Levi Pierpont

Ah— hahaha, I didn’t catch that actually. 😛 Nice. XD

Same for me whenever I click on a profile link.

Oh, cool! Thanks for sharing, @daeus.

“Ashlynn!” a voice shouts from behind. “Watch out for-” I’m knocked unconscious before the voice can finish it’s sentence.

Maybe here you could describe how the character was knocked unconscious more…for example, you could say, “I felt something hard strike the back of my head, and everything went black.” Or something like that. 🙂

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Hm… the biggest problem to me seems to be the rushed flow of it @adry_grace. Also, the characters have zero personality. You know ’em because you’ve seen whatever it is they’re from, and it’s cool to you to have them in these situations because you know them and it’s fun to think how they would react, but I as a reader not familiar with the…[Read more]

Hm… the biggest problem to me seems to be the rushed flow of it. Also, the characters have zero personality. You know ’em because you’ve seen whatever it is they’re from, and it’s cool to you to have them in these situations because you know them and it’s fun to think how they would react, but I as a reader not familiar with the story am left…[Read more]

I got the same thing when I clicked on my name…

Also you say I asked Arthur which should be I ask Arthur. 🙂 And a little later in the last paragraphs you change completely into past tense. 🙂

Also you say I asked Arthur which should be I ask Arthur. 🙂 And a little later in the last paragraph you change completely into past tense. 🙂

@adry_grace
Very good! I did notice a few places where you switched from present to past tense. At the end of the second paragraph, you say I got up clumsily. Also you say we weren’t not sure which I assume means we aren’t sure. But anyway, great job!!!

@rolena-hatfield, It is a lot of fun. We actually have performances for the True Story of the Three Little Pigs this week! 😀
My favorite musicals are Les Miserables and Wicked. Do you have a favorite musical/show? Ooo, Mary Poppins! That sounds like fun. 🙂

@daeus I did it like you: I took the test from my MC’s perspective and I completely agreed with everything the description said.

@daeus I did it like you: I took the test from my MC’s perspective and I completely agreed with everything the description said. About my MC, I mean…

I finished it @writefury— lovely. *grins widely* That last line was perfect. 😉

Hahaha… guess what guys, I just found out that one of my villains is an ESTP…

… and so is an incredibly vain pygmy dragon who belongs to one of my MC’s (Arianwen, @writefury— from the ‘Inter-genre Island’ thread) as a pet.

Oh yes, Boromir, definitely. Both sacrificial and redemptive.

Come to think of it, Thorin’s death as well, @hope, though in the movie. The one in the book wasn’t all that impressive.
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*huddles down and hides face in hands, whimpering and sobbing and clutching dark hair with long white fingers* I’m gonna cry.

I am so gonna cry.

*Cries dutifully, then realizes who you were referring to @writefury and starts bawling in earnest*

Yes. That death. Totally that death. It’s not just that he sacrificed his life, either— he sacrificed his reputation. See @hope, the MC had just been framed for a crime he didn’t commit and no one could prove he hadn’t committed it. So the MC’s…[Read more]