Janellebelovedpig

@koshka

Rory

“How’re you holding up”

Rory glanced over at Leo. “I’m okay.”

Leo nodded and continued on.
Rory glanced back at the school. He felt a crawling sensation along his spine. As if… as if someone was watching them.
Rory evened his pace so it would match Leo’s steps. He came alongside the older boy. “I think someone’s followi…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

Awww 😢😢

@hybridlore

Thank you!

Cute scene between Joseph and Julian? Hmm, not exactly the word I would have gone for…… lol. I think I get what you mean tho.

Ah. I use the name Jesus a lot in my writing. It’s a name with power.

@the_lost-journal

You’re not kicked. You just haven’t RPd so most people guessed you dropped out.

Plus, the boat crew, (which I think you’re characters are with) has done nothing for quiet some time because we’re trying to connect the other groups to them in order to have a little conference and figure out what on earth is…[Read more]

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @grcr

Okay, I made the suggested changes to the last couple of sections, and I’m working on some more Joseph/Amelia interactions. I thought I’d just go ahead and post the next scene while I take care of the other stuff.

NEXT SECTION

After Leon and Julian left…

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@koshka

Quincy was flopped on his back wriggling under a bush. Leo extracted him, taking a moment to brush him off before slinging him over his shoulder.

Best mental picture ever! XD

Rory

Rory looked up at Leo. “Go where? where can we go?” Panic was rising in his chest, but he swallowed it down. He took Leo’s hand and let the young man…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Oh my goodness!

He’s so cool In almost a…. hmmm….. not quite creepy….. maybe, in a shivery way. lol.

He’s very cool and very eye catching. Quite the interesting picture! I like it!

@rae

I know that was rash of Baron, but he’s a soloest so he doesn’t understand teamwork

See, this is what Leon was thinking when he was worried about Baron joining their team.

@liberty

I’m so glad you like it.

Yes, Marta was alright. lol.

@linus-smallprint

Just-

What-

No! 

Seriously, that gave me the ugh-the-main-character-is-doing-something-stupid sinking feeling in my stomach, so bravo. You can successfully torture your readers.

In chapter the 28th, I did notice that some of the dialogue between Alan and his father is a bit stiff. For example:

Alan gave his father a…

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@hybridlore

Oh that looks so good!

I’m glad you found something you can use.

@raxforge

No problem. I just thought it was funny. You should see the grammar mistakes in my stuff.

@freed_and_redeemed

Oh that’s so sad.

Poor Hans.

Poor boys all of them.

@raxforge

There’s still a grammar mistake! 😆

It’s “Lord Quakers!” Rax walked towards the gloomy

@hybridlore

Power’s the oldest.

@hybridlore

@linus-smallprint

How did I know y’all were going to say this.

What did I tell you, Hybridlore? I said, I’m trying to work on the next section, but Linus is going to make me redo it and add some fillers.

grrrr.

Okay. Hmmm.

I’ll cut that scene you both agree on.

I’ll try to fill in some Joseph and Amelia stuff.

How much…

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@linus-smallprint

Just met the second crow, but I’m pausing to call something.

I think it’s his mother.

Maybe.

Also, I think you’re missing something?

He remembered the day General Pownce had given it to him. On that day, the lyen general had

Maybe “had said”

Oh shoot.

Linus!!!! WHY! I am furious with you right now. Just…[Read more]

@rae

Oooh, yesss, I love it!! 😍

@the_lost_journal

Hiiiii!

So basically you just compile a bunch of photos and quotes that describe your character. Everyone does it differently and there’s no right or wrong way to do it!

I’d suggest creating a Canva account (go to canva.com and sign up, it’s free!) and you can do really cool things with Canva, though there are other platforms…[Read more]

@grcr

Nice.