katie

Ooh… nice emotional punch in the gut! 😛 The strongest thing, I’m gonna say, is the emotional impact of everything that happened in the story. The story is adorable— very sweet.
I think your prose needs a little work, though. Not the structure of it— but using it to capture all the untapped drama of a character’s inner world.
For instance,…[Read more]

You want it to be timeless? 🙂 That’s a good thing. I do think that’s something very worthwhile to strive for.
But I also think it would help if you included the best of both worlds.

That said, you still did a lovely job. Keep it up! 😀

Ah… I see. Wow, I’ll have to think about it! 😀

Oh, and let me add something.

“Immediate reactions to another character are just as important as major plot reactions but are more often missed.”

@rolena-hatfield paper always does that. In fact, I just lost some cash today and found that I had accidentally thrown it away in the trash can. We should switch to gold and computers.

@kate-flournoy I like that fancy seal.
Ok, I think you’ve got a point. It really is even more about reaction. I’m not talking about plot though. That is also 99%…[Read more]

You know what, I don’t even know this story… can it be briefly sketched? Or do you know where I could read it?

Awesome! I got 576 words of editing and re-writing done. 🙂 Thanks for writing with me!

Alrighty @gretald. 😉 I’m still with you.

I’m with you all the way, @gretald!

Hey hey hey @gretald I’m in. 🙂

*nods firmly, smothers chuckle* Very sound advice @Daeus.

*grabs maxim, slams inky stamp on it so hard knocks inkwell off table* Writing guru approved. *huge grin*
Honestly I can’t find a single problem with that. I might even make the ratio even more unbalanced in favor of reaction. 99.9 percent of action is reaction, after all. You need one teensy piece of action to start the whole chain going, and…[Read more]

Well ok, just watch out for calluses. (and why you’re at it, watch out for cougars, wolfs, bears, and things you might have lost.)

I love the names!

They got pretty much everything, but I wanted to ask… you said this is inspired by Pangea. (And yes, I know what Pangea is. 😉 ) Is it supposed to take place in that time-period?? If so, it is waaaaaaaaaaay too modern to get that across.

Kate look, you really gotta dip those fingers in water every now and again or they’ll catch fire. Friction, ya know? Science stuff???

@Daeus hahahaha… that’s actually a family joke. Mom likes to say ‘if anyone comes in here and smells smoke, don’t be alarmed— it’s just Kate’s keyboard.’ 😉

But you’ll be glad to hear my fingers thus far a…[Read more]

Hey, this is a good question @overcomer. I agree with Daeus— it needs to enhance the theme someway, but I also think it’s fine to have it there just as a story element and not overtly illustrating the theme. Don’t get me wrong— all story elements play into the theme somehow, but some are more obvious than others. 😉
Let me give you an example.…[Read more]

Well, a short but productive burst.

Kate look, you really gotta dip those fingers in water every now and again or they’ll catch fire. Friction, ya know? Science stuff???

Oh, and I created two characters named Silver and Imperturbable. Quite fun.

‘Kay guys, something came up… I’m stopping now. I got 1,113 words. 🙂

Welcome, @Daeus! Jump right on in! I thought about tagging you, but figured if you weren’t on here already you were busy. 🙂