HighScribe

@theducktator

That’s why I think it would be easier to do if Tyn was there. She would bring up all the objections, so it would be easier to show that I don’t approve of forced labour.

Thank you for your feedback. I will think about it further.

@keilah-h @ellette-giselle

Y’all were talking about British and Australian exclamations and it reminded me of something that happened recently…

So we have friends who are Australian, but their dad is the only one who actually naturally has the accent. I’m a sucker for the Aussie accent, lol. And I was talking with him one time and with some…[Read more]

Also, one thing I just thought of; we don’t really care about the characters’ families since we haven’t met them yet. Maybe it would be a good idea to lengthen the first chapter by showing Jack and Elina getting home and seeing their parents and siblings.

@theshadow

This chapter does a good job building up the suspense! The only thing I would say is yeah, Ellette has a point. These girls seem to be so mean for no real reason that I can guess at yet. It makes them feel flatter, rather than like actual people who have motives and stuff for their actions. Their ultimate goal, especially in a…[Read more]

@loopylin

Sure! They’re in the entrance right now.

Vyette

Vyette glared up at the school. A boarding school! How could her father do this to her? “It’s an experience,” he’d said. An experience? Maybe for the working class. She shoved another bag at her maid, who was already carrying four. “Come on. Don’t take all day.” She stalked into the…[Read more]

@theshadow

i am so relieved Jack is still there!! Also, I have a feeling I’m going to like Dylan.
just a hunch.

also, I’m not sure about Olivia and Adaline’s reaction. You see, when people bully others it tends to be because of insecurity and cowardice. I have yet to meet a truly confidant and courageous bully. That being said, they seem too c…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

lol. I guess that’s what happens when we both read the same book…

Which world was it?

@linus-smallprint

Ducktator, did you see that note I added on the idea of using a slave to push Alan in the direction of trusting and obeying The Saviour? What are your thoughts on that?

I’m not sure. I see how it would help your story, and it’s an interesting perspective to take. My main concern would be people thinking you support slavery. I…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Oh, so that’s what this picture was about:

Why is he dead though?

@hybridlore

Thanks!

No, this one spawned an entirely new setting. I just can’t help it!

@jonas

Wow. I love this idea. This sounds super interesting. Is it connected to your current series?

@highscribeofaetherium @hybridlore @theducktator @loopylin @grcr

Thanks for the feedback! So far, it looks like the popularity ranking is:

1. Chromancy
2. Spectrachromy
3. Prismathurgy
4. Spectrathurgy
5. Spectralurgy

With the other three having no votes. I’ll take this into consideration.

As some have guessed, this is a color-based magic system.…[Read more]

@jonas

I like Spectrachromy… and Chromancy…

Prismathurgy is alright… but I’m not head over heels about it…

I don’t really like the other five… 😁

@ellette-giselle

Aw, that’s okay! If you know of a different way to get it through, I’m open to trying other things, but I understand if it’s too difficult for you to do right now.

@hybridlore

no!!! I can’t access this without my laptop!! 😭😭😭😭

I’ll let you know what I think the minute I get home!!

@jonas

My favorite is Chromancy.

Some things I’d really like to hear from y’all are scene ideas. I’m planning to go back and extend a lot of the earlier chapters (at least 1-6) because I didn’t have the same word count goal for them as I do now. So if you have any ideas for scenes that would fit into those (or future scenes) I would love to hear them. So far I have a chapter…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle (I know you’re away, so don’t feel obligated to respond to this until you get back) @theshadow @whalekeeper @koshka @raxforge

Sorry these are late, it slipped my mind until last night. Without further ado, here are chapters seven and eight (also known as the underground church cha…[Read more]

@jonas

My favorite is Chromancy, but I also like Chromamancy, Prismathurgy, and Spectrathurgy. For some reason the sole “t” and “l” sounds bother me when placed in front of “urgy”.