HighScribe

I’ll try.

@jonas

I haven’t, but I haven’t tried to edit anything recently.

@rae

Those are really cool!

@thearcaneaxiom

That’s fair. If it feels natural to you, than I’d say leave it, as long as it isn’t creating weird jarring breaks that throw the reader out of the story, which I don’t think it is, except for here:

You’re telling me.

Where I had to pause for a moment and reread it. I’m still not sure if I understand this line 😂…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Sure. Let’s see…here, I found this paragraph especially confusing:

You’re telling me. I had more questions, but held my tongue because Thing’s current track record hasn’t been the most helpful for answering them, other than explaining my inability to eat.

And there were a couple other spots where it switches to present tense lik…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Just popping in, I know I haven’t been very active on here…

Is 6 MC’s too many, or should I stick with my original 5?

It really depends. If Liv is going to be important enough to be an MC and if you can make each of their viewpoints interesting and make every character unique, I’d say go for it. I know GodlyFantasy has, li…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

(Uhhh, has anyone noticed that @sarafini has vanished? All her past posts say anonymous now… Did she just leave?)

I didn’t notice that before, but I went back and looked, and yeah. I guess she’s not on the forum anymore?

Great chapter! The bounce between present and past tense was very confusing, though. Were the parts in p…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

It looks amazing!

@loopylin

That’s so cooooooool 😮

@thearcaneaxiom

👀

@thearcaneaxiom

Thank you for explaining 😅 I’m not a science person, so I don’t have a good grasp on all that stuff. Thanks.

One question though, would you say that the robot might be too annoying, or the right amount? Because she’s going to become a prevalent character. I want her irritating for Tailen, but only funny and sweet for the reade…

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@jonas

I like Daybreak.

@loopylin

Ohhhh cool! I don’t find it too creepy.

@thearcaneaxiom

I really like the chapter! You did really well explaining things, but not info-dumping. One question, though, if Tailen is going to starve to death, wouldn’t he die of dehydration first? Or was that explained and I just missed it?

As for the covers, the first one is simpler, which might be good, but the other one is cool too. N…[Read more]

@jonas

Ok