Janellebelovedpig

@rae

I know….I think Wyoh’s going too far…

@savannah_grace2009

Thats totally ok, go with what God wants you to do! The second chapter eased you more into the action which is also a very good type of introduction😊

I kind of am still a little worried that nobody will like it the other way XD

Dont worry, I do! Think of really popular books like Harry Potter,  J.K. Rowling didn’t jump right…[Read more]

@trailblazer

Okay, I just couldn’t remember if they were courting or not. It’s been a while since I’ve read this XD

I kinda want Chester to change his mind and court Libbie, but it would also really hurt Etta and would cause more drama so I don’t at the same time. lol!

@trailblazer

Wait, so is Etta and Chester dating? I can’t remember XD

And I love it!!! It’s so perfect <333

@grcr

Thanks for understanding!! I kind of am still a little worried that nobody will like it the other way XD but I’m happy that I got an answer from God and that makes me feel a lot more confident.

Idk why but I just feel bad for Etta XD

@trailblazer

Awww poor Etta!

@acancello @grcr @hybridlore @esther-c

I’ve been praying about this today…and I just got a strong sense that God wants me to keep the beginning like I had it…like the second link.

I just feel a lot better about the way I had it before. I’m not sure why…I just get anxiety every time I think about starting it that way, and feel immediate…[Read more]

@trailblazer

WHY DO I KEEP SPELLING YOUR TAG WRONG?!?!?!

@traiblazer

Well hurry up and post/write it so I can read it!!!!!!!! XD NOW I’M CURIOUS!!!!! lol!

@esther-c Yeah, Liv has blue eyes. She also has blue skin and hair XD

Livia

She heard Fynn say “Aww”, and it was clear who he was talking about. Liv wanted to smack him upside the head.

“He is so annoying,” she rolled her eyes.

“Tell me about it,” Lukas muttered under his breath.

Liv’s stomach came alive with butterflies as they danced…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

About prologues…I’ve never heard that before! Mine is technically a first chapter, so should I just erase the label of “prologue”?? 😂

You do whatever you want, girl, it’s your story. XD

I had actually never heard that before, but it kind of makes sense. I think some writers also use prologues for info-dumping. I’d rather have…[Read more]

@esther-c

About prologues…I’ve never heard that before! Mine is technically a first chapter, so should I just erase the label of “prologue”?? 😂

you’re good!!! You can just read it over on these links. I posted earlier in this thread, or I can send you the Google docs link so you can comment and edit. I can’t send the docs link now because I’m…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

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@savannah_grace2009

Ok so in this RP I say Liv has blue eyes, but correct me if I’m wrong. 😂

Lukas

Lukas found he couldn’t take his eyes off Liv’s face. He tried, but somehow, he found himself drowning in the crystalline pool of her blue eyes.

“Aww.” He heard a whisper pass by him. He blinked and looked behind him, only to see Fynn dance awa…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

First of all, I love your writing!!

Second, my actual answer to your question. XD Ok. So I think I prefer the first one better. Though I do have an opinion on prologues… I heard an author (who had been writing since forever) say that he doesn’t like prologues because typically writers use them as a way to draw readers in bef…[Read more]

@grcr

Ah, don’t worry, I always enjoy reading the works of other writers!! 😉😊

Aww thanks!

@hybridlore

Sorry, I think my last post lagged.

It’s all Wyoh’s fault…..XD

I really like your idea of doing the flashback and then going to Lilitu’s pov, though!

Okay, great! i’ll think and pray about it, but I’m pretty sure that this fits better than how I had it originally.

@acancello @hybridlore @grcr

You guys, thank you so much for reading it and for everything!! I was kinda scared for some reason that nobody would be interested to even look at it!

 The first one does pull me in better and I want to read more, but I just love the description and feel of the second, however, it may be a bit slow for the beginning…

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