun to write with someone -even if they’re 9,000 miles away! 😉 Haha!

@bluejay Sure. That’s fine with me 🙂

@bluejay I’ll write with ya! 😉 …How about an hour?

Ooh, I want to read the rest! Let me read the rest! This is a really great start to your story! I loved it! Seriously. Everything Kate said. 😀 The humor is fantastic, the plot sounds like it will be very interesting, and I love your style as well. You are a very talented writer, Hannah. 😉 Keep it up!
Also, it was very interesting to read that…[Read more]

@reaganramm probably prose, characterization, or plotting. Those are what I struggle with the most.

@hope
Huh. I guess I’ve never noticed that before. I learn something new every day! 🙂
@christi-eaton
Ha ha ha. That’s great! 😀

@reaganramm Ooo, that’s so hard! I would probably choose a course on characterization, plotting, world-building, or showing vs. telling.

@Christi-Eaton Hahaha, that’s hilarious!