Ava Murbarger (Solfyre)

Hey guys, I’ve been thinking. How do you encourage a reader to like a character who is already dead? And with minimal flashbacks? And and without being boringly sad? I have a few ideas, but this has been a challenge so far and I was wondering what everyone else thinks.

@rae

Yep. Poor Sniper.

ikr, poor guy.

i love how it’s just like:

the character: is a literal assassin and would know like 10 ways to kill me if I got within a mile of him. Plus my augmentations to him give him two or three more of those ways to kill me.

me: I feel so bad for you, your life is so tragic. I would give you a hug if I weren’t con…[Read more]

@rae

Gotcha.

Alright, here is my feedback!

~ Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

You know Tyn and Cyrus were my favorites from the previous book. In this book, I enjoyed James and Eric (post-memory wipe), both for their enthusiasm. Iskyagus was fun as well for the brief moment he was there.

~ Were there any c…

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@ellette-giselle

I like Evan, he’s probably my favorite. The other guys sort of blend together a little for me (that might just be a me thing though.) Amber is fun too.

@ellette-giselle

Exactly.

@ellette-giselle

Yikes. Poor Jonathan.

@rae

Thanks for the update!! I’ll keep praying!

How have you been feeling?

@rae

Yeah, I wondered if it was Sniper.

lol you know me well don’t ya?

If I remember correctly, he was shot in the chest and the side of his abdomen, right?

I’m assuming you saw that image in the school roleplay lol. I think that’s right. I don’t think he was hit in the heart directly, but yeah, I assumed it punctured one of the big arteries…[Read more]

@rae How do you know all that shooting stuff, first of all?

Second, thanks! Trying to figure this out cause remember in that fanfic I shared with you, that scene where the enemy team shoots Sniper? I’m writing scenes from his perspective and want to know exactly how long he would be able to remain conscious before passing out and eventually…[Read more]

@rae oh cool!

@ellette-giselle

Good chapters!

Amber and James both have tough backstories…

@esther-c BRO I LITERALLY JUST LOOKED UP THAT KINDA THING

it was something along the lines of “where on a person will a bodyshot kill most easily” or “how long does it take for someone to die from a gunshot to the chest”

I wanted to know how long it takes a human or at least a humanoid to bleed out after being shot twice in the chest, cause I…[Read more]

Be careful out there, fellow writers 👀😂

@linus-smallprint I love it!! He looks great.

@ellette-giselle

Evan’s story is crazy. He must sympathize with Jonathan a lot.

Oh and you’re welcome!

On the head thing……It seems to be weirdly both.

You ever seen how in early 3d games like Mario 64 most of the “spherical” entities are actually flat and are facing toward the camera at all times, and their shading is how they accomplish the round look? Maybe it’s some kind of effect like that.

@linus-smallprint cool beans. Also that orange animation is near perfect.

@highscribeofaetherium @linus-smallprint NO ONE gets through the Minecraft one without crying, yes. Even my brother said he cried at and like I said, he never cries watching stuff. Never.