Koshka

As for the other stuff, I really appreciated the themes you worked with. That we can’t love ourselves as we should through our own eyes. We have to see us (and others) through God’s love, light, hope. That isn’t easy, but it’s worth it.

I liked the order, how you spliced poem and story together. It made it easy to read and follow.

@savannah_grace2009

Wow. That sixth story was dark, but I know it’s needed.

It’s sad how many people indulge in self harm just “trying to feel”, but since it looks “normal”, like tattoos, piercings, or extreme diets, other people don’t see it for what it is.

My warning wouldn’t be that it’s dark or violent, but that you don’t want to even…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

*Cracks knuckles*

First off, that sounds awesome.

Second, Thursday? That’s a pretty tight crunch, but you can do this. Right? Right.

I’ll read through and give what thoughts I have ect. and (if you’d like) typos/errors I catch. What type of accountability do you want? I can email you daily, you can email me, whatever you…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

It looks like we’ll be at a church training thing this Saturday, so I probably won’t be able to join. That said, you’re welcome to send an email link, and if I happen to be free I’ll bounce on.

@raxforge @loopylin

*Splutter of laughter*

Fish person? How is Syph like a fish person, pray tell?

Syph

So he didn’t have to “get a girl”, whatever that meant. He turned to give Ellie a grateful smile before shifting narrowed eyes to the Rax Boy.

What was that supposed to mean? A good natured challenge, or a patronizing ‘let the Little…[Read more]

@raxforge

Oh gracious. XD

What kind of trouble?

@loopylin @raxforge

Syph

He had to what? He blinked at Eddie. A dark blue flush crept up his neck. Water droplets appeared and disappeared in the air around him.

“Oh. Guppies. For a dance? But I don’t know of any other spritelings to pair with. It could take an indefinite amount of time to even find someone who wouldn’t be—oh tadpoles—…[Read more]

@esther-c

The P.S. is beautiful. It closes out the letter (and story) in a satisfying, simple end. In my opinion, very good.

@loopylin @raxforge

Syph

Ball room? He’s seen something, a large sign on his way to school. But now, that had said Ball Pit. Surely they weren’t the same thing. How was one supposed to dance in a ball room?

Wildly. He could do that.

“Tonight. Oi, that is agreeable.”

Although he’s have to find this Room of Balls too. The misty whisp tightened…[Read more]

@loopylin

That sounds like an insane amount of fun. XD

My experience is just jumping around the house to Celtic music with my siblings.

@whalekeeper

Aww, thank you! *He turns bright blue and bows*

The water Sprites dance is like what you’d get if you mixed ballet and Irish folk/cog dancing, with the added effects of water swirls following their every command. They move the water, and the water moves them.

By the way, Syph has no problem dancing with girls. He just is trying to understand how it would work if you weren’t in competition.

I love historical clothing and culture, so I know know how clothing, and culture, and the rule of law change over the ages in my WIP world’s. I’m also a decentish seamstress. I may or may not have constructed my characters wardrobes in my head. Although…I don’t think I’ve really described them…so I don’t think that’s really influenced my…[Read more]

@raxforge @loopylin

Syph

Understanding, a starburst of clarity, washed over his face. “You mean–the boys dance with the girls? Not against them? Why, that’s such a Wingless thing to do–” he squinted over at Rax. “Oh, sorry. No offence meant to the present company.”

The young sprite looked down, twisting a wisp of mist around his finger as a c…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Uh, big brother mode just got activated.

Leo

Rory looked… lonely. Leo reached over and ruffled the kid’s hair, not stopping to think that he was probably too old for that. He needed a childhood. “Welp, now you’re stuck with me too, so I guess you’ll see how blessed Quincy is.”

He laughed and scooped up a handful of metal…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Leo

Leo chuckled and shook his head. “Do we look related? But I’m the one who pulled the little monkey from a shelled out hole, so I guess I have as much right to claim him as anyone else.”

He leaned back against the couch.

@ellette-giselle

Oh goodness yes. XD

Leo

Soldier. Yes…and no. Another sigh caught in his throat.

“Yes, but no. I don’t really know what I’m doing here.” He leaned back against the couch. The floor felt cold through his work pants.

“I was apprenticed to Admiral S. Faltack at twelve years old as a novice engineer. Silvia’s always been smart,…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Leo

“All sorts of things. Mostly worked on ships. Built one out of scrap material with Silvia. Took us three years. The other stuff.” He sighed. Looked over at the kid. Well, most people probably wouldn’t call him a kid. “I worked with energy deployment and shielding. I was one of the best.”

It wasn’t a boast, but it also…[Read more]

There! See?!? At least he gets this chance at a happy life. *Pouts with arms crossed*

@loopylin

Ah, me too. If anything RPs can at least give poor, mistreated characters a chance at a happy life.