KydonAndWillow

@jonas

That’s a good restriction, another could be simply the practicality of drawing that much mass from something. Maybe you could theoretically draw mass from the planet, but there’s a limit on how much mass your body could take before you simply collapse and break bones from the weight.

@kathleenramm

Looks like you just fixed it! Thanks!

@everyone

General Conference Oct 2023! Streaming sessions Sat 30 through Oct 1s!

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The first session for today starts in half an hour now at 10:30 CDT! Come see this incredible men and women…[Read more]

@kathleenramm

Kathleen! Your not dead! You’ve left everyone hanging for months now😂

Anyways, have you noticed that the formatting in general has been off? It’s been like that for well over a month now.

Hope to see you around again!

@jonas

Sounds good to me! So is one absolute restriction is that the mass remains constant over the whole body? What if you could pull mass from objects you touch? There would have to be a limit on this, because you could just pull mass from the ground almost indefinitely for practical purposes, which would both shadow the original idea too much…[Read more]

@jonas

Huh. Likely.

@rainmaker

Thanks! I appreciate it! And that sounds really cool. I haven’t thought of an idea that’s stuck yet but I think it would be fun to write about another universe or space.

Yeah, it’s a universe where the planets are actually 4d superstructures passing through a 3d cross-section, allowing for essentially unlimited worldbuilding pos…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I have a cousin that’s older than me, and he once read my work and said “I bet I could write a book, it can’t be that hard!” I was appalled. How dare he, haha. We started working together on a dystopia. We got 7 pages in, and he told me that he found it boring and had better things to do! Easy, huh?

You really have to stick w…

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@jonas

Interesting. Yeah, for my sisters thing, it’s a particular character that has the ability, where they are making use of pulling particle mass from higher dimensional space (she has me come up with the explanations by the way😂), so it’s also slightly different where it doesn’t have to be a constant universal mass. So the implant thing is a…[Read more]

@thearcanceaxiom

That’s very true! It’s a skill that takes a lot of time to develop, taking in a lot of different ideas from pros, plot, character, and bringing those different ideas into something cohesive is a challenge, but it’s worth it in the end!

I have a cousin that’s older than me, and he once read my work and said “I bet I could write…[Read more]

@jonas

Yep! That’s the way of things. Good luck with it! There’s probably many countless aspects to explore in it that neither she or I have thought of, or anyone else.

@savannah_grace2009

Thanks, I never knew how hard writing can be! It’s a rollercoaster…sometimes you get depressed because you can’t figure out one sentence and then you get excited because you wrote something “good”. Writing is hard….but it’s a good challenge!

That’s very true! It’s a skill that takes a lot of time to develop, taking in a l…[Read more]

@jonas

That’s a cool concept! Although my sister has been playing with basically the exact same idea, although it’s more unique to bone mass then body mass as a whole, but the end effect would be similar.

@jonas

Oh. I guess I missed that. I really need to read more carefully lol!

No worries!

@thearcaneaxiom

On them having previous dealings, that can actually work, but the readers haven’t seen those previous dealings, so you need to show that somewhere. We’ve seen the Pythonos on many other occasions, but not in any that make it so that they are that much of an immediate threat when your on the run like that. I still think the odor is…

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@savannah_grace2009

I love that explanation, lol.

Okay, I’ll work on it! This critique has been so helpful! And no, it doesn’t feel too harsh. Thank you for being honest about what I need to fix. Also, I know I need to make this clearer (I don’t explain it in the story at all, just my thought process when I wrote this) but Sef and Lilitu had p…

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@jonas

Well, Sef wasn’t at her house when Neveah and Hanna were kidnapped. They were leaving the slums, and were walking down the path. It was a whole “group” thing, if that makes sense.

Sef saw them being taken when she was on her way back from the well.

@jonas

Cassian is Lilitu’s older brother. (I’m pretty sure it’s in there somewhere? idk, now I’m second guessing myself, haha)

I don’t know, I probably should know, but I don’t know where Cassian is, lol. I guess he just wasn’t in the scene? He’s old enough to work, so probably doing that or stealing something to feed his family. Characters are…[Read more]

@rainmaker

Hi Divinity, I’m Sara 🙂 I’m a freshman in high school. You’re going to love KP!

I am working on my WIP, and am trying to fix some problems with it, but I am making some progress (I think???).

I have 2 horses, too many chickens (you can NEVER have too many chickens!!!!), 1 dog, 4 cats, and a herd of cows. We farm and ranch in…[Read more]