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@keilah-h    @hybridlore

Exactly. She is not a love interest.

Also, another reason her and julian interacting  a lot wouldn’t be a good idea is because she has not had good involvment with men so she is really, really raw in that area and needs extra space.

@hybridlore

No problem. I guessed I’d get your attention with the second scene rather then the first. 😂

Well, I mentioned that Julian didn’t ever go down there, so his reputation got around through gossip rather then his own words.

She will become a part of the church, but she and Julian will not really have any scenes together. 1, it’s not…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Yep that’s true.

YES!! Thank you! It is!

@hybridlore

If you can pause a moment in your sorrow over Leon, what did you think of the scene with Julian and Rosalind?

@hybridlore

Yeah. A friend told me to split it or else he’ll wait to read it when he’s in solitary confinement. 😂

@keilah-h

Yeah! I’m glad you mentioned Julian. Most of the focus seems to be on Leon. I wonder why………… 🤔🤣

Do you think I’m really gonna tell you that?

one thing I’ll suggest, is that I feel like you don’t really introduce the family to us in the first few chapters. At first I wasn’t even sure if Blake was their sibling or not XDXD

They do have a HUGE family, so setting a solid foundation and making all the siblings and the parents unique and established in our minds would be a big thing you…[Read more]

@esther-c

Sorry it took me so long to get to this!!!
I like it a lot!!!! <3 keep it up!!!!

@ellette-giselle

@ellette-giselle lol

@whalekeeper

I have given you access to the document containing what I will say to you during our interview:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_D2daneyR8ztLjBodCE4cVYL5X25DHBosvwc6hl3n_U/edit?userstoinvite=empressofeloquence%40gmail.com&sharingaction=manageaccess&role=writer&tab=t.0

NOBODY ELSE IS ALLOWED TO ACCESS THIS *glares at police*

@hybridlore

I don’t know. You see, because I split Leon and Julian’s story, this book got to 1200+ book pages, so I’m going to cut it in half, but it’s still one full book on the Word Document. I think we only have about 100 Word Doc pages left before the place I planned to split the book, but I could be mistaken.

@hybridlore

Hmm, I’m not sure.

I think we have close to 100 pages left.

@hybridlore

Please tell me you’re not really going to kill him off.

*goes back and rereads section*

He felt himself shaking and he tried to twist away from the source of the blows but couldn’t. As darkness closed in, the pain began to lesson until all he could feel was fire burning through him.

The overseer struck again and again and aga…[Read more]

@hybridlore

But Albee has…..

@hybridlore

Why not?

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NEXT SECTION!!

One evening, Julian was walking home alone from visiting a family and bringing a basket of food Adeline had prepared for them. It was growing dusk, and he was almost out of the alleys when a voice hailed him. “You, stranger, it looks like y…

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@loopylin

Noooo!!! You can put Rory in jail, but leave poor Leo alone!!!!!

@rae

AW!!!

They’re so cute!!! I really love that!

They’re super sweet!