Hannah Olsen

@dragon-snapper I might have been called King Daeus once, but I can’t remember clearly. I know we called Josiah The Wiser a couple times. 😉

@emma-flournoy *bows low, stroking cliché mustache* Much appreciated.

😀 😀 😀 😀 😀

I was planning to write right about now, but then this came up, and, well…I’m not disappointed I stopped to read. May the clichés never end!

@dragon-snapper Yay!! I’m so excited! *texts Mom to buy extra raspberries to eat while reading*

😀 *licks icecream*

@lifeofkatie

Ok, my top recommendations are these:

The Count of Monte Cristo — my all time favorite novel. It’s huge, but well worth every page. It’s historical fiction and high drama.

Cry The Beloved Country — The best explicitly Christian novel I’ve ever read. It’s very deep and very moving. It’s got heart for sure.

A Tale of Two Cities –…[Read more]

Thoughts:

The imagery here is good.

First line: wakes works better than awakes.

“No longer free does flow” doesn’t flow well off the tongue.

“the earth had”: “the earth was” works better, I think.

“To warmer weather flee”: Took me a moment to figure out what that meant.

“through flowers flit”: I love the sound of that 🙂

The rythm wasn’t…[Read more]

@Anne-of-Lothlorien the first is beautiful and the second hilarious. XD

@Anne-of-Lothlorien what @Daeus said. 😛

@AnneofLothlorien what @Daeus said. 😛

@Anne-of-Lothlorien I don’t see anything to pick at, but there’s not much more than externals here. Here are my questions to get to the heart of the story.

1. What’s the girl’s inner longing? e.g. she wants her parents to be reunited.
2. What’s the girl’s story goal? e.g. get back to her parents. (it’s best if her longing and goal can be closely…[Read more]

Hmm. Somebody added me to their facebook group. That might be neat to attend. We’ll see.

@his-instrument Cool! I shall have to check these out.

(@aratrea You’ll have to add these to your list of potential partners.)

Signing off. I edited half a chapter.

@That_Writer_Girl_99 in general. I know I sort of left you hanging in the middle of a brainstorming session, and we were going to do that character exercise thing too, and I still want to do that. I just wanted to let you know I hadn’t disappeared off the face of the earth. ;P

@dragon-snapper @daughteroftheking I’m joining in.

@That_Writer_Girl_99 I’m not ignoring you, I promise. 😛 Life got really busy. I’m helping my little brother sell some of his hand made walking sticks at a festival and also selling some jewelry I made, and making more, on top of every-day busy-ness with everything else our family does. Things should slow down by next week though.

Just fyi. 😉

Sounds like a good idea @bethany-sinky-roses. Small sounds best, ie. postcard size, I guess because I would be more likely to want to take something that doesn’t take up much room & has all its information compacted.

Signing off. I think I broke through the Outliner’s Block that has been ailing me. We’ll see how it goes tomorrow.