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@skredder, @daughteroftheking, Thank you. 🙂

@epicaddie2, @ingridrd, Thanks guys! 🙂

@clairec  Oh praise the Lord!  So glad you all are safe.  🙂

@epicaddie2

@christi-eaton. Thanks so much girl!

@epicaddie, @daughteroftheking, @skredder, @ingridrd, @dragon-snapper,

I have a praise point!

Last night a really big storm passed through our area. I really love the beauty of a storm, in fact my favourite kind of day is a rainy or stormy one.

Last night, though we were playing sport on the football field at the end of our street, and the…[Read more]

@radically-surrendered, *gasp* you’re right!

@dragon-snapper, Doctor, doctor, come quickly, everyone’s *dying*! What do you prescribe?

@rochellaine

Oh, yep, there you go. XD

@rochellaine, Sorry, just got back from church. 🙂

I haven’t read a whole lot of time travel, but I’m certainly open to it.

And the Captain America I’m talking about is ‘The First Avenger’. The one with Hydra (look it up) 🙂

@dekreel That’s utterly hilarious! Thanks for tagging me or I would have missed it. I seriously need to get on here more.

@sam-kowal Good revisions. (And good synopsis in general, btw. These things are hard.)

Possibly, these three revisions could help.

Feastings end – feasting ends.

Only humans farm in the city of Kurr. Dwarfs would rather win glory in the exosuit arena. When food got low in the winter of 1276, the dwarves robbed us of our crops.

The dwarfs are…[Read more]

@rochellaine, I like it! It’s a great analogy.

I’m writing alternative historical fiction about the Pacific (mainly Australia and Papua New Guinea) in WWII. When I first mentioned that here on the forum everyone’s reactions were “You’re changing history? You can’t do that!” But. Think Captain America (which I haven’t seen, but know the entire…[Read more]

@rochellaine, ah-hah! Another person who isn’t really into fantasy. Isn’t it funny how everyone on here seems to be writing about elves? 😛 I might write some fantasy in the future, but for now my writing tries to stay relatively realistic. Do you read fantasy, or do you just not like it very much?

@Sam-Kowal perfect. 😀

@sam-kowal The idea is definitely intriguing.

As far as the synopsis goes, I agree with Kate that the voice is slightly inconsistent. My main advice though is cut anything you can. Like, “believe me, that tends to curb one’s appetite could be cut. There are a few words you cut elsewhere or phrases you could rephrase to sue less word.

Also, I…[Read more]

@Sam-Kowal ooh I really like it! Super cool concept. I think I’d definitely pick it up and read it.

On a more writerly note, the synopsis itself is well written, but it does seem a little choppy in places. It may simply be a case of too many fragments. Also, this is bugging me a little and it’s probably just me. But the voice is inconsistent……[Read more]

@JoiseBeth Welcome to KP! Mere Christianity is great. 😀

@rochellaine, Funny! 😛