Janellebelovedpig

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

NEXT SECTION!!!

Sorry I’m late. Busy today. But, I think it’s a little longer than normal. 🙂

“Thank you so much for the meal, Liesl. It was wonderful,” Julian said.

Liesl smiled. “I’m glad you liked it.”

“So, what are we doing today?” Roland asked. A…

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@hybridlore

great progress!!!

I love this chapter! You really suck me into the game planning which is great because I normally find scenes like this super boring in books. It’s crazy but whatever you did has made it so that I can completely picture the game!!

I sure like Cole.

When’s Alec coming back? he was my favorite!! *puppy…[Read more]

@keilah-h

HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!!!🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳

love the cake!!!!

@the_lost-journal

tbh, I am also confused about the teachings  XD And I do wonder why. But also I get this feeling of fullness after going to confession. So whatever it is, I think I am going to stick to it! Also  thanks for the prayers. I won’t be able to get back to anyone for a while btw. I AM GOING SKIING! ^o^

I agree, it does help to tell oth…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

okay hahahaha sounds good lol

@whalekeeper

no I haven’t!!!

Doesn’t everyone have at least a fragment of virtue though? (Sorry, I don’t mean to shut down everything you’re saying, this is just my thoughts. 😅) I’m not saying they have to be someone that the readers will look up to and be like, “Oh my word I want to be just like them.” I understand mankind is sinful and there probably are people out there t…

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@esther-c

Now, you mentioned your characters not knowing God. And I liked how you put that—“without God there is no hope.” But…you have to think that these characters are probably looking for hope, right? Even just an occasional thought of wishing there was a way out of this darkness they’re living in.

So I know with where they’re at right now,…

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@grcr

LOL I love these parts. 💛💛

Aww, thanks! 🥰 Me too 🤪

Would you want to write this differently… ? before I saw the “she drew out her name” part, my mind read it that she spelled it out. (Maybe I’m just crazy…?)

I don’t knowww 😭 I’ve seen it written like that in books before, but I feel like if I changed it to italics it would carry a differe…[Read more]

@loopylin

idk, KP actually glitched one time because highscribe called me such things so it blocked me for being a threat or something. I’m gonna look back and see what she said. I may end up doing it and scaring a few newbies.

Well, because the pocket knife is replaceable. Change isn’t too hard to come by. The picture….. well he can’t get…[Read more]

Bro, I was literally like smashing the submit button and it took forever for that response to post 🤦🏻‍♀️🤣

@savannah_grace2009

My story is not a lighthearted, hopeful story, at least in the beginning. Right now it’s supposed to be “depressing” and dark. Honestly, to add sprinkles of hope in wouldn’t work for what’s going to happen in the next few chapters. Because right now, none of my characters know God, and so without God there is no hope. I want to…

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@esther-c

I also hope I didn’t come across as rude or brushing you off…I really do appreciate your thoughts because that means I need to work on foreshadowing! And explaining my book to others helps me flesh out my thoughts a little more! Thank you so much! <3

@rae

Alpha’s gonna be so mad lol

this is too good.

@loopylin

I would’ve gone for the photo. Nothing like a good photo to hold hostage. 😉

@linus-smallprint

Oh, I get it. I thought Quinton was the name.

Okay….. hmm. This’ll be interesting. Your grandmother is a woman of good taste when it comes to names if I do say so myself.

If Kleins and Roland aren’t important to the story anymore, spending too much time with them may only make the reader disappointed when they are left b…

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@linus-smallprint

Uh…. not really. It’s kind of a mess.

So wait, how many brothers are there. I got Julian, Roland, Adrian, and Quinton, (almost because I had a Quin)

Are there two or three more?

I was kind of surprised that Leon and Julian are headed out since for both of the previous books, the protagonists just ended up staying with…

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@hybridlore

okay thanks! I’ll think about it!

@esther-c

Ok, so the biggest thing I noticed was the lack of hope throughout the story. The characters seemed to think about death a lot and were put through a lot of physical pain. There’s nothing inherently wrong with that, but it needs to be balanced out with hope. When I got to read those Lilitu/Sef memories from when they were little, that w…

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@hybridlore

okay, well I may wait until next time. i have a tone of stuff going on. We’ll see. 😉