Janellebelovedpig

@keilah-h

Draft 4 = I think it’s great, lets let people tear into it and see if it really is.

@keilah-h

Haha! That’s funny. I do have a weak spot for tragedy.

This is draft 4.

I make no comment what-so-ever.

@keilah-h

Thanks!

Hmm. We’ll have to see.

@freed_and_redeemed

You like it?!?!

Aw! That means so much!!!

@keilah-h

*Nods.*

oh, btw, did you read the section?

@keilah-h

and this

@keilah-h

This is Bastille

@hybridlore

I’m like 95% sure they’re going to survive.

Wow.

This is all that came to mind.

@keilah-h

It’s a girl.

@linus-smallprint

I don’t need no Literary License.

I think so. It’s still early in the book. You could kill them all off and switch to a different character at this point as the protagansit, but that would be really weird as you have already established Leon and Julian as the protagonists.

hmmm.

@linus-smallprint

For the reason Leon mentioned. Reflexes happening faster than recognition.

Aha. Makes sense.

From this description, first the yelling and banging, then coming down to see everyone else only just standing there, I thought there was a riot outside. So I was surprised to learn that it was only snow and that there had been no…

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@hybridlore

Oh!

well this is a surprise.

First off, I had expected wails of protest.

Secondly, I was expecting comments about Aelic’s character, so the Julian remark totally threw me off. 😂

Thanks though!

@freed_and_redeemed  @hybridlore    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty  @linus-smallprint

NEXT SECTION!

The next morning, Julian woke to the sound of voices and banging. He leapt to his feet and yanked on his boots. Leon was already pulling on his hat and beat him into the other room.

When Julian arrived, he found Marti…

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@linus-smallprint

I think you are pacing this well for a return journey

Phew. Thanks. 😅

Sneaky. But not wise.

why?

😁

@hybridlore

why?

@hybridlore

yay!

why? what are you worried about?

@freed_and_redeemed  @hybridlore    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty  @linus-smallprint

NEXT SECTION!

Leon, Julian, Rolf, Aelic, and Roland remained with Heinrich and Johannes at the University for five days. It was a wonderful time of fellowship and encouragement for them all. The companions would have liked to stay lon…

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@elishavet-pidyon

WOW!!!

THAT IS STUNNING! I love the perspective and the action.

@whalekeeper

I was thinking the same thing, but I thought maybe I was mistaken because the male version wasn’t coming to mind. 😂