Janellebelovedpig

@linus-smallprint

Not sure why you are apologizing here. Your ideas are welcome.

Maybe the fact that you are the first person to say that to me has something to do with it…… I normally get told to let other people be the authors of their own stories and stick to mine.

@whalekeeper

Is there a goal fulfilled within this first book? I’ve read and watched many series of media, and the ones that make the best impression have an end goal for the entire series and goals for each book/episode.

Yes, of course there is. I wouldn’t write a book without an end goal.

If you have studied story structure that deeply, you sho…

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@savannah_grace2009 @whalekeeper

Someone is having a hard time staying off until Christmas. lolololololol 😀

You might need to try outlining books based on a plot structure…like the Three Act Structure, because it hooks your readers more and you can kind of sense them pushing toward a goal.

Hmmm, well, I have to disagree. I will NEVER start a…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

HOW DO YOU DO THAT?!??!?!

Wow it’s like you can read my mind lol!

Anyways….

@ellette-giselle

I totally agree with what Whaley said.

The time jumps just take away so much from the story (even at the beginning where Aaron and Turin were working together) and it makes me lose interest. You do great at describing outside of the…[Read more]

Guys we should bring this back XD XD XD

ISN’T THAT CRAZY?!?!

SARA ACTUALLY WROTE FOR ONCE IN HER LIFE

Bwahahaha you guys aren’t going to believe what just happened

@ellette-giselle

Just popping in because I’m bored, lol!

I kinda agree with Whaley. The story just doesn’t seem like it’s going towards a specific goal…like the events seem a bit random and idk how to describe it but it’s like your story’s missing something but it frustrates me because I don’t know what exactly I’m missing, just that something…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Because the orphanage plot was out of left field XD

Oh, well what did you expect to happen?

Don’t worry. The orphanage plays a key part in all three books.

@keilah-h

yeah, no kidding!! The amount of drafts you go through before a book is perfect!!!

I mean, it grew a lot from the original, and it clearly isn’t finished either.

@whalekeeper

I’ve already written the whole book. This is my fifth draft actually, and I was looking for reader reaction as well as some thoughts from y’all on structure and character since you are authors. Once I post everything on here, I’m passing this off to my editor.

why do you ask?

@whalekeeper

yes.

@keilah-h @theshadow @whalekeeper @linus-smallprint

New scene!

Asher and Eric were only the first of many war orphans who found shelter in the orphanage. On the second day of the two brother’s arrival, a girl came by saying her mother had felt led to give them some children’s clothing and she hoped Sabina could find someone who needed them. Aft…

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@linus-smallprint

Ooo, we haven’t met the Kunulfs yet. If they go after Alan (and Oliver) for being lefthanded you can use their terror to scare the reader.

Ok, I’m done giving un-asked for ideas.

Sorry.

😀

@linus-smallprint

By the way, I discovered today is Lefthanders day (according to Microsoft at least). What a coincidence!

But then that makes right-handers day ALL THE OTHER days of the year!!! 😀

@linus-smallprint

When you say you don’t have much to say, you mean it. lol.

Don’t you find it a little funny that Aaron is the one to bring the kids back after being the strongest opposer of the idea?

@keilah-h

😊 Thanks. Yeah, they definitely need some development. I can’t wait to see how all three of them react in a situation like this and with each other.

@keilah-h

Awesome!

I kinda feel bad for dumping three new characters on y’all. 🤭