Ava Murbarger (Solfyre)

@kyronthearcanin

Love it! I don’t have any major points or criticisms for this one, though I will ask why your calling it a galaxy and not a solar system?

@kyronthearcanin Awesome job! Are all of the planets in the same orbit, more or less, or are they increasing distances from Blasyx?

@kyronthearcanin Of course, of course! I’m kinda at that stage with worldbuilding on a story I started like a year ago and still haven’t even started writing.

@acancello

Cool idea!!

I’ll have to hop on here later and post something. 😀

@kyronthearcanin

I recently had to do a string-along story in school. Basically, the title is one word, then from there the sentences grow in length.

I just did one too!! Mine was so much shorter. XD It’s impressive that you made it that long! Great job!! 😄

@kyronthearcanin

Thanks! 🙂

@kyronthearcanin

Of course, sorry if I come off as a know it all when I point anything out. My own worldbuilding is also very incomplete, and I agree on the list thing. Maybe I should start posting some chapters of my WIP sometime, though it gets a little creepy at parts, but it would be nice to have a nice set of critiques as well.

@kyronthearcanin

That’s true, but side would be very hard for them to keep balanced, unless they were double sided, or just super small. Then once again, there’s the neck issue. If they never developed much for military, living in peace with one another as well as with the other races, then it would make sense that they don’t really develop their…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin

Ok, I suppose that makes a little more sense for the Felisaro, though even with that, this is going to be a major hindrance to their development as a race in comparison to the others as @keilah-h mentioned, but there is a lot of interesting dynamics you could get into with that if you wanted. Using short range weapons still seems…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin You’re welcome!

@keilah-h

Yeah, that would make for some interesting history! Btw, @kyronthearcanin , do the Arcanin also use their mouths, or do they use some other method, like their magic?

@kyronthearcanin If you don’t want to listen to our suggestions over the course of this discussion, you don’t have to! We’re just brainstorming, I guess.

Yep XD

@thearcaneaxiom Fair point.  Although this might have not been a current thing–perhaps it happened in the past, and the arcanin quickly settled it….and that helped the felisaro too, even if it wasn’t intended.

@kyronthearcanin If you don’t want to listen to our suggestions over the course of this discussion, you don’t have to! We’re just…[Read more]

@keilah-h @kyronthearcanin

Thanks! The issue with that though is it seems already pretty well established that the Felisaro somehow get around this, and are quite advanced. Unless they did take longer to advance, or maybe even piggy backed of from some of the others, but even that would come with a wide set of difficulties, going back again to…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom Your point about Dune not having thumbs is interesting, considering the fact that Quelin and Rina apparently have them? @kyronthearcanin Is that a major point in the story? Like maybe the other species used to (or currently) look down on the felisaro because they’re “lesser” or “not as advanced” because they don’t have thumbs.

@kyronthearcanin

Ok, I’m so sorry for not responding to this after so long, I just now was able to get around to reading it. It’s really good! I like the cast of characters you got going, and you really seem to be building up on the idea of whether or not Quelin is friend or foe, is that going to turn into a major theme or arc?

A few…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin You’re welcome! I LOVE your story ideas so far. I’ve had ideas kinda like it but haven’t exactly fleshed them out much.

@kyronthearcanin Wow! That was fun, I can’t wait for more!

I have one thing you could add. It doesn’t actually have to do with this particular chapter but with the layout of the entire book. In series such as Wings of Fire or Warriors, where there are multiple factions of characters battling (dragons and cats respectively) the book opens with an…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin

OOOOO this was twisty! I second Landri, I also would binge read this XD

So, the fight where Sorren showed up seemed to come out of nowhere.

I’m very curious to see if Quelin shows back up… *eagerly awaits next chapter*

@kyronthearcanin

Thank you for sharing it! Reading was a pleasure and I hope you’ll post more!

@kyronthearcanin That sketch is amazing! 😍 How long have you been drawing?