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@mineralizedwritings

Me like it! The armor and clothing is PERFECT. The face is a little unclear, but yeah, WAY to often I’ve ruined a picture trying to “make it better”. XD

@anyone

What would you guys like to see me draw? You’ve seen ONE drawing and my style is realistic (mostly), and I will take offers to draw someone else’s character if…[Read more]

Also, I think the UNIT does work well, but you might want to come up with a reason it is called that. The definition of a unit is:

an individual thing or person regarded as single and complete but which can also form an individual component of a larger or more complex whole.

So why did the Pythonos name it the UNIT? (In this case you might want to…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

So I read your epilogue and a few things stuck out to me…

(ordered by relevance)

1. I love it.

2. In the first part I almost think you use the Name ‘Great One’ a little to much.

3. While Rishona may grow angry, I doubt in such a perfect world she would try to slap someone with no respect. If Elysium is perfect, and the…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Yes, that definitely makes it clearer. With the cover, it might be better to have the puzzle pieces cover all or at least most of it. Obviously you have a limited amount of pictures to show, but it would probably look better to have more.

@savannah_grace2009

lol. Alright, so I’m still collecting my thoughts a bit, but here’s what I took down so far:

When a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity to become a warrior comes to the southern Burnish orphanages, five of the one hundred competent orphans chose to become warriors. Among those was the quiet and loyal Shrapti Yelper, son of the…[Read more]

@grcr

Okay, what is your story about? I’m intrigued, your mood boards are really interesting!

@jonas

Is this better?

“Scared you?” The boy smirked. His voice was weak, and his hands trembled a bit, but he lifted his chin, and wet his lips with the determination of a warrior, shaking his mess of black hair out of his eyes. His eyes fell on Ottoline. “That’s low,” he looked at the Traitor. “You’re going to have a girl kill me?” Ottoline…

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@jonas @thearcaneaxiom

GUYS….thoughts on this book cover??? I made it last night and idk if I love it or hate it….

@jonas

So, with Marcurious’ concern that Ottoline will want revenge, maybe you could put that in later, the next time they see each other. It seems odd that Marcurious, while he is suffering from the effects of poison and surrounded by his captors, is worried that a fellow prisoner might attack him. He doesn’t even have to notice her, given the…

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@whalekeeper

It’s just when you spend all your time learning to understand other people, you forget to develop your own sense of self, you know? It doesn’t come as easy.

That’s me when I’ve been writing for too long…

@whalekeeper

BrUH I knOw I look sweet and gentle on the outside, but you ain’t seen my stupid side.

😂😂😂 I feel that, lol

Boys are….boys.

@jonas

Although, would that really be the top of his concerns when he sees Ottoline? Both of them are in prison and she’s only part-Azer, so it doesn’t quite seem logical that he would be legitimately worried about her trying to get revenge. It’s a funny reaction, but it relies a lot on the reader connecting all the dots.

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@rae

lol. A RP is short for role play.

@lightoverdarkness6

tysm!!!! <3

@savannah_grace2009

Also, I have some more thought about what I was talking about earlier.

So, with Marcurious’ concern that Ottoline will want revenge, maybe you could put that in later, the next time they see each other. It seems odd that Marcurious, while he is suffering from the effects of poison and surrounded by his captors, is worried t…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

It looks amazing!

@savannah_grace2009

Just out of curiosity, is UNIT an acronym?

@savannah_grace2009

Explain what a RP is to me and I’ll do it. I really need to jog my brain!

@savannah_grace2009

Okay, yikes! Poison!?! A bomb?!?

Although, would that really be the top of his concerns when he sees Ottoline? Both of them are in prison and she’s only part-Azer, so it doesn’t quite seem logical that he would be legitimately worried about her trying to get revenge. It’s a funny reaction, but it relies a lot on the reade…[Read more]

@jonas

okay, i’ll keep that in mind.

In the past two years he had:

• Managed to offend the entire branch of Azers. Let’s just say it involved some dirty words, nearly poisoning their president with a bit of Blue Death leaves (how was he supposed to know they were poisonous?), and a bomb. He was now on the run from blood thirsty Azers bent on r…

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