Cloaked Mystery

@koshka

Rax and Ben

Rax laughed, “Don’t worry about my shoulders. I have lifted much heavier things than you. Now, hold onto my head and I will hold onto your legs.” Rax did so, wrapping his arms around Syph’s legs. Rax looked at Syph and then at Ben, “Ready you two?”

“Ready when you are master Rax.”

@keilah-h

-Me being chronically inactive cause I’m about to serve a mission

-Someone mentions Avatar

-Me, breaks through the ceiling falling before you

I am here

I’m iffy on the show itself. I don’t need another fixation. There are a couple issues I’d like to avoid with the mythology of it all.

Always fair, however, I will say that you are s…[Read more]

@theshadow

Yeppp!!!

@whalekeeper

I’ll be praying!

Dark and moody like Batman

@linus-smallprint

Love the wolf drawing. I’m getting if the wolf in Little Red Riding Hood was good kinda vibes. Good job!

@koshka

Rax and Ben

Rax found Syph’s terminology quite amusing, he smiled. “Ready? Three, two, one.” Rax hoisted Syph onto his shoulder with ease. “How does it feel up there?” Rax smiled up at the blue man/person/thing that Rax didn’t know.

@linus-smallprint

I thought you were being serious until I saw that they were changed 🤣

I think I like the Not Literal Version, lol

@elishavet-pidyon

I liked how you had Neveah try to combat the lie, and it’s obvious it’s for Sef’s sake, not her own. To make this sequence really work, maybe make Sef think her Mani is just trying to save herself – it’s not a lie about Sef, but it would make the former lie hit home. Make her really crumble since the last thing keeping the lie f…

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@elishavet-pidyon

wowww…that’s a lot to think about and really helpful!!! Thank you!

Here’s a little background on that scene…

yes, I know it is very sloppy and not perfect (I just wrote it literally today)

but here’s the cliffnotes:

• Sef is a slave of Iver, who is a Pythonos.
• Sef and Iver are currently in the throne room of the Master, leader of all Pythonos
• Iver has applied for a military position, and the Master is…

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@the_lost-journal

WHATTT
the chosen makes me wanna cry

it’s so good!!!! they portrayed it so well in my opinion hahaha

it’s my FAVORITE show of all time hahaha

@elishavet-pidyon

YES those are what I’m looking for!!!!
I will definitely be using those later in my book…

But I’m struggling with a specific scene where I need a lie XDXD and none of these seem to fit…

“Well, what are you waiting for?” the Master spat, motioning for Iver to continue. “You may begin whenever you are ready.”

Sef’s knees sho…

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@linus-smallprint

Okay good lol

Also, Paynes cannot become Pythonos because of genetics, but I’m not sure how to incorporate that in the book quite yet…don’t worry though, I’ll make that clearer in other drafts.

@esther-c

Okay perfect! Thank you!

@the_lost-journal

Aw I’m glad <3

Some of those were lies. what do you mean? You yourself said that they were lies.

yes, they are lies…

But they’re not the type of lies in my story…

agh I don’t know how to explain it, I’m sorry!!

@the_lost-journal

omc…you’re gonna make me cry…that’s so sad! I’m so sorry that people said that to you…I hope you know it’s not true and that NO ONE should EVER talk that way to another person! That makes me really mad actually, like why do people have to be so mean?!?

so I have experience with a lot of insults!

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@trailblazer

It needs to be lies that affect the way you think…but shorter. Like “you are nothing” will have more impact than “you are ugly/not beautiful” will…

I’m not really sure how to explain it, but I’m looking for short lies, not so much longer insults.