Ava Murbarger (Solfyre)

@ellette-giselle

Hey, I was right.

Good chapters. Jonathan’s arc is starting to turn around, yay! 😁 I liked the way you did that, and the ending of the last chapter.

@highscribeofaetherium oh yeah I forgot about that. The third season is really the only one with a story.

@ellette-giselle really?

Guess sandbox games aren’t your thing then. (Sandbox=doesn’t really have a set story, you do whatever you want. Minecraft is that way cause you can choose to turn on hostile enemies and fight them every night, or you can just mine around. Or just turn on “creative mode” and have access to everything without having to…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

 Just the whole minecraft stuff was driving me out of my mind. I felt like with that one he was relying more on the novelty of having his stick figures in a video game then his actual story.

Can’t say I agree. But maybe that’s cause I actually play Minecraft and know it inside and out. You said before you don’t play video games,…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

Writers can insert two sides of themselves into that conversation and it still tracks. XD

@elishavet-pidyon

I appreciate the thoughts! I hadn’t thought much about items before – although specific things come to mind. My goal is to make this character less of a person to mourn for, and more of a person to enjoy reading about. *Bows and offers you a jar of glitter to poof yourself back home if needed*

@the_lost-journal Have at it then!!

@ellette-giselle

All good things, hopefully?

I liked these two chapters. Amber handled Jonathan very well, and I’m excited to see him have the conversation with Michael. I also want to know how their mission goes.

Why do I feel like this is the part where you might kill someone off?

@ellette-giselle It’s okay!! I’m late to reading them anyway.

@theshadow

Hey! I’m doing pretty good, how are you?

No worries, I know the end of the school year is chaotic. 😂 I’ll add you to the new doc!

Thanks! Glad you like him. 😅 He’s one of my favorites too.

@theshadow thanks lol

they’re hilarious together ngl. also they probably have joint ownership of like 5 brain cells lol

Hey guys, I’ve been thinking. How do you encourage a reader to like a character who is already dead? And with minimal flashbacks? And and without being boringly sad? I have a few ideas, but this has been a challenge so far and I was wondering what everyone else thinks.

@rae

Yep. Poor Sniper.

ikr, poor guy.

i love how it’s just like:

the character: is a literal assassin and would know like 10 ways to kill me if I got within a mile of him. Plus my augmentations to him give him two or three more of those ways to kill me.

me: I feel so bad for you, your life is so tragic. I would give you a hug if I weren’t con…[Read more]

@rae

Gotcha.

Alright, here is my feedback!

~ Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

You know Tyn and Cyrus were my favorites from the previous book. In this book, I enjoyed James and Eric (post-memory wipe), both for their enthusiasm. Iskyagus was fun as well for the brief moment he was there.

~ Were there any c…

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@ellette-giselle

I like Evan, he’s probably my favorite. The other guys sort of blend together a little for me (that might just be a me thing though.) Amber is fun too.

@ellette-giselle

Exactly.

@ellette-giselle

Yikes. Poor Jonathan.

@rae

Thanks for the update!! I’ll keep praying!

How have you been feeling?

@rae

Yeah, I wondered if it was Sniper.

lol you know me well don’t ya?

If I remember correctly, he was shot in the chest and the side of his abdomen, right?

I’m assuming you saw that image in the school roleplay lol. I think that’s right. I don’t think he was hit in the heart directly, but yeah, I assumed it punctured one of the big arteries…[Read more]