Jane Maree

@dragon-snapper I think taking a break might be a good idea. Whether you want to finish up this draft depends on the kind of person you are. If not finishing it is more discouraging, then definitely finish it. But if you’re going to end up hating the plot and feeling like you’re wasting time by finishing it, I’d take a break.

What Emily said…[Read more]

@emily I’m here! I’ve got some outlining to do 😀 (though I may have to pop away and help my mom bake in a few moments)

@epicaddie2 It’s so cute! *smiles hugely*  I think she’ll enjoy it. :))

@salome01w4g Yay!! That’s the bestiest!!

@GabbyJ I like to write fantasy, fantasy, and a bit of fantasy on the side. 😉 I also have a sci-fi in the works, but it’s almost fantasy it’s so crazy. 😛

*glances at calendar* Oo, it’s almost Christmas! *tosses handfuls of tinsel everywhere*

@dekreel
Well, first person is more direct, and more conversational. You can use the character’s thoughts to great effect, just don’t overload them like I first did writing first person (pages of their thoughts, with no story happening)

AS for the prologue… actually, I think it’s good.
“And this certainly is” should be “And this certainly…[Read more]

@his-instrument Another option is to add in an extra prologue or chapter in the beginning that has a very different tone just to give the reader something positive to latch onto.

@dragon-snapper

It’s obvious! Make the entire story about the villains, not the heroes! Change the point of view and focus in laser sharp on your villains character arcs. Villains deserve more attention anyway 😀

Well, seeing it’s a sequel, that might not actually work. Too bad.

If I were you, I would definitely take a break and work on…[Read more]

@his-instrument I would be willing to read them, if you still need someone to
That storyline sounds really interesting, 😀 by the way.
The main point is, you don’t want to mislead the reader with a super dark ending and then have them confused and probably annoyed when the entire story switches tone. So if the entire story isn’t meant to be dark,…[Read more]

@dekreel One thing I noticed is that most of your sentences are very similar in length. It would help to vary that up a bit. Have some run-on sentences and some normal and some very short.

@dekreel I need to read this! I just need to find some time.

@shannon

Definitely, make a customer inquiry 🙂

If you’re very careful you may touch it. Sabres from Babylon are very one of a kind. ☺

@salome01w4g that’s amazing 😀 thank you God!

@dekreel I don’t usually write in first, but I just finished a 100k novel in first, so I learnt a thing or do whilst I did.

-its a lot more limited, but a lot more intimate, so you end up feeling very close to the character.

-as someone already said, make good use of the five senses, especially touch and taste and smell.

-Give us your…[Read more]

@Gabbyj its pretty cool in Australia! Yes, lots of kangaroos. They’re a bit of a pest to be honest.</p>
That’s sounds cool! I am a very diserve writer, but I particularly like writing historical mixed with fantasy. I just finished the draft of a dystopian novel though

@catwing Probably a dog (but for the record, I myself am a cat person 😉 )

@emily Science maybe.

@dragon-snapper I really don’t have any advice, but I second @Emily said, it’d be a good idea to ask for other’s opinions.

Well, I’ll sign off. But I’ll leave the chocolate pretzels for whoever comes in 😉

@audrey-caylin Okay, Merry Christmas! And may you find your sword and cape 😉

Anyone else around? I have chocolate-covered pretzels!

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