KydonAndWillow

*emerges from the dust and shadows*

Has the dance even happened yet?

Actually, I think there was a point in the drafting or planning stage that lowkey forgot Brandon existed 💀🤦🏻‍♀️🤣

@theducktator

Awww, thank you so much girl!!! 💖 I appreciate you taking the time to read through it all! <33

Do you have any additional feedback after having read the whole thing?

@savannah_grace2009

No that’s really helpful! Tysm!!

@whalekeeper

That looks so good, I love how the face is so simple but clean, it looks like it belongs in a picture book.

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h

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@ellette

sure, I’ll draw another of yours. I’m going to take a break for a little while again after I adjust the current pic for Keilah—there are some arts I want to work on for myself. But then after that. 😁

also @keilah, I think I see what you mean now (about the feet).

@linus-smallprint

Oooh that’s a good idea!!

And I like your ideas too…I feel like that would be really cool if we did something like that

Sorry if I’m making this more difficult than it is…

@keilah-h

Sure 😅

Just lengthening your existing ones to match Huntress’s would work.

Oh wait, just lengthen them…? So they just need to be longer? I’ll try some things…

Okey-dokey. I’ll make the changes asap. I’m going to send you a separate feet test, and then I’ll rework them on him.

lol, no problem. I totally get it. 😅

I don’t think I forgot anything… did I?

@keilah-h

Okay, here it is…

If there’s anything you don’t like, let me know—I can change things. 😁😁

I’m sorry about how sniper’s hat and feet turned out.

@keilah-h

Of course—I don’t mind at all!! Once I send it to you (and you like it), it’s yours to do whatever you want with! 😁

It’s actually done. I’ll post it in a couple minutes….

Now that I’m going back to the beginning…

This is really hard XD

because I know you’re trying to go for the “chaos” vibes of a big family as they get ready for church and the party. You set up Hallie, Easton, and the parents pretty well, especially for the fast-paced scene, but the other siblings kind of disappear throughout the book.

Maybe…[Read more]

@esther-c

To be honest, I’m not really sure.

I might have to reread it a little more and let you know XD

@loopylin

Their story is inspired by Chinese fantasy… so… ancient China… mixed with elements of, like, Japan and Korea… and my own crazy fascinations. Something like that. XD

Ahh ok. Yeah, like if he were cornered.

@keilah-h

Alrighty! That’s perfect. I should be done with it soon. 😀

@savannah_grace2009

Ok thank you!!

I was thinking there needed to be more family interaction too. I’m glad you caught that. Is there a certain spot on the book that you think those types of scenes would fit best? (If not, that’s fine)

Ok yes!! I will for sure do that! It will be fun for me to take time to flesh out the characters individually…[Read more]

@esther-c

I would just like to see it set up a little more at the very beginning chapters.

I know you’re going for chaos on the Sunday morning before church, but like I mentioned before, since Easton and Hallie’s family is a big one, I think you need to focus more on their family and the dynamics. I’d love to see Hallie’s closeness with her mom…[Read more]

@grcr @savannah_grace2009

Thank you girls so much for reading through my book and supporting me!! 💕💕 I so so so appreciate you! ❤️

Your comments have given me a lot more confidence in the plot and characters, which I definitely needed going into a third draft.

Are there any scenes you’d like to see added? Or characters you’d like to see mor…[Read more]