hanako

So in short, no I don’t think they need to exist for the relevant idea to be present.

@rae

I don’t care. You can do it.

@thearcaneaxiom

I don’t know if it’s been talked about, but this is my understanding of it:

The shards are not the embodiment of the idea they represent, they are a piece of Adonalsium’s personality. Thus, the ideas exist separately from the shards. Basically, being the shard Honor, makes Honor care about that concept. That’s why the Knights…[Read more]

@esther-c

Woops, sorry, that got posted to soon.

Anyways, as I was saying, I like it and you can tell Ami is good friends with Ev.

I don’t think you need an action opening, this introduces your characters nicely and captured me, which is what you want in a first chapter. From my gleaning of info on fist chapters, you want one, above all,…[Read more]

@esther-c

I like it. At some parts it made me laugh, and you definitely portrayed a healthy family (something I never say no to in books) and with the part about the donut and Ev…I was thinking how I would like my crush to do that! XD even though I’ve never had a donut before in my life, and am most likely allergic to it, I would eat it just…[Read more]

@jonas

Would you like to do the honors of chewing out Nahim and Zahlin, if @highscribeofaetherium is okay with it?

Btw the Queen’s presence is needed cuz she’s what they have for a healer, that and the obvious…

@highscribeofaetherium

Sorry it took so long, I didn’t know exactly what to write so whatever is there is what I’ve got.

@highscribeofaetherium

Nahim

Zahlin grasped his hand and pulled him up.

“Peace of Honor.” Nahim wasn’t going to say that you were supposed to grab the wrist, bu t it bothered him inside. He hung his sword off his belt as Zahlin slumped against the wall breathing heavily, blood coming from a few wounds. That was when Nahim himself realized he…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

I also forgot to mention, when he’s compressing/dilating time, his interactions with other objects are unpredictable, due to the nature of messing with spacetime. So that forces him to turn it off if he wants to guarantee a hit. Otherwise his attack might just phase through them.

@esther-c

Ok! If you do wanna read the chapter, I posted it like two posts above this one.

Ooo, great!! I read it just now, and I don’t think it’s information-dumping at all!

Oh yeah, ok. That’s true. Sometimes I feel like there’s a lot of writers saying to have some kind of action in the first chapter, and others saying that you just need to sho…

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@jonas

Ok I guess…

@highscribeofaetherium

He has to be careful to ration his Resonance. He has no idea how long he’ll be there, and get can’t get more. And if he runs out, he isn’t much of a threat.

@jonas

He seems rather OP lol.

Alright, here he is.
Lord Vilsayor

Vilsayor is a nobleman and Crystal Binder from the planet Ildin. He is arrogant, condescending, cruel, and remorseless.

He’s fairly tall. Idk, let’s say 6’5”. His eyes…I’ll say…yellow. Why not? His hair is well groomed, black with gray in it, and he has a trimmed beard and mustache.

He wears a fancy navy bl…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

Hold on…typing up RP’s now

Zahlin

Zahlin slowly nodded and extended his hand to pull Nahim to his feet. “Peace of Honor.”

Now that his adrenaline was wearing off, pain flared in his various wounds. Zahlin slumped against the wall and slowly slid down to the ground, breathing heavily.

Footsteps pounded in the hallway. The door swung open.

***

Ok, this is taking too lon…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

how do you guys write them so fast? 😅

When I get in a mood, it’s like doing freestyle in a speedo as fast as you can. I also had to type out a lot of things last year and I decided to just get used to typing in this age of tech. Believe me it used to take two minutes per sentence!

@jonas

Give me a few minutes to get my brain jogging…