KydonAndWillow

I guess I’ve been stuck on what Zahlin should do now… 🤷‍♀️

@srae

Yes, I’m writing an RP now… how do you guys write them so fast? 😅

@fernweh_grace

I happened to stumble upon this by chance….and I’m glad I did! Your writing is beautiful! It’s so sad….but beautiful! (you should publish this…)

@esther-c

I read the chapter, and I think I see what you mean.

I wouldn’t say that your problem is the lack of action. I think the way you opened with the painting scene is a great introduction. It introduces Ami’s character, how she’s artistic, what she values, what kind of person she is. So it definitely doesn’t need more action. The way you…[Read more]

@grcr

It is hard to say much without knowing much of your book, but I do agree with what Sara said as far as openings…

Ok! If you do wanna read the chapter, I posted it like two posts above this one.

I guess it depends on the reader, but personally, I like books that paint some of the picture in the first (and even second) chapter… even if it seem…

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@savannah_grace2009

Ugh, sorry you’re going through that! That’s hard!

Yeah, thanks. XD My NaNo WIP feels so much easier because it’s so new, lol.

Could you maybe post some segments of it so I can see more of what you mean?

I posted the first chapter in the post above this one.

All I can say is that maybe you’re focusing a little too much on all…

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@rae

What’s the first paragraph of your book?

So, the first paragraph doesn’t have much info in it since it’s only a few lines, but I’ll share the original first chapter so you can see what I’m talking about. (Hopefully. XD) In a day or two, I’m hoping to have an alternate first chapter written, so I may share that just to see if y’all think…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Oof, those are hard questions. For the first one, I get what you mean. I think for the first chapter, an introduction is fine. Personally, I would try to focus on the relationship between Ami and Ev, and his family conflict, because I think that will hook the reader.

Yes, definitely. XDXD

Ok, yeah. I think I already have a few ideas…[Read more]

@esther-c

I don’t want to make a whole other topic for this, so I’m posting my question(s) here. XD

lol XD

It is hard to say much without knowing much of your book, but I do agree with what Sara said as far as openings…

I guess it depends on the reader, but personally, I like books that paint some of the picture in the first (and even seco…[Read more]

Just kidding, I’ll start at :55. I have to get pumpkin pie first, lol.

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom @highscribeofaetherium

*sighs* Okay, I changed my mind again.

I’m not doing first person (you’re welcome, Jonas, lol).

But I am in a sense, starting over.

Before you freak out, let me explain.

I’m still keeping the original beginning (Elysium, Pythonos, A Swift Death, A Thief, Gone, Stolen, and An Orphan). So bas…[Read more]

@esther-c

Ugh, sorry you’re going through that! That’s hard!

Could you maybe post some segments of it so I can see more of what you mean?

All I can say is that maybe you’re focusing a little too much on all the potential problems. (I’m speaking from experience) Sometimes you need a little break, or maybe you’re overthinking it. If its boring to…[Read more]

I’m gonna do a sprint, i’ll probably start at :50 and end at :20 or something like that, if anyone wants to join.

@jonas

Yeah, I think just adding villains to this one will work.

I’d love some help if you guys have any tips or advice to contribute 👆😊

@freedomwriter76 @smiley @hybridlore @whalekeeper @highscribeofaetherium @euodia-vision @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @lightoverdarkness6 @mineralizedwritings @keilah-h @rae @thearcaneaxiom @anyone-else!

I don’t want to make a whole other topic for this, so I’m posting my question(s) here. XD

So, I’m having some trouble editing my WIP. (This is not my NaNo WIP. I was ahead on NaNo, so I decided to do some editing today). Originally, the first chapter wasn’t the most exciting. It was more a slice-of-life kind of thing that introduces who one of…[Read more]

@rae

I have to go now, bye.`

@rae

Zahlin

Zahlin sidestepped Nahim’s lunge. The Sword spoke for the first time since the fight had broken out. “ONE OF YOU RUN FOR FENNIN! NOW!” It shouted at the two onlookers. Out of the corner of his eye Zahlin saw someone disappear out the door.

Zahlin caught Nahim’s arm and slammed him into the anvil. Nahim twisted, leveling his blade a…[Read more]

@rae

Ah, those were the good ol’ days…