Gracie

@Anne-Of-Lothlorien too late. 😀

Thanks, Gabby. (People call you Gabby, right?)

I should be fine right now, but after I finish this chapter, I’m going to have to take a serious look at my plot ideas. Right now, everything I’ve come up with is in a garbled mess. @winter-rose

Nothing is wrong with it. The problem is me.

It’ll be okay. I just have to get all my ideas down. It would help if I could figure out what the plot is… @winter-rose

My WIP is still a baby…I’m writing the third chapter. Maybe.

Um, my WIP isn’t being cooperative. At all. @winter-rose

What are you working on? @winter-rose

I’m here. @winter-rose

@That_Writer_Girl_99 yep. And thoughts are actually the least necessary of those three. Oftentimes I just cut them out and let the actions tell the story. Emotions and actions go a long way to cluing people in on what someone’s thinking. 😉 😛

Yeah… maybe it means easy as eating pie? XD

Okay. So…instead of showing her thoughts, show her actions, emotions, and thoughts simultaneously. Easy as pie.

Why do we say that anyway? Pie is actually very complicated?

@kate-flournoy

Now I’m hungry.

@That_Writer_Girl_99 *hugs you*

Well, to be honest, I didn’t know what was happening. It seemed rather vague. I wasn’t sure why the two boys were outside their house, or why they were afraid of going back in.

Maybe, since you have a few words left, you could tweak it a bit to explain what’s going on? @dragon-snapper

@that_writer_girl_99 What about the beginning confused you? What do you think could be done to make it more clear?

@elly I’m sorry for my lateness. I guess you could say that I’m toast. 😛
Anyways…welcome to the forum, enjoy the fun, and watch out for dragons. 😛

Wow! This is actually pretty neat, Snapper!

Admittedly, I didn’t know what was going on for the first part of the story, but the final paragraphs really tied everything together. Birds. I LOL-ed.

I like the different forms of alliteration here. Your descriptions were very crisp and clear; I could easily visualize what was happening.

I don’t…[Read more]

@lola-jane I’m late…*sniff sniff* I’m sorry.
Anyways…HELLO! *blows you away with giant dragon hello!*
Do you play any instruments?

@f5a8c3e92 (sorry, just trying to tag you. 😛 )
Nuts. Did I really type the title as Shorty?
@daeus Are you able to make it ‘Short Story-Mystery’ ? 😛

@f5a8c3e9

@f5a8c9e3

I have no words @kate-flournoy Thank you.