Janellebelovedpig

@linus-smallprint

What do you all think? Is Tyn’s reaction in Chapter the 1st in line with her character? Or do you think she would take a more considerate approach like Whaley is suggesting?

Hmm. It’s a hard question. I’ll have to give it more thought–I found that her reaction didn’t quite suit her, but I can’t really pinpoint why. It might be a…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

yeah, the girl slaves were in the house.

Okay…. maybe. That’s a big gap between the twins tho. I may change it. I have a new character in his 20s coming in.

@rae

I’m a little swamped, but tag me and I’ll try to join at some point. 😊

@rae

I like it! I think the part in the field is the only thing I would fix honestly. But that’s your choice.

Like I said, it’s a delayed hit.

I’ll probably cry tonight. 😂

@koshka

Imperial soldiers are young.

I only have two other teens.

@liberty

Liberty…..

you are insufferable.

😂

NOTHING about Marius and the prince?

 

Oh, and…Dietrich sounds like a very interesting character. I hope you don’t kill him since I like him.

CALLED IT!!

As I was editing I was like….. this is going to be her favorite character!

@koshka

Uh, 21 is still between 16-30

@linus-smallprint

Also, as for them majority being males, I grew up in a household of boys, and my sister came along when I was already in my teens. Sooo…. boys have always been easy for me to write because I can watch them. I find girls harder because I don’t really live with older girls.

@linus-smallprint

Nice.

ugh!!! Why did I know it would be you who would say that?! 😭

This is a big step for me! I used to only write people my own age or eighteen. Eighteen was the magic year that was always perfect to write. 😂

I have had some older characters…… somewhere……….. I know there were some.

The badguys! I had some…[Read more]

I’ve been finished all the work in class for an hour

Doing something useful is beyond my power.

A mere mortal trying not to die from boredom

I suppose I’ll just post something on the KP forum.

@whalekeeeper

Hmm. I actually started learning basic historical swordfighting (mostly rapier) in order to write about it with greater accuracy. I took a free online course which told me the basics (parts of the sword, how to hold it, lunges, basic foot movements). I have this wooden dowel that I was using. I should get back into it–I have daily…[Read more]

@koshka

lololol. This book has already been written, and I’m not changing anything, so don’t worry about that. You can email the ideas to me so as to keep the others in the dark though. 😉

@koshka

That emoji really shouldn’t fit you in mad author mode as well as it does. XD

🤣

Julian and Leon both it seems, though Leon’s was more of an encouragement and Julian’s a bit of correction.

Still sorting out who’s going to die before the end of this book, so you’ve done well there.

Have you got any guesses?

@hybridlore

Unless he came back at the head of an army….. 😈

@hybridlore

Yes, but that was a direct scripture quotation, and I’m not going to add my country names into that. 😉

Are ya now? What if he betrays them?

@freed_and_redeemed

Ohhh, they look so good!!!

@koshka

Gotcha.

If it’s PTSD in particular I don’t have much. I have research on gas trauma from WW1, but otherwise I haven’t got a ton. I do have heaps of info on things happening during the war. Here’s two I have bookmarked.

h ttps://www.history.com/articles/history-of-ptsd-and-shell-shock

h ttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=s651JQxSPlU

@liberty

Black horse for a black rider.

What can I say?

@liberty

that’s all you have to say about that section?!?!

😂

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The sixteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
November 25th
The Empire

To Wolf, Peter, and the Church in Landstraten,
Greetings in Christ.

Our time in the Capital has been one filled with blessings and the grace of God. We have a sm…

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