Cloaked Mystery

@the_lost-journal

Super creepy, but interesting! Is this the entirety of the story, or is there going to be more? Either way, the mystery remains effective: if there’s more, than this is effective for piquing the reader’s interesting; if not, the questions it leaves unanswered are intriguing in and of themselves. I also liked your use of repetition.

@theducktator

So, question. Is there an RP on here that I could randomly stuff some characters into, or is now not a good time?

Well, as @hybridlore alluded to, there is the character adventure RP. You would be totally welcome to join, although the it has been pretty much inactive recently. (Also, in case it would affect you, we do have a c…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I haven’t gotten any further, sorry. It slipped my mind, and then school hit and I don’t have much time each week. You can keep tagging me though, and I’ll read more whenever I get more time.

@the_lost-jourmal

A framing device is basically a story outside of the main story. It’s not necessarily a “story” as far as having much of a plot, but it acts as context in which the main story is told.

The only example I can think of that you might have seen is the Princess Bride movie. In that movie, the grandfather reading the story to the…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

That does sound like a really fun idea!

So, are you thinking of this being like a framing device for a collection of other stories or something?

G, P, X

(Judith is totally a vandal.)

@the_lost-journal @highscribeofaetherium

Rina – Elderstrand, Deepwater

There were people overboard. Rina created a portal in the water, with the other end in the air above the ship. She had, unfortunately, forgotten to account for water pressure. A stream of water crashed into her, throwing her backwards as water flooded through the portal.

@the_lost-journal

I also have been busy lately. (I’m back at college this week.) I know it’s been a while. I’ll write something next time I have enough time to do so.

@raxforge

Scrabblers. Yeah, they can climb.

@whalekeeper

What is the difference between the brain and the mind’s aspects?

That distinction is fuzzy in universe, intentionally, because I think it’s also fuzzy in real life. The best distinction I can give is that the brain is purely physical (which makes the distinction between physical and psychological aspect a bit fuzzy as well), while t…[Read more]

Oh.

@highscribeofaetherium

Yw.

I don’t know what that means, and that scares me.

@loopylin

Wait, did you just rename yourself to Whalekeeper?

We’ve got an identity thief on the loose people!

@loopylin

@jonas That’s a cool system. So soulforging works on any metal object? Do you have any characters with enchanted jewelry then?

Thanks!

Yes, it works on any metal. I haven’t completely decided yet, but metals might have varying properties that makes some better for certain things, but any metal could be Soulforged in some way. (Of co…[Read more]

@loopylin

Sure! (Don’t worry, I won’t plagiarize lol)

Okay, then, a crash course on Awakening it is! (Minor spoilers if anyone reading this happens to plan on reading that book.)

So, in the world of Warbreaker, every person is born with one Breath, which on its own doesn’t really do anything. However, you can give your Breath to someone else, at…[Read more]

Okay, so here’s a magic system that I’ve been working on for a long time and keep modifying, but I feel is in a pretty good place now.

(Technically, it’s more like two magic systems, but they are highly connected to each other.)

First, to understand it, you need a quick crash course in my universe’s rules.

Humans are made up of five aspects:…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

You can share one of your systems if you want, Jonas! I think it’s safe to say you have a few. XD

You could say that…                               (It’s about 13…)

I’ll see if I have a good one I haven’t talked about much.

I once beta-read a book which is now published, and it had a big magic problem which the author didn’t rew…

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@raxforge @rae @loopylin

Ellis – Elderstrand (w/ Ben, Flare, Baron, following Felicity and Brea)

“Whatever made that sound,” Ellis said, glancing backward. “I don’t–Brutus! Come on! We’ve got to get out of here!”

He stopped, turning around. Just then with the sound of pounding feet, he saw a swarm of bounding spindly creatures burst into the…[Read more]

@loopylin

It seems a bit limitless to me, I guess.

Okay, I can see that. Yeah, I have had similar problems where I made a magic system that has a very simple premise, but as a result, I was worried that there were a bunch of overpowered applications of it that I hadn’t considered yet.

So, I guess my first question would be, what can a sentient…[Read more]

@loopylin

What in particular do you want help with? It sounds pretty cool to me. I could probably help, but I’m not sure what you want to improve.