@kyronthearcanin
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TheArcaneAxiom posted an update 1 year, 7 months ago
@felicity @otherworldlyhistorian @kyronthearcanin @folith-feolin @esther-c @mineralizedwritings @sarahsmile @godlyfantasy12 @sarafini @gwyndalf-the-wise @freedomwriter76 (Whenever your back Freedom in case your interested) @anyone-and-everyone
Hi Everyone! As some of you have figured out, I’m a member of the Church of Jesus Christ of Latter Day…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Chapter 1 of The Dragonsbane Society in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
@kyronthearcanin Ha ha! Yeah, Tsunami’s cool.
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Chapter 1 of The Dragonsbane Society in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
@kyronthearcanin Yeah, Jade Mountain was cool too. I like Moon also, although my first favorite has to be Sunny.
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Chapter 1 of The Dragonsbane Society in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
@kyronthearcanin Yeah, the series isn’t that great if you look at the later books. The first five were awesome though. My story for that is sort of Wings of Fire minus the trashy stuff, but combined with Star Wars. so basically you’ve got all the Star Wars characters but they’re dragons, and there’s several more prophecies, and some more cool things.
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Chapter 1 of The Dragonsbane Society in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
@kyronthearcanin That one’s actually nice! My prophecies usually don’t rhyme, for example here’s my favorite one I’ve written:
Where the moons cast light on the tempest, there the wings of ice will rise, a talon completed.
Teal, a sixth sense to lead his brothers well.
Silver, seeing farther than any other.
Slate, smarts over senses.
Sky,…
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Chapter 1 of The Dragonsbane Society in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
@kyronthearcanin Oh, ok cool! So maybe it starts with her eyes becoming like cat eyes or something, then she gets fire breathing, later she starts getting scales and a tail/wings? That’ll be kinda cool, tbh.
And I’ve written a couple prophecies before if you need any help!
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Chapter 1 of The Dragonsbane Society in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
@kyronthearcanin Whoa, really?? How did that happen, like can some dragons turn into humans? Because I remember reading about a myth where a shark chieftain could shift himself into a human, and when he married a human, their kid had shark features. So is it something like that? Or some other way?
So on the subject of “dragon traits.” Can she…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Chapter 1 of The Dragonsbane Society in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
@kyronthearcanin Whoa!! So I know what a seer is, and I’m pretty sure I know what shifter implies…..but dragonborn?? What does it mean?
(You don’t need to tell me if you don’t want to.)
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Esther replied to the topic Chapter 1 of The Dragonsbane Society in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
At least you’re aware of it. That’s good. 🙂
It does get easier to write with unique voice though as you keep writing because you get to know your characters more. 😀
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Esther replied to the topic Chapter 1 of The Dragonsbane Society in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Ok… 😏😁
(Oh, and I added something to my post up there. I don’t know if you missed it.)
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Esther replied to the topic Chapter 1 of The Dragonsbane Society in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Ok, so I love the young thief trope. 😂 (When it’s done right of course 😉 ) So I think Brycen might end up being one of my favorites. 😁
Yeah, I figured I’d have to move some stuff around once the drafting was done. But hey, I’ll just surprise myself and magically have double the chapters that way XD
Right? XD
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TheArcaneAxiom replied to the topic Chapter 1 of The Dragonsbane Society in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Ok, so on chapter 2:
Interesting, I don’t think I have any major critiques or anything on this one. As for Nia, I wouldn’t call her a villain, though she is a minor conflict. I don’t think she’s overboard at all, she’s just not a very likeable character currently, so if that’s what you were aiming for, I think you did great!…[Read more]
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Felicity replied to the topic Chapter 1 of The Dragonsbane Society in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Some parts in chapter two were a bit confusing to me, like the back and forth with the doctors and going to different rooms. And it seemed strange to me that Kirah would tell Keith about what had happened when Jade had told her to keep it a secret. It seemed important that they kept it hidden, but Kirah doesn’t seem too concerned…[Read more]
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Faith replied to the topic My WIP in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Lol, yeah I get it. 😂
I’m the opposite, I’ve gotta work out every plot detail before I start writing. I’ve got pretty much nothing written for mine, and I’ve been working on it for a year 😬😅😂
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Faith replied to the topic My WIP in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Just read all three chapters and saw all the drawings, and I love it all! I’m really looking forward to another chapter!
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Allison posted an update 1 year, 7 months ago
@esther-c @kyronthearcanin @lightoverdarkness6 @felicity @euodia-vision @mineralizedwritings @landric @booksbyjayna @landric
Thank you all for the prayers! The move has been going great! We leave in 5 days! Saying goodbye to everyone has been hard, but better because I know I will see them again. I just wanted to let you all know that I will be on…[Read more]-
You’re so welcome!! Aw, that’s great!! Okay sister! I’ll continue to pray for you and your family. No worries girl! I probably won’t be on much this week either. Talk to you then! ❤
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I’m glad it’s going well! I hope you have a blessed week!
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You’re so welcome!! I’m so glad everything’s going well for y’all! 😀 I’ll continue to keep you in my prayers! ❤️
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Praying hard for you!! I know this is difficult, but you know the Author of your story. Keep us updated! ❤️
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Esther replied to the topic Chapter 1 of The Dragonsbane Society in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Girl, this is so good!! I love it!! 😄
I would suggest separating the two POVs into separate chapters (so you’d have 4 chapters at this point), but you do whatever you want, because chapter length isn’t the most important thing when drafting. 😉
Looking forward to the next chapters!! 😀
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Allison replied to the topic Little One's Journey… title pending in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
The next 2 chapters you wrote are amazing! I love how each chapter draws you in! Like @kyronthearcanin , I am excited to see where its heading!
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TheArcaneAxiom replied to the topic Chapter 1 of The Dragonsbane Society in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Thanks! I definitely was kind of experimenting with a lot of different things that I normally don’t do in my writing… Like prophecy, and more POVs than I’m used to. Throughout the next few chapters, more are added in, including the male POV. I think something I’ve also done is made a lot of the characters similar in persona…
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Janellebelovedpig replied to the topic Little One's Journey… title pending in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
@esther-c @freedomwriter76 @acancello @kyronthearcanin @whoever-else-is-welcome-to-chime-in
And here’s part 3:
All day long Little One tried to catch Loving Prudence alone, but the siblings always seemed to be around. Then just before supper Little One saw her chance.
As Little One stepped into the kitchen, Loving Prudence looked up from her…[Read more]
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It looks great! Thanks for sharing! I’ll totally listen to it if I get the time. 🙂
Can’t wait to discuss it if and when your able to tune in!
Sounds cool sadly if all goes well I will be in New York watching Sweeney Todd during that time. If there is a way to watch it later I might check it out.
No worries! Yeah, you’ll be able to watch it whenever you’re able! The link I gave, BYUtv, and YouTube are probably the best ways to watch it during and after the live sessions, so there’s many ways to watch it any time!
Unfortunately, our area just suffered a tornado, so I will not be able to watch it live, as we are helping with the damage. However, I will definitely watch it as soon as I am able. 🙂
Oh No! I hope everyone is ok, we’ll keep you and everyone else over there in our prayers!
Thank you so much! Unfortunately, three people died when the airport was destroyed, and our friend’s house was destroyed, but they are okay.
Oh no! I’ll be praying for you! ❤️
Thank you!!!
That’s so sad, It’s awesome that your able to serve them though, you’re in our prayers!
Ok, thanks for the invite! 🙂
I’m glad I’ve been able to edify and encourage you in your faith! 😀
You really have😀
Thanks for this resource! I will try to check this out when I have time. I’ve appreciated our discussions and have learned so much from them. Thank you for your willingness to listen and your thoughtful responses!
I’ve learned a lot too! The discussions we’ve had have been so fun and edifying. I can’t wait to talk more soon, and maybe discuss this when you get the chance to listen to it. I really loved Saturday 3rd session, and all of Sunday’s were amazing! Can’t wait to hear any thoughts!
I did watch through the first session and was struck by the inspiring speaking. Also the choir was amazing.
Yay! Which was your favorite speaker? I loved all of them, but I think Elder Eyring’s the most for the first session. Yeah, the tabernacle choir is beautiful, I think I take it for granted sometimes.
Maybe Mr. Stevenson? I appreciated how he wanted to do something more meaningful with his family for Easter.
@felicity
Yeah, I love Elder Stevenson!