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@savannah_grace2009

Critique for chapter 7:

Really strong chapter! It really shows Lilitu’s struggles, which is something I don’t really remember from previous drafts. Like everyone else is saying, I like how you’re making Cassian a bigger character this time.

My only question would be, how did Lilitu survive? It seems like the Aquinos were…[Read more]

@theducktator

lolol 😂 this is a funny topic

It kinda depends on the book, but a majority of the time I take a long look at the map before I start reading, and then after that I don’t really reference it.
I will look at it if I’m confused, though… 😄😄
 

I will stare at maps before I read it, and afterwards, and will reference it while I’m reading if I need help building the story in my mind.

@theducktator

I look at maps whenever a place is mentioned XD

And because maps are just cool!!! lol

@theducktator

I don’t look at them often. I usually look a couple times in the process of reading to get an idea of where everything is, but I don’t look at them frequently, so a lot if the tine, I don’t know where things are happening.

@linus-smallprint

This character is a lot darker than he appears to be, isn’t he?

Yes. He’s mentally three years old most the time, but angering him means death. He’s a trained assassin who would blindly follow the orders of ‘Omi and they.’

@anyone-curious

The words on my drawing (sorry that they didn’t come out right):

Top left: A strange b…[Read more]

@keilah-h @theshadow

Silvanis

“Great plan, Trevor, just omit the Silvanis and Sniper part. Fairy will handle it alone. If anyone disagrees, they answer to me.” Silvanis crossed his arms, a glow coming to his skin as he spoke.

“Alpha Slit!” Fairy shouted in surprise, “what are you–”

“That goes for you too, little Princess.”

Fairy’s lips set…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @anyone-else

Next chapter…be warned…this one is a little *coughs* sad…and dark and it deals with a really sad reality in our world. So continue reading at your own risk.

Chapter 8

Sticks and Stones

Sef cowered before the large man, blinking back tears.

She wanted to scream with frustration. She had been late again!

She…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Yeah, I was wondering if that was the case! Glad I was able to help!!! 😊

Yes! I love how easy it is to share chapters!

Yeah it took me FOREVER to figure out how to use it, but after over a year of using it I have never ever wanted to go back!

This is the language we came up with…kind of:

All the consonants you gave:

t l n m r k s p sh b f v z d j g w th

Vowels:

let’s just say it’s English vowels for now.

These are the “swears” we came up with:
Scist (Scisto)

Dissar (Dissaros)

And idk what else…XD

@thearcaneaxiom

hahaha

okay

let me go back real quick then…

@thearcaneaxiom

Okay, Tlavian it is! XD why are you so good at this!?!?!

@ellette-giselle

I actually do show a scene of the kids working in the next chapter, and then a couple chapters after that…just wait XD

Okay, good ideas!

I just don’t know how to reveal it all…because those ideas sound so good but when I try to do stuff like that it feels either rushed or too slow 😭😭😭 I’ll figure it out somehow lol

And…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

Oooo… I like the blurb! 😮😀

@rae

Yay!! Thank you! 😊😊

@savannah_grace2009

Chase

Chase looked at her shyly out of the corner of his eye. “I-it’s g-good.” He faced Sef again, his eyebrows growing close together as he concentrated. The color of his eyes warped and somewhat faded away, forming into the picture of a woman with curly brown hair down to her shoulders, a pretty smile and green eyes. “T-that’s her.”

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @thesahdow @highscribeofaetherium @linus-smallprint @grcr @mineralizedwritings

Here are my thoughts and my judging!

Ellette: When I first saw your drawing, my immediate thought was “This is gonna be hard to beat.” You portrayed the hair and the soft features really nicely. You did put the scale on the wrong side, and…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Thank you sooo much, do you have any thoughts/ comments??? I’d love to hear them!

@thearcaneaxiom

Okay great!!!

I guess some of both? Like what the Andromedans would call Him, as well as new names for what the humans could call Him?

@linus-smallprint

Oooh! You use Reedsy too?!?!

I’M NOT THE ONLY ONE!!!
How do you like it??