Kingdom Pen | introvert_girl | Activity https://kingdompen.org/members/introvert_girl/activity/ Activity feed for introvert_girl. Sat, 25 Apr 2026 22:12:30 -0400 https://buddypress.org/?v= en-US 30 hourly 2 671c46118b7a5c63d502bb8d17ec9d05 introvert_girl replied to the topic Betas Wanted: QOD in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/betas-wanted-qod/page/2/#post-75090 Fri, 13 Jul 2018 22:24:58 -0400 @valtmy I can’t promise I’ll have the time to read the entire manuscript but I’d love to beta what I can! I sent a request to get into the doc. I’m excited to dive in. 😀

]]> 3fc635b9b243d7c1dd35c2d9ff1cd496 introvert_girl replied to the topic So Long, Farewell (sort of) in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/so-long-farewell-sort-of/#post-75089 Fri, 13 Jul 2018 22:21:29 -0400 @valtmy I just happened to pop back into the forums and saw this. I remember when you requested prayer for a job interview. That’s so great you’ve found a job! God answers prayers in His perfect timing. Just wanted to bless you as you go on this new adventure. 🙂

]]> 94f38d7f6a0972ecc1155795f2260f6e introvert_girl replied to the topic How should I continue this? in the forum Novel Idea Critiques http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/how-should-i-continue-this/page/2/#post-71936 Wed, 02 May 2018 20:30:18 -0400 General impressions: I really liked it, and find the premise/laws of fate to be very intriguing.
Some things I would expect or be interested in seeing moving forward:
– Juqing and Wanyu meeting
– The relationship between Wanyu and her father or Wanyu and her teacher/his family and the other students (how do they react to finding out she’s…[Read more]

]]> 7f9358810f94cd7c7fd92e677c4b50e6 introvert_girl replied to the topic How should I continue this? in the forum Novel Idea Critiques http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/how-should-i-continue-this/#post-71935 Wed, 02 May 2018 20:29:37 -0400 General impressions: I really liked it, and find the premise/laws of fate to be very intriguing.
Some things I would expect or be interested in seeing moving forward:
– Juqing and Wanyu meeting
– The relationship between Wanyu and her father or Wanyu and her teacher/his family and the other students (how do they react to finding out she’s…[Read more]

]]> 14e962b32ccfe05f38f70ca1fcf4f731 introvert_girl replied to the topic How should I continue this? in the forum Novel Idea Critiques http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/how-should-i-continue-this/#post-71860 Tue, 01 May 2018 18:17:28 -0400 @valtmy I’m available to read through this now, though it wouldn’t let me access it.

]]> 189ceb0c5b450ae6a82b96e9487c4d44 introvert_girl replied to the topic How should I continue this? in the forum Novel Idea Critiques http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/how-should-i-continue-this/#post-69968 Tue, 03 Apr 2018 16:06:15 -0400 @valtmy I’d love to read and give my feedback. I may not have the time for a couple weeks, though. I’ll put it on my to do list. 🙂

]]> d1cf966ad2588124218a3b38b3cbb366 introvert_girl replied to the topic PRAYER REQUESTS #2 in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/prayer-requests-2-2/page/31/#post-66324 Sun, 11 Mar 2018 01:50:19 -0500 @valtmy God is so good! I will continue to pray for His guidance and provision in your life! 🙂

]]> a32d6e11b91bf682929136c95326b0cd introvert_girl replied to the topic A Keeper Adventure in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/a-keeper-adventure/page/18/#post-66043 Fri, 09 Mar 2018 20:34:52 -0500 @dekreel I have very fair skin and medium brown hair. (Is that what you were looking for?)

]]> 8edebe2e2ced44ea2b9478c17f59ea50 introvert_girl replied to the topic The best incentive? in the forum Publishing & Platform http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/the-best-incentive/#post-66042 Fri, 09 Mar 2018 20:31:58 -0500 @daeus As did I! 🙂

]]> 2792cbb6c1238fd71ce65b54061a550d introvert_girl replied to the topic What's Your WIP? in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/whats-your-wip/#post-65926 Fri, 09 Mar 2018 01:52:49 -0500 My WIP is told in five parts, each from a different member of the cast. It’s contemporary fantasy because I just really wanted giant lizards and cell phones, magical armor and pizza in the same story.
There are three main protagonists, all apprentices to a Knight (to two different Knights, that is). They get their powers from special stones that…[Read more]

]]> c13cec154b3688f72e3d568c7cfd1bd0 introvert_girl replied to the topic Star Wars Story Prompts in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/star-wars-story-prompts/#post-65386 Sat, 03 Mar 2018 15:16:56 -0500 @inkling-for-christ If you want to write a story that takes place after Return of the Jedi, you could explore how Luke goes about finding other force sensitive people to train them.

]]> 262019cb20d57cbe131c12a55cdadfc0 introvert_girl replied to the topic So... scary thought... I might write a children's story in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/so-scary-thought-i-might-write-a-childrens-story/#post-64962 Wed, 28 Feb 2018 20:30:11 -0500 @daughteroftheking I totally agree with the others. I think we tend to forget how mature 9-13 year olds can be as we get older ourselves (at least, I know I do). Since you have a young MC, I think it’s great for you to have older important cast members. I think someone already mentioned Pixar? You can see they do an excellent job of telling…[Read more]

]]> 1473342aa20658af904442b243dc1708 introvert_girl replied to the topic Any Advice on an Ever-Evolving Theme? in the forum Plotting http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/any-advice-on-an-ever-evolving-theme/#post-64818 Tue, 27 Feb 2018 22:54:56 -0500 *coughs* I really hope I’m not reposting, but I tried to edit my post and it disappeared. . . So . . . Anyways.

@ethryndal I know from personal experience that my writing often grows with me. Your problem may be a result of growing as a person. This is frustrating to deal with, as we can’t really stop ourselves from changing. But once I…[Read more]

]]> a72effe071eb58d780a73e2bc5432eb3 introvert_girl replied to the topic Review my (old) story's prologue in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/review-my-old-storys-prologue/#post-64809 Tue, 27 Feb 2018 18:42:14 -0500 @valtmy Yes, those are all very helpful! I especially like “make those sentences as snappy and quotable as dialogue”. I’d never quite thought of it that way before. Thanks! 🙂

]]> d56748eae14ccf957300e8b3bd1a981a introvert_girl replied to the topic PRAYER REQUESTS #2 in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/prayer-requests-2-2/page/26/#post-64794 Tue, 27 Feb 2018 12:53:30 -0500 @valtmy You and your family are in my prayers! I was reading Psalm 139 this morning, and part of it speaks about how there is nowhere we can go, where the presence of God is not. Height or depth, day or night, one side of the sea or the other “even there your hand shall lead me, and your right hand shall hold me” (verse 10). So I want to encourage…[Read more]

]]> 0e2e394800b9c0d4d2a730215b6a7d46 introvert_girl replied to the topic The Last Jedi in the forum Film http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/the-last-jedi-2/page/5/#post-64725 Mon, 26 Feb 2018 18:55:23 -0500 @jenwriter17 *raises hand* I’ve never been a fan of Han. I also dislike Han and Leia’s relationship *audience gasps*. But I know this is an unpopular opinion.
I’m not ashamed to say I walked out of the theater after seeing TFA for the first time shipping Rey and Kylo. XD And yes, I adore the Last Jedi (most of it 😉 )

]]> 220723cd1cece3e8db7ec6dd6232bc8f introvert_girl replied to the topic Review my (old) story's prologue in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/review-my-old-storys-prologue/#post-64699 Mon, 26 Feb 2018 13:20:10 -0500 @valtmy I find reading description simply tedious, and I know this reflects in my own writing. I definitely know what you mean!! (Visual mediums just spoil us, don’t they?)
Often rough drafts for me look a lot like lines of dialogue and action beats, and then later I have to go in and add the setting’s details. But it’s really helped me to remind…[Read more]

]]> 7b8842d2813198ea01669cc2b5f6d059 introvert_girl replied to the topic Self-Doubt... in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/self-doubt/#post-64661 Mon, 26 Feb 2018 01:20:20 -0500 @everyone “No temptation has overtaken you that is not common to man. God is faithful, and he will not let you be tempted beyond your ability, but with the temptation he will also provide the way of escape, that you may be able to endure it.” (1 Cor 10:13)
This verse came to mind as I was reading through everyone’s posts. I’m thankful @dekreel…[Read more]

]]> 33cebd2eacfdd578c5634299f7851421 introvert_girl replied to the topic Review my (old) story's prologue in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/review-my-old-storys-prologue/#post-64650 Sun, 25 Feb 2018 22:39:12 -0500 @valtmy The opening grabs my attention. I felt a good sense of the characters until you introduce Lu Mo and Pan Kun. Then it became harder to remember everyone’s names. I think giving Lu Mo a distinct characteristic that the reader can latch onto would help that. You did this well with Muchen, I thought. I got a visual of him almost immediately.…[Read more]

]]> 71bb54b80ca83565de9c11b21383dc89 introvert_girl replied to the topic Unlikable Protagonist? in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/unlikable-protagonist/#post-64643 Sun, 25 Feb 2018 22:08:15 -0500 @ashlyvye Thanks for the tips! 🙂

]]> f1cc284aadd311c79e755e9aa831ca15 introvert_girl replied to the topic Self-Doubt... in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/self-doubt/#post-64642 Sun, 25 Feb 2018 22:06:47 -0500 @dekreel Please don’t feel guilty for having different goals for your writing than other people. It’s fine to write just for fun or as a hobby. Writing with the ambition to be published one day doesn’t make someone’s writing more important than someone who feels the way you do. And God calls everyone to use their time in varying ways, and gives us…[Read more]

]]> 1b0b4ba2e62932746d033f8a4f9d244f introvert_girl replied to the topic Character Name Exchange in the forum Fantasy http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/character-name-exchange/page/8/#post-64548 Fri, 23 Feb 2018 20:49:19 -0500 @dekreel I actually had a character nicknamed Peri once upon a time. Her full name was Perdita. A few other suggestions:
Perrine (This is a French name, and I think it sounds beautiful.)
Persephone (Greek Mythology)
I also had the thought that you could look for names that don’t begin with P, but have a “per” somewhere in them such as Juniper.

]]> 7e982e962fac000b30f166badb42ec7c introvert_girl replied to the topic Unlikable Protagonist? in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/unlikable-protagonist/#post-64544 Fri, 23 Feb 2018 19:38:16 -0500 @skredder That’s been one of my fears, that people wouldn’t stick around long enough to see her growth. But I’m glad to hear that seeing the character change helps to make them likable.

@sam-kowal That’s so interesting! I’ve heard about Likability, Proactivity and Competence before, but not Disability. I find that more compelling, actually. It…[Read more]

]]> 11d2e0474954fc762e0374161355232f introvert_girl started the topic Unlikable Protagonist? in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/unlikable-protagonist/ Fri, 23 Feb 2018 01:10:35 -0500 So I’ve been struggling with this through multiple projects, in that my protagonist doesn’t seem very likable when they’re introduced. In the case I’m dealing with now, the MC has a temper, and says some unkind things about someone she’s irritated with in the opening scene. Do you have advice for dealing with difficult protagonists? Would showing…[Read more]

]]> bbee23944d95efa00a41739193039463 introvert_girl replied to the topic Just a Bit... Dismal in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/just-a-bit-dismal/#post-64252 Tue, 20 Feb 2018 16:53:01 -0500 @dragon-snapper If you feel like there’s too much emotion bogging your story down, your scene sequel ratio may be off. K. M. Weiland has a series of articles about structuring scenes that may be helpful.
If it’s smaller scale that you’re dealing with, my advice is to write the first draft and then do adjustments in revisions, when you can evaluate…[Read more]

]]> 7735b91a3d97022ee7fcc2a7492e9cc6 introvert_girl replied to the topic My *gag* Children's Books in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/my-gag-childrens-books/#post-64247 Tue, 20 Feb 2018 13:28:31 -0500 @valtmy I wholehearteadly beleaf you 😉

]]> f29557e82de7d2c991df11ac429d5d50 introvert_girl replied to the topic The Writerly Adventures of Jenna Trapperton in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/the-writerly-adventures-of-jenna-trapperton/page/3/#post-64243 Tue, 20 Feb 2018 03:31:50 -0500 @sam-kowal I’m planning on jumping on the Kapeefer fanfic train, and had some questions about Stan, and didn’t want to make a new thread just to ask. So I was wondering whether or not Stan can fly, aprox. how large he is, and what color he is?

]]> 344f496eec7bda2649de09e78755e22c introvert_girl replied to the topic My *gag* Children's Books in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/my-gag-childrens-books/#post-64200 Mon, 19 Feb 2018 16:22:46 -0500 @dekreel I agree with the others, that it could benefit from more tension. I’d also try to think of ways to make the main characters more distinct from each other. This could also be a source of conflict, not that they dislike each other, but that different personalities can create obstacles they have to overcome because they care about each…[Read more]

]]> 11baf776999ca0efb2dff8d5a465e1bc introvert_girl and Rochellaine are now friends https://kingdompen.org/activity/p/71025/ Sun, 18 Feb 2018 03:06:05 -0500 0 b422987cc60e937630a68964da0f1bd7 introvert_girl replied to the topic The Writerly Adventures of Jenna Trapperton in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/the-writerly-adventures-of-jenna-trapperton/page/2/#post-64050 Sun, 18 Feb 2018 01:16:58 -0500 @dekreel This is so fun! Look forward to more. 🙂

]]> 17381a1a9c46d214c35777b80f671e9a introvert_girl replied to the topic Comic Poem Tag Experiment in the forum Poetry http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/comic-poem-tag-experiment/#post-64049 Sun, 18 Feb 2018 01:16:01 -0500 @rochellaine I love this! So quirky and sweet! Thanks for sharing 🙂

]]> d102f9cf629e976c92f7801fb0401ed1 introvert_girl replied to the topic Beta Students Needed for Mini Course in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/beta-students-needed-for-mini-course/#post-63907 Sat, 17 Feb 2018 00:57:48 -0500 @aratrea It’s a bit last minute for me but I may be able to squeeze it in. I’ll shoot you an email like the others then? (If you’ve already lined up enough betas by now, that’s fine too.) 🙂

]]> 81dc52687088da55ec70c7b2933a46bd introvert_girl replied to the topic Writer's Corner #13 in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/writers-corner-13/page/16/#post-63585 Thu, 15 Feb 2018 01:41:58 -0500 @jenwriter17 What ethnicity or family background do your characters come from? For O I thought of a lot of Irish or Gaelic names such as O’Neill (though that may not be appropriate for said character.)

]]> 37779f39abb92e7dee8723b042154692 introvert_girl replied to the topic How many characters is too many? in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/how-many-characters-is-too-many/#post-63519 Wed, 14 Feb 2018 16:26:29 -0500 @ariella-newheart 30 characters may not be too many for a series. My favorite analogy about this, is imagining myself (the writer) having a pitcher of water. Each character is a glass, and I decide how many glasses there are, and how much water I pour into each glass. In a short story for instance, I won’t have a lot of water, so pouring just a…[Read more]

]]> de7be9289ea89de3249d1e8b9d0652e2 introvert_girl replied to the topic The Synopsis Nook in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/the-synopsis-nook/#post-63065 Sat, 10 Feb 2018 19:12:56 -0500 @sam-kowal “No dwarf wants to. . .” might be a good place to start the synopsis? I see what the others are saying. Though I will differ and say I really liked the last sentence. It doesn’t have a huge sense of foreboding to it, so if that’s what you want to go for, I’d change it. But I think it sounds like we’re getting ready to go on a fun…[Read more]

]]> 4092b0a64ef00299e9d46aaf496d806b introvert_girl replied to the topic The Synopsis Nook in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/the-synopsis-nook/#post-63028 Sat, 10 Feb 2018 16:13:45 -0500 @sam-kowal I actually love the idea of mixing fantasy with advanced technology. (so cool!)
Your synopsis definitely intrigued me! I’m really curious about Limnet and what his role is in all this. Does he build the humans their suits, and/or is he one of the humans going into the arena?

]]> e6454d5567b2a478a8561fdea8c98eae introvert_girl replied to the topic Writer's Corner #13 in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/writers-corner-13/page/6/#post-63019 Sat, 10 Feb 2018 14:12:54 -0500 @seekjustice That’s cool that you’re learning French! Me and my sister @itisastarrynight are currently learning too.
Is it difficult balancing learning two languages at the same time?

]]> 4be18c589cd89225cc750d7fea50c985 introvert_girl replied to the topic Romance Novel Pet Peeves and Cliches in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/romance-novel-pet-peeves-and-cliches/#post-62968 Sat, 10 Feb 2018 02:32:03 -0500 @valtmy Yess! I adore a sweet meet cute! *dreamy sigh*

]]> 63ff0c56ca5510e22d0725a45482cdcc introvert_girl replied to the topic Hi fellow KaPeeFers!!! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hi-fellow-kapeefers/page/15/#post-62964 Sat, 10 Feb 2018 02:10:47 -0500 @the-real-kapeefer That’s beautiful.

]]> b2e3eb337a8197e58a418117f2a123e5 introvert_girl replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-15/page/2/#post-62933 Fri, 09 Feb 2018 20:09:44 -0500 @joisebeth Hello! *tosses confetti* Welcome to the forums!
Do you have a favorite color? Do you have a favorite character? (and what about that character makes them your favorite?)

]]> d38e1304f1b0b90837d42471d2391077 introvert_girl replied to the topic Romance Novel Pet Peeves and Cliches in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/romance-novel-pet-peeves-and-cliches/#post-62931 Fri, 09 Feb 2018 20:06:23 -0500 I have a soft spot for the reverse of what I’ve said previously. Additionally:
I love seeing characters put together surprises for someone they love (like a gift, or planning a special dinner, etc.)
I like seeing characters just having fun spending time together. This shows the reader that they genuinely enjoy one another’s company.
I love seeing…[Read more]

]]> 008b4cdd6a9c49a11db6a170fed8c30a introvert_girl replied to the topic Romance Novel Pet Peeves and Cliches in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/romance-novel-pet-peeves-and-cliches/#post-62754 Thu, 08 Feb 2018 15:43:21 -0500 @valtmy
I should probably clarify that I’m not saying these things should never be used, but they should be used intentionally. Perhaps you are trying to make a point about how people idealize romantic relationships, and think that a bf/gf will solve all their problems.

]]> 56e3a769e69a3c89f8cac48bfde3d5ee introvert_girl replied to the topic Romance Novel Pet Peeves and Cliches in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/romance-novel-pet-peeves-and-cliches/#post-62752 Thu, 08 Feb 2018 15:39:24 -0500 @valtmy
This is not only used in romance, but I see it used a lot in that context. I personally really dislike when writers use misunderstandings to create conflict, and every time I think “If they could spend five minutes talking to each other, this would not be an issue.” If you do use miscommunication to create tension in a relationship, I…[Read more]

]]> 13d4e82b70c4e6d05f50856cfe6d9239 introvert_girl replied to the topic The Better Books Survey in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/the-better-books-survey/page/2/#post-62651 Wed, 07 Feb 2018 22:51:02 -0500 @jenwriter17 I’d wondered that too. He said they’d be available here on KP. 🙂
And that’s so cool! What are you planning on publishing?

]]> 7ff57e8194310f85bf004529651e33fc introvert_girl replied to the topic The Better Books Survey in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/the-better-books-survey/page/2/#post-62645 Wed, 07 Feb 2018 22:11:38 -0500 @daeus My favorite author is James Riley, though I’m not sure what his website is called or how to contact him, but I’m sure if you search James Riley Story Thieves you’d find something.
The ladies who put together the Go Teen Writers blog also come to mind. You could see if any of them would be interested. 🙂

]]> d709b0e10fb4e2f5e7bfe488a60295e7 introvert_girl replied to the topic The Beginning of the Sequel in the forum Plotting http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/the-beginning-of-the-sequel/#post-62617 Wed, 07 Feb 2018 18:10:35 -0500 @mnvalentine Yes, I think the effect previous events have had on the characters is super important to keep in mind! Thanks 🙂

]]> f8ff7b46242148674471d84c60006c82 introvert_girl replied to the topic The Beginning of the Sequel in the forum Plotting http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/the-beginning-of-the-sequel/#post-62601 Wed, 07 Feb 2018 14:42:13 -0500 @dragon-snapper
I think that can be effective, but in the sequel I’m working on right now the external antagonist isn’t the main conflict of the story. I think it would be misleading if I did that in this instance.
I think it’s very important to think of it as a *new* book. If there’s nothing new, then there’s not really a point in telling the…[Read more]

]]> b258366dc35943b353e0024204fdb6bd introvert_girl replied to the topic The Beginning of the Sequel in the forum Plotting http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/the-beginning-of-the-sequel/#post-62533 Tue, 06 Feb 2018 20:05:10 -0500 @mnvalentine Yes! I think showing the reader who the characters are presently and how things around them are different now is very important.
Is it necessary to review events of the previous book if they’re not relevant to the current events?
And I’m not sure I quite understand your last question. Could you maybe elaborate a bit?

(Also, I love…[Read more]

]]> 0c37d60c1e56bd868ac094cf31f7d8cc introvert_girl started the topic The Beginning of the Sequel in the forum Plotting http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/the-beginning-of-the-sequel/ Tue, 06 Feb 2018 18:49:44 -0500 I’m on the quest for tips on writing the opening of a second book. It has different needs/challenges from the opening of a standalone or first book in a series. I’d like to hear some wisdom from fellow kapeefers! 🙂
(Answers can address the first page, first act, whatever.)

@dekreel @dragon-snapper @valtmy @anyone

]]> 3a5f16a8c591221a5597166fab9cf163 introvert_girl and valtmy are now friends https://kingdompen.org/activity/p/69259/ Sun, 04 Feb 2018 06:27:24 -0500 0