Jane Maree

@winter-rose 😀 Hiya Frodo!

Er… A weird unicorn? For art?

I’m working on writing my new novel. Something bad is going to happen soon! Yay! Uh, I mean…uh. Oh no. That’s terrible. Poor MCs… *sorrynotsorry*

@shannon Fair enough. It can be creepy. 🙂 What about fantasy?

@jess-penrose @dekreel @winter-rose @perfectfifths @daughteroftheking @that_writer_girl_99 Anyone up for word war? 😀 Or just being here? 😀

@Ethryndal I LOVE IT. O.o Now I have to pick which version is the best. Yay. I like the first one best, with the phrasing of all the stuff, but as you’ve already been told and are fixing, it’s too long and gives away too much information. Sooo…

I think I like the first one in your latest post best, but with these differences: keep this version…[Read more]

@Daeus WHAHOO!

@daeus Yes! <i>The Golden Ziggurat</i> is one of my favorite book titles ever! And yeah, I know, don’t judge a book by its cover, but a cool cover helps. 🙂

@ingridrd Oooh, ice cream. This is the best book launch ever. 🙂

@shannon  :-O :-O  Y-you don’t like sci-fi?? How?!

Guess: “75 percent chance of science!”

Okay, peeps, how’s this?

It is a well-accepted fact in the province of Reed that Fairy Godmothers do exist. You might even have one, if you meet all the requirements to be a Distressed Personage, or your father pays enough money. And if you’re lucky — really, truly lucky — you might be one of those rare few who are chosen at random to recei…[Read more]

@daeus  Congrats!! So excited for you! 😉

@ethryndal I think pretty much everyone else has said it, but I’ll confirm. It’s too long and it gives too much of the story away. I think you should condense the first paragraph, but don’t cut all of it out, and then completely get rid of the second paragraph, and then I believe it would be short enough to, say, fit on the back cover of a…[Read more]

@daeus CONGRATULATIONS!!!!!!!!

@Ethryndal definitely better. I love it just how it is, but as Daeus mentioned, you might cut out the first bit about her step-sister without any damage and probably with benefits.

@ethryndal Like normal, I love the voice you use.

You might keep a long version like this for use on your blog, but if you’re going to use this on a sales page or book cover, yeah, it needs to be short.

You can probably make the point about her being heroine material shorter and cut out the part about her step-sister

Hmm… general consensus being it’s too long… *tugs nose* How do I go about this…

Okay, so I sheered the top bit off. Better? Worse? Still too long?

Biddle Frankenmore wasn’t exactly what you would call Heroine Material. She wasn’t beautiful. She couldn’t sing. She wasn’t in any particular sort of distress, besides the occasional tumble…[Read more]

@ethryndal

It’s really gripping 😀 It makes me want to read the book

And it seems like the story its summarizing would be really unique despite the fact Fairies are used kind of a lot in fantasy, so it’s Awesome

I think actually like @shannon and @kate-flournoy and you said, its too long.

And also, it seems to me the second paragraph gets into…[Read more]

@sam-kowal I can see how it must be fun to have Stan as a dragon. 😉

@Ethryndal your sneaking suspicion is absolutely correct, but otherwise this is absolutely brilliant.

Seriously, and I almost forgave it for being too long because all of it was awesome. So yeah. It’s good. *vigorous nodding*