KydonAndWillow

@savannah_grace2009

Ok so in this RP I say Liv has blue eyes, but correct me if I’m wrong. 😂

Lukas

Lukas found he couldn’t take his eyes off Liv’s face. He tried, but somehow, he found himself drowning in the crystalline pool of her blue eyes.

“Aww.” He heard a whisper pass by him. He blinked and looked behind him, only to see Fynn dance awa…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Oh, good job!! 💛💛 The eyes look really good!!!

@savannah_grace2009

First of all, I love your writing!!

Second, my actual answer to your question. XD Ok. So I think I prefer the first one better. Though I do have an opinion on prologues… I heard an author (who had been writing since forever) say that he doesn’t like prologues because typically writers use them as a way to draw readers in bef…[Read more]

@grcr

Ah, don’t worry, I always enjoy reading the works of other writers!! 😉😊

Aww thanks!

@hybridlore

Sorry, I think my last post lagged.

It’s all Wyoh’s fault…..XD

I really like your idea of doing the flashback and then going to Lilitu’s pov, though!

Okay, great! i’ll think and pray about it, but I’m pretty sure that this fits better than how I had it originally.

@savannah_grace2009

You guys, thank you so much for reading it and for everything!!

You’re soo welcome!! 😅

I was kinda scared for some reason that nobody would be interested to even look at it!

Ah, don’t worry, I always enjoy reading the works of other writers!! 😉😊

@acancello @hybridlore @grcr

You guys, thank you so much for reading it and for everything!! I was kinda scared for some reason that nobody would be interested to even look at it!

 The first one does pull me in better and I want to read more, but I just love the description and feel of the second, however, it may be a bit slow for the beginning…

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@savannah_grace2009

Yeah, that would work!! 😄

@grcr

Ohh! I never thought of that before!!!

That makes a lot of sense, actually.

Maybe I could go something like this:

1. Prologue

2. Memory (chapter 15 of the second link, shows Sef and Neveah picking flowers with Hanna)

3. Nothing (go to Lilitu and Livia)

4. Stolen (where Sef and Neveah get seperated)

@savannah_grace2009

Hmmm…

Alright, my basic answer: the first one draws me in more and I like its prologue. I do like the first two or three chapters of the second one, though.

I don’t know if you only wanted advice on the first/begining chapter… if so, you don’t have to listen to me or read my next few thoughts…. but if you don’t m…[Read more]

@hybridlore

I will definitely think about all this! I need to get more opinions before I make a decision…I am just so new to all this and want to see what more people think.

It’s a neat idea with the time change or whatever, I just don’t want it to be too confusing, and/or abrupt, you know?

@acancello

Awww your dedication and acknowledgement…

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@acancello

I have skimmed through these pages here and read pieces of your WIP and I have to say… I love them! Your really good at describing the way things look and feel.

Wait…really???!?!?! Aww thanks that means so much to me!!! I am excited for your feedback!! AND I CAN’T WAIT FOR MORE HUGO!!! lol

Also, feel free to tag you in any post w…

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@jonas @thearcaneaxiom @highscribeofaetherium @rae @vinagirl @trailblazer @grcr @esther-c @whalekeeper @mineralizedwritings @keilah-h @acancello @hybridlore @anyone-else

Okay, guys. I need serious help. My novel is kind of going nowhere…because I don’t know which way to start it!!!

I have two beginnings for my story. One jumps straight into…[Read more]

@trailblazer

I really like this scene!!!

Some ideas for plot twists:

Maybe she apologizes to Albert or something?? And then realizes that she does like him? Or something happens with her and Chester? OR A NEW BOY MOVES TO TOWN!!

Sorry, all my ideas seem to be centered around romance….lol

@esther-c

Livia

She stood there for a moment. “Um…I’m not sure how to do this.”

“Yeah, me neither,” Lukas laughed a little, “I was kind of hoping you would know.”

“Well, I don’t.”

“Oh.”

“We should watch the other people, and maybe we’ll figure it out?” Liv raised an eyebrow, and Lukas nodded.

They studied Fynn and Callista for a good…[Read more]

The dancing has begun!

Hehehe…

Alright, I’ll write some RPs

@savannah_grace2009

Lukas

Lukas swallowed hard and faced Liv with an uncertain smile wobbling on his lips. “Well?” He held out his arms.

@rae (I said in here that Chase was dancing, but I don’t know what you decided to do)

Callista

She smiled, all tears dried, and met Fynn’s ey…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Oh that’s awesome! You can tell her I love her name. 😉

I was trying to choose between Clementine, Maisie, Hallie, and Dixie. It was close between Maisie and Hallie, but Hallie won. 😁

@esther-c

Hey, my little sister’s name is Hallie!! XD

@freedomwriter76 @jonas @rae

Sef

She flinched back at the man’s voice.

It reminded her of too much….

No. She would not think about Iver now….

Cowering back into the shadows, she hoped he wouldn’t notice her. Or ask her any questions.