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@jenali I would generally agree with that as an overall principle. I will mention, though, that with short stories you also have less space, so sometimes I think leaving minor characters undeveloped can make more sense in a short story given how little space you have to work with.

I haven’t read that book, but it sounds like a good example!…[Read more]

@jenali Got it. Sounds like a good arc for her then. With that piece in place, all of that looks good!

@jenali Oh boy, the SACK would love to be gagged.

@daeus Hmmm…the only ENFJs I know are you and myself…
@delightinlife Yay! Yes, that ‘cliche’ I think is so funny, because although true, and although I’ve used it myself, it may well have been used by every author out there. 😛
@jenali 😀 Thanks so much!

@jenali That looks like a good contrary set-up to explore the elements of leadership from the perspective of someone who doesn’t view themselves as a natural leader? What would you say Jenali’s starting EiL is about what makes a leader a good leader?

Also, it’s nice to learn the meaning behind your username. 😉

@jenali A sharp betrayal like that can set up a very good theme on loyalty and could definitely make Melat the best possible opponent for Teren on that front. The more you dig into his desire to see a unified people, I suspect the more compelling his motivations will be as a villain. Nice work.

@jenali Yes–the villain can absolutely have a positive arc! I would point to Darth Vader as being a prime example of that trope, but there are others as well.

That sounds like a great example of a well-done villain. Giving a villain very human desires and motivations like that is a very effective way of creating a sympathetic villain who will…[Read more]

@jenali So it sounds like we even have some inter-connected foils there as Manel and Tekal foil each other in addition to the protagonist on that front. I like that. And that makes sense with regards to Teren and Xandley’s EiLs. Both of those positions can be painted really sympathetically, and if you do it right, that should make for a really…[Read more]

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@jenali Awesome–thanks for making all that clear. Those look like good foils. I especially like the potential for interplay you have within the antagonists, specifically thinking about Manel and Tekal’s similar views on loyalty. Does Manel take a similar course of action to Tekal (giving gifts) to obtain loyalty, or does he use a different tack?…[Read more]

@jenali Detailing those physical consequences there helps to clarify the poetic justice on that front. Looks good!

@jenali Ah–sorry for not seeing this before! Thanks for the tag. Both of those look great!

@jenali Got it. Thanks for the feedback!

@jenali What’s the focusing question and message of your book, and what’s your character’s EiL, just so I understand everything that’s going on in your story?

@jenali That’s awesome to hear! 😀 It definitely opened up my view of storytelling as well when I realized that several years ago. Haven’t read The Last Unicorn, but it sounds like a good example. Isabella is definitely both in Northanger Abbey, and I agree that she’s more of an influencer. On a side note, isn’t Northanger Abbey just a fantastic…[Read more]

@jenali Great example! Charlotte and Elizabeth are great foil characters in Pride and Prejudice. Those sorts of foils can definitely work very effectively.

@jenali Looks good–I like how the scenes build on each other to hammer on Brigen’s inability to succeed with his EiL.

@jenali Great! What aspects of this section have been harder to understand? Is there anything I could be explaining better?

@jane-maree Awesome. Sounds like an effective foil then.

@jenali I like the characters there, especially Shriah’s alternate take on strength. What are the negative repercussions of the Allie’s decision to flee and Shriah’s stale mate? Often poetic justice will include more than simply a failure to do something.

Hey, friends, see if you can help me brainstorm for a bit.

So far, about fifty people have taken the reader behavior survey. That’s pretty awesome. Fifty people can show us some neat things about reader behavior, but we’re going to need a lot more need more if we’re hoping for reliable and detailed data.

So maybe my outlook was too limited.…[Read more]