Janellebelovedpig

@spinner4him

Here’s the link to my WIP.

https://editor.reedsy.com/s/p8SdhuQ

If you have any critiques, please reply to this thread and tag me! Thanks for being interested in this! 🙂

@thearcaneaxiom

Do you think I’ve fixed most of the problems we’ve discussed? Anything I need to work on in the “new” chapters?

@acancello @mineralizedwritings  @grcr @esther-c @trailblazer

Okay guys, so since Hugo and Ottoline are kind of a thing, I realized that they have a pretty big age gap. Hugo’s 16, and Ottoline’s only 13! I’m not a fan of age gaps like this during teen romance, so I’m moving Ottoline’s age up to 14/15 so it’s not as weird.

Ottoline

“Well, I…[Read more]

@spinner4him

Okay! Great! I’ll tag you in the thread.

@acancello

HE KISSED HER!!! OH MY GOSH!!!!!! 😍 😂 🤣

THAT IS SOOOOO SWEET!!!!!

@rae

Yes, he’s in a ball whenever he joins. When he joins, the ball will have already begun, so he’ll probably have to get changed and get a mask from the basement (unless he always wears a suit and tie, flats and a mask on regular occasions)

@scoutfinch180

Well, I see the link you posted. I’m not sure if that’s what you want or not. If you haven’t already, maybe try the link button at the top of the response box? 🤷🏻‍♀️ idk

@sarafini

That’s a great question! And actually, I’m planning to write a non-magical fantasy sometime in the future.

I think all you have to do is make the world unique. Magic doesn’t define fantasy, although it often is a big component of it. You can create different races, or different culture within one world or country. Whatever you want…[Read more]

@acancello @mineralizedwritings @freedomwriter76 @grcr @savannah_grace2009 @trailblazer

Ok, since we have a weird guy to girl ration, I’ll go ahead and add in Hedieh. It’ll be fun. 😉

Amir

Amir squirmed in his seat, trying to get comfortable. He hated wearing this tight-fitting suit, but if it was for tradition, then he told himself he wou…[Read more]

@esther-c @mineralizedwritings @freedomwriter76 @grcr @savannah_grace2009 @trailblazer

Heres a short one that might get the party started!

Hugo

Hugo waited on the couch for Ottoline to get ready, he could only imagine how she looked with makeup on. He had a nice chat with Amir, Lane and David who were already dressed up in suits like…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I will see if I can write one today or tomorrow! Also, I am sure that Hugo will dance with Ottoline, but group dances would be fun! Maybe some boys should bring dates since we hardly have any girls? Or do you think that would be to crazy? (Sorry if someone already asked that!) 😀

@trailblazer

That’s funny! haha

@grcr

Okay!

@grcr

I’m pretty sure that the house only said that they had to participate in the party itself (I just looked back and read it), not that everybody had to dance. So this might work.

Everybody has to wear a mask and dress up, I’m assuming.

Except now we have to decide which boys are going to sit in the corner and which ones are going to dance.

@thearcaneaxiom @kyronthearcanin

Here’s where my problem lies: I need to show small details (a well outside the city, the slums, different districts, etc.) but drawing each individual building and block and street is IMPOSSIBLE since it’s a huge city! So what do you guys think I should do?

Should I omit these details altogether or is there a way…[Read more]

@grcr @trailblazer

I think we should have a small group of “annoying” guys that eat food and do “stupid” and funny stuff in the corner, lol. Then we still have some guys sharing the girls, but it’s not like a 10 to 2 ratio, and there’s still dancing.

What do you think?

@rae

So basically this is a hidden cabin in the woods,  and these characters all show up and nobody knows who owns it. The door locks by itself  so they’re forced to stay with each other. Hugo and Ottoline (two characters) share their past and fall in love (lol) and then the house forces them to do a series of activities. One of which is a m…[Read more]

@grcr @acancello @trailblazer @mineralizedwritings @keilah-h @rae @sarafini @anyone else

Yeah….I wasn’t sure if you danced at a masquerade ball…but that makes sense.

I mean, at some parties the boys just sit and talk about stupid stuff and eat food and make dumb jokes and do the macarena….so not everybody would have to have a girl to dance…[Read more]

Let the drama begin.

Hehe.

@grcr

Oh dear, he’s pale! Must be scared.

Lane moved a few steps closer. GOODNESS! He’s really pale! 

Haha! That’s funny.