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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
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NEXT SECTION!!
Happy happy day! It’s super long!!!
Joseph sat on his bed and carefully opened the journal, his fingers trembling with the wave of emotions that filled him. Memories of Aaron flooded his mind, and for a moment he was too blinded by tears to…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
*steals Joseph and Eric from Ellette*
Wow. loyalties changed.
So I’m free to kill Asher, Julian, and Sabina?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
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NEXT SECTION
The next morning when Joseph woke, he lay in bed a moment, trying to remember what had happened the day before. All at once it came back to him and he scrambled to his feet. Yanking on his vest he hurried into the hall and knocked on Asher and E…
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Monseur de André replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
I was kind of shipping you guys in my head already
You’re not the first, lol
It was pretty obvious. lol.
Do you mean the ship or something else? And if you mean the ship, I don’t know if I should take offence of that or not, lol, jk
Also, if anyone thinks that I am adorable because I am small and chubby, they are…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
Asher would not appreciate you bringing that up again. lol.
No, not much to rewrite. Just a little.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
Okay, I see what you mean. Eric was just teasing when he was being formal.
I’m envisioning a much larger cut. As I said, a “gash”And actually, depending on where the cut is, you can bleed out.Maybe not from something like that, though. That might be overdoing it. This is my first draft of this section. 😉
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
So, now that I’m going with this version, do you have any overall thoughts about the section?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
No, you can’t just say that. Give me a literary reason why I should do this rather then the other one. Why is this better?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
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ALTERNATE NEXT SECTION!!!!!
Please be honest as y’all read this, because saving the boys is going to be a HUGE change. However, I think it may be the right one, and some interesting things happened that makes me think so. However, I am still on the edge, a…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic Animal RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 3 weeks ago
Just in case anyone is backing out because they don’t have animal characters, let me say: that’s okay.
You can create an animal character, or you can actually…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 3 weeks ago
Don’t rub it in.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 3 weeks ago
having hybridlore on the protection squad is scary! Why did I ever tell her about it?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 3 weeks ago
okay!! Fine!! I give in.
I’ll rewrite that whole scene tomorrow.
y’all win.
*slams down pencil in despair.*
it actually won’t hurt the plot much, and you are actually making sense.
fine. I’ll do it.
they go free. Both of them.
I can’t believe I’m doing this.
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Koshka replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 3 weeks ago
*GASPETH*
*Throws confetti*
*Offers you a medal of honor for your bravery in the Character Protection Squad service*
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Koshka replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 3 weeks ago
*Straightens sunglasses*
I’d say don’t kill the boys. You could bring them close, scare the living daylights out of the others, but don’t kill them.
I expected them to get captured and killed. It felt like “here we go again”. So many characters by this time have been killed, that it was almost…boring? Change…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 3 weeks ago
Yes you are you little…. little…… I don’t know what you are.
Dangerous person.
Lol. I’m having a great day. Having a lot of fun plotting my next book and building character boards and aesthetics.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 3 weeks ago
Oh good grief.
I’m gonna do it.
I’m gonna save him.
Eric’s gonna live.
How on earth did you get me to do that?
I can’t believe I’m going to do this.
You are dangerous.
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whaley replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 3 weeks ago
Also @ellette-giselle @hybridlore I just saw your character death intervention and I’m quite entertained by it. 😂 Y’all are feeding the #savethecharrie movement. People on here never change.
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