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@rae

Great section!! 💕

@liberty

The blurb looks great! Very intriguing.

@ellette-giselle

True, true 😂

And it has a lot to do with–––––

You’re just going to leave me hanging? XD

Ahh, gotcha.

@ellette-giselle

Great section!! I think you pulled it off. It doesn’t feel too odd or confusing. We are told when the time is passing by, and given a few details, and then the winter is over.

and the other down Julian’s back while he lay sleeping.

😂😂😂 Talk about a rude awakening!

I’m interested in Leon’s backstory more now. He seems to be hidi…[Read more]

@liberty

Violin would be easier to learn coming from a pianist background! But yeah, I understand if you already have too many instruments.

I will say that it’s hardest in the beginning, probably. When you are just starting out, it’s hard to get it to sound good. But if you can stick with it for a few months, it gets better. 😉

@liberty

I do!

You don’t, do you?

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, it’s so weird because basically all they’re getting is the character’s personality and description in-book . . . also moodboards, which probably influenced it a lot xD But still, it’s cool seeing other people’s imaginations on paper.

@ellette-giselle

Right. Just make sure to give the readers some regular scenes too, so that there’s a blend between time jumps and regular speed. But you’ve already done this in the sections we’ve read, so just keep it up. 😜

@ellette-giselle

I imagine her with darker eyes and probably looking a little younger, but you did pretty well. 😁

@whalekeeper

I and my younger sister sometimes have telepathy moments too, so I think it’s more of a close sibling thing.

Hey, that happens to me and my younger sister as well! We’re almost 2 years apart, but spend a good amount of time together (as homeschoolers 😝). We’re always trying to say the same thing or making the same connections.

@linus-smallprint

Wow, your depiction of her personality was really cool to read. I hadn’t even thought about all those things together like that–like how she pauses to consider different things–but you have a good point.

Awesome, thank you!! I’m glad it doesn’t seem to be too much for you guys.

@whalekeeper

Oh yeeaah, I did. Okay, makes more sense that you knew. 🤣 Yep, I signed up! I think I’m in Brookside Stories?

🤣🤣

Oh, awesome!! I guess I’ll see you on there, then! 😉

I don’t think I can survive another week. 😳😝 And the teacher puts ME in the trouble chair.

The trouble chair?? XD

Godzilla origins are pretty cool. Having watched som…

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@ellette-giselle

Thank you so much!!!!

She’s not smiling because I was trying to capture the way she feels to me at this point in the story. Hope that’s okay.

That’s totally fine! I like seeing how other people picture my characters–I don’t know, it’s just really interesting and cool. And yeah, I don’t know if I would imagine her smiling eit…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I like the section, though again, like we’ve talked about before, you do kind of gloss over everything and summarize it all in a page or two. That’s fine, though, if this isn’t a super important part of the story. It would be nice to get to see some more specifically of the new characters who’ve joined Julian and Leon, since we…[Read more]

@liberty

Ahh, so exciting!! Great job!!!

@whalekeeper

Wait… you posted in the spring channel here, I think. Are you joining KDWC?

Lolol! Yeah, senior year is kind of crazy.

Normally everyone’s trying to kill each other with jokes.

🤣🤪

Oh wow. I’ve never really thought about that before, but it must be really weird and interesting. What’s the coolest thing you’ve learned so far?

Yea…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Great! Yeah, I thought it was a really cool way to detail the narrative and make Sara’s voice distinct. I’m glad it doesn’t feel too distracting. Now to be more consistent with it 🤔😂

@whalekeeper

You’re good! XD

Oh, this is unrelated, but by the way, how is Challenge 4 going? What are you planning to do for your senior thesis? (I saw you were sprinting to work on it.)

I think I understand what you were trying to say, and I love that idea! A scene is starting to form in my head already 😅 The only problem is, I’ll have to…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Awesome!! Sorry I stopped tagging you, I didn’t know if you were still reading.

Thank you so much for the feedback! Making the world relatable was one of my big focuses, because I didn’t want it to just be this unrealistic cliche dystopian. I wanted the reader to be able to see why the government was this way, and for the gra…[Read more]