Cloaked Mystery

@whalekeeper

Girl you should legit be an editor hahahaha you’ve always been sooooo good with critiques!!!

Thank you so muchhhhh

@freed_and_redeemed

AHHH GIRL I LOVE FANTASY <333333 it’s my favoriteeee I’m so excited!

@the_lost-journal

I skimmed through this, and your WIP’s sound SO COOL!

I love them!

@grcr

Just finished reading through all your chapters… man, I dont even know what to say…

Must read moreeeeee. WRITE WRITE WRITE!

Aw girlie thank you so much… <33

Eloy is my favorite… Aubrielle is probably second. And, since he hasn’t done anything yet that I can see, Cassian is also a fav.

AWWWWW

Why Eloy thoughhhh he kinda just drops off the…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Omc thank you so much girl, that means a lot…you’re gonna make me cryyyy

Ahhh thank youuuu 😭😭💜💜💜💜💜

Your critique was EXACTLY what I was looking for, so thank you!!!

–Characters are very easy to picture, and not very easy to forget. XD So you’re good in that area.

YAYYYY!!! That’s one of the things I was worried about, and I’m s…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

I know, it’s still just a little bit creepy.

@the_lost-journal

Ah, ok, that’s cool!

Also, your signature is CREEPY.

@the_lost-journal

Cool, all your WIPs sound neat! So are TKOK and P.I.C.A.F.E. set on this earth?  How does that work with the fantasy elements?

@the_lost-journal

oop, uhh, I will make a topic for it!!!!!!!!!

Sounds good😂

Nice, because I know other denominations just forgive to one another… 😬 that sounds worse.

And of course, we should reconcile ourselves with our fellow man, especially those we have wronged, but man cannot forgive sin, only God, and by extension those He’s given a…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

but i prefer this method

As someone who does Jiujitsu, that meme made my day, lol

@theducktator

LOL

@loopylin

Hey! Another 21 pilots fan! I would say they are my favorite band

@keilah-h

yes, actually!!!!!

I think I have a couple more chapters since you last read it!!!

@keilah-h

aw yesss

@keilah-h

I feel like I always write the most when I post on KP or when I know people will read it…

It’s so cool to see writers supporting other writers <3

@whalekeeper

Heeyy Sara, I’m about a third through your story right now! What kind of critique do you want? Any specific concerns, stuff like that?

Ummmm

Let me think lol

I think I’m just worried about pacing, flow of the story, and if it’s at all interesting lol

And character development ideas would be helpful too!!

I also just want to know t…[Read more]

LILITU’S NICKNAME IS TULIPS???????

Yeah lol

you can thank one of the boys from my school for that one XDXD

The frog wedding is adorable.

I KNOWWWW

YOU KILLED NEVEAH?!?!?!

no comment….

@theducktator

 I just finished your prologue. It’s good, but you overuse italics.

NOOOOOO
IT IS IMPOSSIBLE TO USE ITALICS

😱😱😱😱

*sobs hysterically*

Oh my goodness, they kissed!!!!

yesssss

*coughs* um yeah…chapter three is kinda dark I guess 😂😂

@theducktator

*Steals your questions*

Please do, Most Esteemed Feathered One. Your abducktion of my questions is an honor.

I would say you can tell if someone is a true Christian by whether they believe the Bible, and how they treat others.

I think that’s a good answer, though what if someone says they believe the Bible, and treat those around…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

Ah, hello intelligent being! And I would love to tell you all about my fantasy book I am writing!

Great! If you could point me to where you talk about it, that would be awesome:)

I feel I can be that way too…

Luckily we have the Atonement, so that we can progress and become perfected through Christ

Oh, that makes more sense, is i…

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