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Andrew replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
*blinks a couple of times* … *blinks a couple more times*
I had to go so far to try and find the last Sypher and Twins RPs XD. I guess that’s what I get for not being on for almost a week (I should probably read up on what Alpha and Dante are doing since there seems to be a lot of noise coming from over there… 👀👀👀)
Rax and…[Read more]
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Andrew replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Should I put a picture of Emmie in Alpha’s pocket or would that be too mean?
DO IT!!! Alpha would be so mad XD
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Andrew replied to the topic Writing Fight Scenes in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Tip for everyone: learn how to fight, this will make writing fight scenes much better (sorry Ruth, that might be very helpful for you)
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Andrew replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 2 months ago
Sorry for not responding sooner, I was on a missionary trip to our sister church in Uganda.
What are your thoughts on catholic reconciliation?
I am not against the idea, I actually support it in a sense. Though, I think it should not just be isolated to your priest/pastor. but to trustworthy friends and family as well. Talk…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
okay hahahaha sounds good lol
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
If Nar is his sister, he’s going to be furious that his new enemy is carrying around pictures of his sister. If Nar is a crush then he’s going to be really mad because it doesn’t seem like he would want everyone in kingdom come to know that he carries around her picture.
Nar is his sister, and he is very protective of her.…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
no I haven’t!!!
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Doesn’t everyone have at least a fragment of virtue though? (Sorry, I don’t mean to shut down everything you’re saying, this is just my thoughts. 😅) I’m not saying they have to be someone that the readers will look up to and be like, “Oh my word I want to be just like them.” I understand mankind is sinful and there probably are people out there t…
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Now, you mentioned your characters not knowing God. And I liked how you put that—“without God there is no hope.” But…you have to think that these characters are probably looking for hope, right? Even just an occasional thought of wishing there was a way out of this darkness they’re living in.
So I know with where they’re at right now,…
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Ha! Took me a second to figure out where this is going……. I’ll be surprised if they’re both still alive and out of jail by the end of the day.
Lol
You kidding me? The police have already tried to take Alpha (when he stabbed Jep and Chase went to the hospital) and well, Alpha hasn’t stepped foot in the station yet.
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Ruth replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 2 months ago
@theducktator @ellette-giselle
I bet he’s gonna die in the end.He can’t die; I like him too much!
Oh dear…well, two more stories left and then you’ll know. Don’t worry, Baron will be happy with the ending.
I would love to see this published someday!
Hopefully sometime in Spring I will submit it to a publisher. Fingers crossed though cuz…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
I also hope I didn’t come across as rude or brushing you off…I really do appreciate your thoughts because that means I need to work on foreshadowing! And explaining my book to others helps me flesh out my thoughts a little more! Thank you so much! <3
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Ok, so the biggest thing I noticed was the lack of hope throughout the story. The characters seemed to think about death a lot and were put through a lot of physical pain. There’s nothing inherently wrong with that, but it needs to be balanced out with hope. When I got to read those Lilitu/Sef memories from when they were little, that w…
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HighScribe posted an update 1 year, 2 months ago
“I was around small children, so I got small children-ed. It’s when you’re around small children and they give you all their diseases.” – Illustration teacher.
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Ruth replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 2 months ago
@raxforge (I changed a few things in the story btw) @ellette-giselle @keilah-h @whalekeeper @hybridlore @theducktator
Story 10!
Only two more stories and then The Baron Chronicles will come to a close. Thx for reading this far! 💜
Fire
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
… May I ask what’s in Alpha’s pockets?
Alpha’s gonna be so mad lol
- A pocket knife (are you surprised lol)
- some loose change
- some random things he picked up like an acorn probably (Strange new world, strange new things, random things in pockets)
- a picture from a couple years back of him and Nar having a flour fight (he lost)
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Alpha’s reaction.
I apologize to Dante ahead of time. I like you Dante, but Alpha is not a fan.
Alpha
Before Dante could get far, he was pinned against the wall in the hallway outside their room, Alpha’s finger’s wrapped around his throat. A red vapor was thinly veiling Alpha’s eyes. “Watch yourself, Dante. You may think you know a…[Read more]
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HighScribe posted an update 1 year, 2 months ago
Goodreads keeps telling me that since I read Pride and Prejudice I should therefore read Twilight and I’ve never been so insulted in my life.
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Ruth replied to the topic Snowball Fight! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
173 words
Her wide, innocent eyes were of a bluish purple, flecked with white as if some painter had dabbed their brush in white and flicked it with their finger. Then, some magical fairy had come and made all the spots glow like the stars in the sky. Her skin and hair were of similar shades of the bluish purple. Even her little boots…
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Ruth replied to the topic Snowball Fight! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Okay, I wrote 500 hundred words. I won’t post them here though because they’re part of a story I plan to post soon of The Baron Chronicles topic and I really don’t want to spoil what happens in this story.
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